Camping Fun
When day is done it's...4 total reviews
Comment from Mintybee
I love this one. It could be a picture book! The rhyme and rhythm move along quickly and playfully. The excitement of the outdoors is paired with the closeness of the backyard. There's action, food, laughter, nature...It's a really fun read.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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I love this one. It could be a picture book! The rhyme and rhythm move along quickly and playfully. The excitement of the outdoors is paired with the closeness of the backyard. There's action, food, laughter, nature...It's a really fun read.
Mintybee
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thank you for this fantastic starry review. I appreciate it so much. :)
Comment from Brenda Strauser
My kids loved camping. I did too. We did all the things that you listed. I enjoyed reading this poem. Words go well with poem. Well written. Great job.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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My kids loved camping. I did too. We did all the things that you listed. I enjoyed reading this poem. Words go well with poem. Well written. Great job.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much, l appreciate you taking the time to read my poem. :)
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Comment from Mimi Linny
How cute is this children's poem with wonderful rhyming descriptions of camping in the great outdoors (even if its just in the backyard)! I have just one slight suggestion for the rhythm of the third stanza, 1st line. May I suggest changing to the following (I think this will eliminate an extra syllable that, to me, does throw off your otherwise perfect rhythm):
"Two sisters, Mom and Dad and I"
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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How cute is this children's poem with wonderful rhyming descriptions of camping in the great outdoors (even if its just in the backyard)! I have just one slight suggestion for the rhythm of the third stanza, 1st line. May I suggest changing to the following (I think this will eliminate an extra syllable that, to me, does throw off your otherwise perfect rhythm):
"Two sisters, Mom and Dad and I"
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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That's a terrific suggestion, l've already changed it. Thanks so much for your help. :)
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You are very welcome! Have a beautiful day!
Comment from Julie Helms
Ha ha, this brought back memories of me camping in my backyard. But I rarely made it through the night before running back in the house! And hotdogs cut up in spaghetti... Best thing ever! Very humorous enjoyed it a lot. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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Ha ha, this brought back memories of me camping in my backyard. But I rarely made it through the night before running back in the house! And hotdogs cut up in spaghetti... Best thing ever! Very humorous enjoyed it a lot. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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Thank you for such a nice review, l really appreciate lt. :)