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A Touch of Fire

Extreme situations call for extreme measures

6 total reviews 
Comment from BermyBye50
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Mia,

Welcome to Fanstory! You've written a thrilling intro to what could grow into a spectacular short story worthy of Reader's Digest. Your story is intensely compelling thus capturing the attention of this reader from the opening line. You ended the story with a cliff hanger that leaves one wanting to know what happened to Jane. Well done.

All the best,

Eugene

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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I love the momentum in your 100 word flash. A great exercise here in building up tension as the victim comes to and realises the danger she's in, finding no other alternative than to jump through the window. Your image complements the scene very effectively. Just one small edit: Sweat bled from her (pores). Thanks for sharing and good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    I am so glad you enjoyed it and thank you for pointing out the error.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
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Wouldn't it be awful to experience something like a raging fire? Prayers to God that he'll keep us safe from the unexpected flames of life. Like your story but I'm glad it's fiction.

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    Thank you
Comment from rspoet
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Hello Author,
This is a fiery entry for the contest with very good description
and a good ending as well. the third floor is a ways up, not sure how well
Jane landed. I think I might have opened the window first.
Nicely done.
Best wishes and good luck in the voting.
Robert

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from T.A. Walk
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Wonderful entry, great job!! I tried my first short, short piece for an 80-word flash fiction contest!!

I have no SPAG critique to offer.

Thank you for sharing your work. Good luck with the contest!!

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    Thank you for reading. I will be sure to check you out.
Comment from Navada
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This is very vivid and arresting. Your descriptions are very real and it's clear why she would take the risk to exit through the window - some potential broken bones trump burning to death. Thanks for the share and good luck for the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2024

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
    Thank you