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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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Nicely done. this is a simply beautiful Picture to go with your poem. You write very well. I wonder if you could tell me about the Fibonacci form of poetry. I have been all over the site and can't seem to land on it. It looks beautiful. Karen

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    Fibonacci poem

    Fibonacci poetry is not new. It?s been around in one form or another for centuries.

    Gregory K. Pincus made it popular in 2006. Pincus came up with Fibs while pondering a haiku writing exercise.

    Form: six-lines and 20-syllable poem.
    The number of syllables in each line of the poem is the sum of the previous two lines: 1, 1, 2, 3, 5, 8. "The constrained form makes you very conscious of word choice, like with haiku.


    Example

    One
    Small,
    Precise,
    Poetic,
    Spiraling mixture:
    Math plus poetry yields the Fib.



    Example

    Fib Time

    Tell
    Fibs.
    What time?
    Every day
    Two seconds before
    Clocks hit 11:24.


    Example

    This
    form
    forces
    fine feelings
    into abstruse lines
    each longer longing to affix.


    Example


    I
    spend
    my days
    wondering
    if Lion Brand Fun Fur
    will make a nice pair of undies.

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    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 15-Jan-2024
    I should have remembered that. I need a new battery. Thanks very much for your help. Karen
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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The boy in the image looks so forlorn. The words that you have written relate to the picture. The boy is poor but he turns his life around and becomes famous.

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
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The picture was so sad. The poor kid's eyes were void of joy. He held himself like someone who had worked their lives in a coal mine. Hopefully, he still carries his dreams in his heart. Gretchen

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Doesn't that image speak volumes, hardly needing any words? Yet your fine senryu completes the final touch, willing this young boy's journey to end and for some loving care to be wrapped around him. Thank you for sharing your excellent verse. Debbie

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
    Thank you very much, Debbie.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from aryr
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This was a wonderful haiku, Gypsy. The picture was great, it showed the way that the poor were treated and are still treated today. Poorly! Very well done and sadly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
    Thank you very much, Aryr.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by aryr on 13-Jan-2024
    Most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from shelley kaye
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cool pic and history!

good, powerfully thought-provoking senryu
excellent satori still full of hope...

thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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 Comment Written 13-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
    Thank you very much, Shelley.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I've mention so many times about children would never live in poverty. Of course, they do, and it continues to be a problem. I've even questioned God why children are born into that life or why children are born into abusive home. I've never gotten an answer. Sorry, I'm rambling. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
    It's true, it's sad for all victims but specially the innocent children.

    Thank you very much, Barbara.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from patcelaw
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This is beautifully written, and it tells quite a story. I enjoyed it very much as I listened to it. I wish you the very best with all of your writing and I also wish you a very good day and nice weekend. Patric.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
    Thank you very much, my friend.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Gloria ....
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A haunting photograph, and your senryu captures the feeling of needing to get out of this place, the horrible poverty that usually follows one around for a lifetime, unless something else intervenes, changing the direction.

Well done, Gypsy. Much is said in good social commentary.

Gloria

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
    Thank you very much, my friend. Yes, I feel bad for all the victims but specially the innocent children.

    Thank you very much, my friend.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Douglas Goff
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Cute kid. His eyes really do haunt. you caught a moment here with this poem. i do not think the world well ever defeat poverty. too much greed out there. great poem, my friend!
Douglas

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
    Thank you very much, my friend.

    Gypsy hugs