Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Miles"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
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Comment from LJbutterfly
This chapter sounds like you have been exposed to people you feel you can trust. When C said he was leaving, but called you "My woman" I know your heart melted and You felt you had finally found love. Regardless to what happens, you will begin a new life with things you love, and new challenges. That's what life is all about...routines, beauty, conflict, and resolution. I'm hoping for the best during your journey.
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This chapter sounds like you have been exposed to people you feel you can trust. When C said he was leaving, but called you "My woman" I know your heart melted and You felt you had finally found love. Regardless to what happens, you will begin a new life with things you love, and new challenges. That's what life is all about...routines, beauty, conflict, and resolution. I'm hoping for the best during your journey.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
Comment from EILEEN LAW
Very good and well written with poetry proves and verbage. Keep going and I look forward to the next chapter. I look forward to seeing what happens next in this poor woman's life
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Very good and well written with poetry proves and verbage. Keep going and I look forward to the next chapter. I look forward to seeing what happens next in this poor woman's life
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
While I'm happy that you're finally getting a sense of what life can be like, I wish that you had perhaps spent a little more time with P and his family, although that had to come to and end eventually as well. When you're young, you view love through rose colored glasses, seeing what you want to see, discarding the unpleasant, and believing in fairy tales and happily ever after. Of course you can't go through life cynical, there are lots of good things that happen to us every day, but it's always wise to listen to that still, small voice in the back of your mind that suggests we proceed with caution. I guess we'll see what happened. I suspect it will be a reality check.
On a different note, I won't ask if you're near a town, but I'm curious if where you're moving to has access to the internet, and God forbid, should you experience an emergency, a way to contact someone who lives close enough to help you. Life happens, even in the best of circumstances, and as much as possible we need to be prepared for it. Will there be any pictures of your new home? It sounds delightful.
Have a blessed evening gal.
Tom
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Hello Lea,
While I'm happy that you're finally getting a sense of what life can be like, I wish that you had perhaps spent a little more time with P and his family, although that had to come to and end eventually as well. When you're young, you view love through rose colored glasses, seeing what you want to see, discarding the unpleasant, and believing in fairy tales and happily ever after. Of course you can't go through life cynical, there are lots of good things that happen to us every day, but it's always wise to listen to that still, small voice in the back of your mind that suggests we proceed with caution. I guess we'll see what happened. I suspect it will be a reality check.
On a different note, I won't ask if you're near a town, but I'm curious if where you're moving to has access to the internet, and God forbid, should you experience an emergency, a way to contact someone who lives close enough to help you. Life happens, even in the best of circumstances, and as much as possible we need to be prepared for it. Will there be any pictures of your new home? It sounds delightful.
Have a blessed evening gal.
Tom
Comment Written 13-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Hi Tom yes I'm going to update all of you on the situation the home it's state where it's at and I will have internet for sure I'll have to operate through a smart hub though which is okay. I'll have cell service all those good things required more I will tell you in the chapters thank you my friend for writing and reading and offering your thoughts. I cannot regret leaving the home of Mrs B because my further actions gave me my oldest son who's a man to be proud of today. I made many mistakes in those days and I continue to make them not because I want to but because there's so much to learn that I didn't get to however at this stage in my life I surely would have made different choices however I remain close to this family to this day even though Mr and Mrs B have passed on, I am close two or two sons. Thank you Tom it's always I appreciate your insight your kind comments and your unique way of looking at things all very much appreciated by me I hope your day is amazing!
Comment from Ric Myworld
We never know how anything is going to turn out, but we just have to keep sticking our heads in the ovens to see if it burns. And hopefully, at some point it's full of cherries and whipped cream. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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We never know how anything is going to turn out, but we just have to keep sticking our heads in the ovens to see if it burns. And hopefully, at some point it's full of cherries and whipped cream. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Cherries and whipped cream works for me! You're exactly right we don't know how things will turn out we can only hope for the best and prep for the worst! Thank you again Ric, I appreciate you I like your perspective so much cuz your world was similar to mine. Thank you again my friend for your review thank you for your kindness and for your insight and your unique perspective hope your day is great!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I think this chapter has a more hopeful, eager tone throughout. It seems like things were working out to go on to a new phase of life. But there are hints that it still didn't work out as expected, either. I noticed another reviewer gave some helpful punctuation hints. The font looks smaller starting with this sentence:
P came down and we all ate companionably. When we were done I told Mrs. B what happened the previous day and that I wished to go with C.
I would put a comma after the word 'down' in the first sentence of those two. I suggest putting a comma after When we were done in the second sentence.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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I think this chapter has a more hopeful, eager tone throughout. It seems like things were working out to go on to a new phase of life. But there are hints that it still didn't work out as expected, either. I noticed another reviewer gave some helpful punctuation hints. The font looks smaller starting with this sentence:
P came down and we all ate companionably. When we were done I told Mrs. B what happened the previous day and that I wished to go with C.
I would put a comma after the word 'down' in the first sentence of those two. I suggest putting a comma after When we were done in the second sentence.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Once again I thank you so much you are an amazing with your and I appreciate all that you say you look at things from different angles which is another great Mark of a reviewer thank you so much and for the edits precious I hope you have a wonderful day!
Comment from Tetamarina66
As I read this I feel as if I am watching a movie on TV. In fact I think it is suitable to be a movie. Scenes visually go in my mind as I read.
Dang it's icy outside. It was hell getting home last night
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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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As I read this I feel as if I am watching a movie on TV. In fact I think it is suitable to be a movie. Scenes visually go in my mind as I read.
Dang it's icy outside. It was hell getting home last night
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Comment Written 12-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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It is very icy outside and still icy outside! Cold is going to last a little bit longer I'm afraid I just took the drive into the mountains and it is -40 up there. Thank you again my fine friend offering your rating and your kind remarks enjoy your day!
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Yeah it?s hell out there
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yeah damn right its icy outside. Today it was somewhat decent to go out to get some food before the next snowstorm hits this week.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this with us. I am betting things didn't go as hoped for.
Now, if what he told me is true, than how can I blame him. (true, then how...)
"Oh...I see." I said, looking down at my hands. (I see," I said looking at my hands.)
C smiled and took my hands in his, "I want you (his.)
I smiled and he began telling me what to expect and when we will leave. (comma after 'smiled,' you switched subjects)
which will have to be quick." He explained. (quick," he
"I'll talk to Mrs. B tonight." I said happily. (tonight,')
I haven't edited any further. You really need to keep an eye on your dialogue.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you for sharing this with us. I am betting things didn't go as hoped for.
Now, if what he told me is true, than how can I blame him. (true, then how...)
"Oh...I see." I said, looking down at my hands. (I see," I said looking at my hands.)
C smiled and took my hands in his, "I want you (his.)
I smiled and he began telling me what to expect and when we will leave. (comma after 'smiled,' you switched subjects)
which will have to be quick." He explained. (quick," he
"I'll talk to Mrs. B tonight." I said happily. (tonight,')
I haven't edited any further. You really need to keep an eye on your dialogue.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you Barbara yes dialogue is important you're right I do need to keep an eye on it although I think I'm doing it okay I go back and I change things and I had commas or I'll switch them their places but absolutely I have to find some way to resolve that as soon as I have moved away which is in another week I think I'll take a course thank you very much again Barbara gold to me it is truly precious! Again my apologies for such a late return I have been away and I hope to get moving soon! Thank you again I hope you have a wonderful day!
Comment from Jim Wile
Gosh, Lea, I hope you don't see yourself as "Writing terms of your disentanglement--Blindingly indulging your thankless blind whim." That would be your mother's perspective. These books of yours are certainly no thankless, blind whim. They are and will undoubtedly be serving to inform and educate others of the horrors of child abuse and the failures of social services to protect you from it. Many will thank you for this.
Yay! No more rats in the walls. I'm so happy for you that you've found a new home in the place you love, far away from the torments of your past life. May you live long and prosper there, to quote a famous sci-fi character.
Such a sweet part of your story, Lea, this liaison with C. He's given you a chance to move on with your life now. You've had a wonderful year with the Bs but you seem ready to move on. This has such potential to be good, but I keep thinking of the song from Les Mis called "I Dreamed a Dream" in which Fantine relates the tale of her youth when her man loved her and left her with a baby to struggle for the rest of her shortened life. I fear that's what's coming next for you. "Say it ain't so, Joe." - Jim
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Gosh, Lea, I hope you don't see yourself as "Writing terms of your disentanglement--Blindingly indulging your thankless blind whim." That would be your mother's perspective. These books of yours are certainly no thankless, blind whim. They are and will undoubtedly be serving to inform and educate others of the horrors of child abuse and the failures of social services to protect you from it. Many will thank you for this.
Yay! No more rats in the walls. I'm so happy for you that you've found a new home in the place you love, far away from the torments of your past life. May you live long and prosper there, to quote a famous sci-fi character.
Such a sweet part of your story, Lea, this liaison with C. He's given you a chance to move on with your life now. You've had a wonderful year with the Bs but you seem ready to move on. This has such potential to be good, but I keep thinking of the song from Les Mis called "I Dreamed a Dream" in which Fantine relates the tale of her youth when her man loved her and left her with a baby to struggle for the rest of her shortened life. I fear that's what's coming next for you. "Say it ain't so, Joe." - Jim
Comment Written 12-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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As you know life has many ups and downs because of my lack of knowledge in my years behind of what it is to be out in the world as I said I made many mistakes but I also learn from them so are they mistakes really they're just something I know not to do next but it does matter when others are involved and hearts could be hurt so I am mindful of all these things. Thank you my fine friend for your kind review and your wonderful rating I am honored and pleased to receive them!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Oy. And what should be so happy and optimistic has that deadly undertow to it. You have such a good knack for knowing the perfect way to keep us invested. Looking forward to what's coming next.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Oy. And what should be so happy and optimistic has that deadly undertow to it. You have such a good knack for knowing the perfect way to keep us invested. Looking forward to what's coming next.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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Thank you Rachelle what kind thing to say! I always appreciate your reviews and your suggestions for correction all of your points of view I find intriguing and very helpful to me so thank you for that sorry for my late response as you know I was away I hope your day is amazing thanks again!
Comment from BethShelby
This sounds like a good thing and I'm sure it some ways it was. Life has its up and downs and we can we never know for sure what is next. I'll look forward to finding out. I'm curious about this new place you're moving to. Will you live alone? Is it a community or a cabin in the woods? Or you renting or owning? Tell us more about what it is like.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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This sounds like a good thing and I'm sure it some ways it was. Life has its up and downs and we can we never know for sure what is next. I'll look forward to finding out. I'm curious about this new place you're moving to. Will you live alone? Is it a community or a cabin in the woods? Or you renting or owning? Tell us more about what it is like.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2024
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I will do thank you for the suggestion and thank you for your excellent review too oh yeah I'll be writing a chapter today with some details about that! And what a drive it was through the mountains in the middle of January. Luckily I know all about driving in snow being Canadian I would hope so! Lol thank you Beth I love your curiosity have an amazing day!
