Once Upon a Time
There was a girl ...15 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry about unreturned love. I didn't feel a lot of pain or emotion in this entry, so I'm guessing it wasn't overly serious on either side. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry about unreturned love. I didn't feel a lot of pain or emotion in this entry, so I'm guessing it wasn't overly serious on either side. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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An eighty word challenge limits the depth of the subject matter but it was good for the moment and passed.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Tom,
This is a nicely told compact story of how love changes lives. It shows how you can open yourself even if the love isn't returned. Unrequited love is hared when it happens but it is still a good experience of life. We always
remember our first love.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good day.
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Hi Tom,
This is a nicely told compact story of how love changes lives. It shows how you can open yourself even if the love isn't returned. Unrequited love is hared when it happens but it is still a good experience of life. We always
remember our first love.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good day.
Good luck in the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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You are so nice to give advice and help this waif by being a fail-safe with my writing and actually posting a review. Thank you.
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You are most kindly welcome, Tom..
Joan
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Tom, this story is very heartfelt. A tender heart is an open heart.
Your writing is a story that many people can relate to. Good twist in the ending. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. Margaret ~ LateBloomer
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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Hi Tom, this story is very heartfelt. A tender heart is an open heart.
Your writing is a story that many people can relate to. Good twist in the ending. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. Margaret ~ LateBloomer
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024
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You are so kind to take the time, and not only read what I had writ but then as an added bonus wrote a review and for that if I have a nomination to give it will be yours. My bllomin' days have past.
Comment from Navada
I like this piece of flash fiction and the sad little twist we encounter in the final five words. I like being able to take a situation and fictionalise it in the way I wish so the outcome works better for me - part of the joy of writing! :)
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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I like this piece of flash fiction and the sad little twist we encounter in the final five words. I like being able to take a situation and fictionalise it in the way I wish so the outcome works better for me - part of the joy of writing! :)
Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thanks for a great review and understanding
Comment from BethShelby
This is a excllent capture picture an cuteflash. It is true that certains songswe haven't heard in a lot time can recreate a time an place in my mind.
Everytime I heard that all girls quartet singing Mr. Sandman bring me a dream, I can see myself getting dressed for my first date.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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This is a excllent capture picture an cuteflash. It is true that certains songswe haven't heard in a lot time can recreate a time an place in my mind.
Everytime I heard that all girls quartet singing Mr. Sandman bring me a dream, I can see myself getting dressed for my first date.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Hope your new year is meeting expectations. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine memory here Tom as your passion was awakened by this encounter and you made me smile here. A fine reflection on your youthful days, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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A fine memory here Tom as your passion was awakened by this encounter and you made me smile here. A fine reflection on your youthful days, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Bet you have a tale to tell, too. When did it all began ... you see boys for toys rather then "thems?"
Comment from GWHARGIS
There is a certain beautiful thing about that one person who becomes an untouchable fantasy. You never need to speak with them or have any interaction. Thos was great. Gretchen
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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There is a certain beautiful thing about that one person who becomes an untouchable fantasy. You never need to speak with them or have any interaction. Thos was great. Gretchen
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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My heartbeat stills increases thinking to those days
Thank you
Comment from jmdg1954
He had a crush on the girl with long brown curls... the girl with the long brown curls is holding a can of orange crush. Hmmm, any coincidence. Haha...
Good short flash, Tom. Best of luck in the contest.
John
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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He had a crush on the girl with long brown curls... the girl with the long brown curls is holding a can of orange crush. Hmmm, any coincidence. Haha...
Good short flash, Tom. Best of luck in the contest.
John
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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Thanks, John
Comment from Jim Wile
This was a neat flash story, Tom. Sad, in that the affection and willingness to share with this brown-haired beauty was unreciprocated, but the good feelings came through. I liked the analogy of the bouncing ball over the words of the old songs. I remember those. Nicely done. - Jim
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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This was a neat flash story, Tom. Sad, in that the affection and willingness to share with this brown-haired beauty was unreciprocated, but the good feelings came through. I liked the analogy of the bouncing ball over the words of the old songs. I remember those. Nicely done. - Jim
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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Those who read May muse what in the h? is he talking about but we seniors relate
Be well
Comment from Ric Myworld
I would be willing to guess that you are the person who likes/liked the girls as much as I did/do. But being older keeps me from getting into trouble. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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I would be willing to guess that you are the person who likes/liked the girls as much as I did/do. But being older keeps me from getting into trouble. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2024
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As long as I can see I am going to look
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I'm with you!
