Kindergarten Fun
(Learning is just a mystery)!10 total reviews
Comment from artisart4u
Your poem is nice about a child's day at school. Lots of people will never forget those days.
Your poem has rhyme and I like the colors, and picture.
Good luck with your poem.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2024
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Your poem is nice about a child's day at school. Lots of people will never forget those days.
Your poem has rhyme and I like the colors, and picture.
Good luck with your poem.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2024
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Thank you so very much for the lovely review of Kindergarten Fun! I'm so happy you enjoyed and so much appreciate all your comments. Thank you again and have a wonderful evening!
Comment from jim vecchio
Thank you for those wonderful memories of our school days and a tribute to all the Miss Sigmans that meant so much to our growing minds and hearts. I believe this will do very well in the contest!
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you for those wonderful memories of our school days and a tribute to all the Miss Sigmans that meant so much to our growing minds and hearts. I believe this will do very well in the contest!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Jim, for the lovely review! It was fun to write and am so happy you enjoyed the memories it brought back. Thank you again and have a wonderful day!
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I guess if the writer has fun, the reader can't help sharing the feelings!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a skilful write, full of fun and magical rhymes and perfect metre and a joy to read. A fine entry for the contest, I wish you luck as I think this is a winner, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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This is a skilful write, full of fun and magical rhymes and perfect metre and a joy to read. A fine entry for the contest, I wish you luck as I think this is a winner, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you so very much, Dolly, for the lovely review! A fun one to write (actually wrote it for my daughter and granddaughter - both Kindergarten teachers)! Thank you again and have a beautiful day!
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, this hots the nail on the head, and I have written a poem as looking through the eyes of a child, but to write this well,one would have to be well practised, this is beautifully written, and a very worthy entry in this poetry contest, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Oh yes, this hots the nail on the head, and I have written a poem as looking through the eyes of a child, but to write this well,one would have to be well practised, this is beautifully written, and a very worthy entry in this poetry contest, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you so very much, Roy, for this lovely review. I appreciate the kind words about my writing and am so very happy you enjoyed! Thank you again and have a wonderful day!
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Most welcome
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
very cool poem for a teacher and her students. I love the way the verses sound as we read each stanza. Well-written for sure. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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very cool poem for a teacher and her students. I love the way the verses sound as we read each stanza. Well-written for sure. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you so very much for the wonderful review - I'm so happy you enjoyed! Thank you again and have a lovely day!
Comment from Wendy G
A very engaging post for young children in the 4 to 6 year-old range, as it describes perfectly the activities likely to be encountered each day, and it all sounds lik fun with your enthusiastic approach. Well done. Best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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A very engaging post for young children in the 4 to 6 year-old range, as it describes perfectly the activities likely to be encountered each day, and it all sounds lik fun with your enthusiastic approach. Well done. Best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Wendy - than you so very much for the lovely review! I'm so happy that you enjoyed! Thank you again and have a beautiful day!
Comment from Michele Harber
This is such a perfect description of a typical school day, and I'm certain any elementary school student will easily relate. I love that you've given us a series of characters, including teachers and students, and that you've managed to find rhymes for even the tough names like Michael. ("Recycle" was the perfect choice.)
Your rhymes are well chosen and, for the most part, your poem flows smoothly. There are just three lines where I felt the rhythm was off by one syllable. Below are the three lines and ways I'd suggest you edit them, if you agree:
- "America's first President" could become "the first U.S. president."
- "(So moms and dads can take a peek)" can read "(So your folks can take a peek)."
- "To show them what we've learned this week!" can leave out the word "them."
I think that, if you make these or similar changes, we'll get over those very few bumps in an otherwise excellent piece.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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This is such a perfect description of a typical school day, and I'm certain any elementary school student will easily relate. I love that you've given us a series of characters, including teachers and students, and that you've managed to find rhymes for even the tough names like Michael. ("Recycle" was the perfect choice.)
Your rhymes are well chosen and, for the most part, your poem flows smoothly. There are just three lines where I felt the rhythm was off by one syllable. Below are the three lines and ways I'd suggest you edit them, if you agree:
- "America's first President" could become "the first U.S. president."
- "(So moms and dads can take a peek)" can read "(So your folks can take a peek)."
- "To show them what we've learned this week!" can leave out the word "them."
I think that, if you make these or similar changes, we'll get over those very few bumps in an otherwise excellent piece.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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Thanks, Michele, for your lovely review - I'm so happy you enjoyed! And thanks, too, for the suggestions. Have a wonderful day!
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You're very welcome, and I most definitely enjoyed. I'm sure you understand that the editing suggestions are only because I want to see an already excellent poem be the best it can be.
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Thank you again! I appreciate your thoughtful suggestions :)
Have a wonderful day!
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Thank you, and you as well.
Comment from Navada
I'm biased because I'm a teacher (of secondary students), but how inspiring a good primary teacher is when working with students in very formative years. Thanks for the share.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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I'm biased because I'm a teacher (of secondary students), but how inspiring a good primary teacher is when working with students in very formative years. Thanks for the share.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much, Navada, for the wonderful review! I'm so happy you enjoyed! I actually wrote this one for my daughter AND granddaughter (both Kindergarten teachers)! Thank you again and have a beautiful day!
Comment from mrsmajor
This poem has got to be the winner..its written so well, rhyming and rhythm when reading is really nice, and the story being told, makes a lot of sense..I enjoyed this very much, and I do believe a child would like it too.All the best, and good luck in the contests...This is a good entry...Thanks for sharing!
Warmly,
Victoria
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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This poem has got to be the winner..its written so well, rhyming and rhythm when reading is really nice, and the story being told, makes a lot of sense..I enjoyed this very much, and I do believe a child would like it too.All the best, and good luck in the contests...This is a good entry...Thanks for sharing!
Warmly,
Victoria
Comment Written 07-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Victoria, for the lovely review! It was fun to write and am so happy you enjoyed! Thanks again and have a wonderful week!
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You're very welcome,.....! you have a wonderful week also...Stay safe, and be Well...
Hugs,
Victoria
Comment from T.A. Walk
As soon as I started reading I thought this was for the contest!! Just saw this prompt!! Good luck!!
I have no SPAG critique to offer. Writing seems familiar :)
Thank you for sharing!!
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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As soon as I started reading I thought this was for the contest!! Just saw this prompt!! Good luck!!
I have no SPAG critique to offer. Writing seems familiar :)
Thank you for sharing!!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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So happy you enjoyed, T.A... It was quite fun to write and I appreciate your taking time to review! Thank you so much and have a wonderful week!