The flower
Amazon9 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Iza,
This is an interesting story of what seems like faith but more like repentance. It seems like Maddy is paying for taking a flower by becoming one. Now she is knocking to come out. This also is a warning not to trust strangers.
Congrats for the honorable mentions in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good rest of the day and week.
Joan
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Hi Iza,
This is an interesting story of what seems like faith but more like repentance. It seems like Maddy is paying for taking a flower by becoming one. Now she is knocking to come out. This also is a warning not to trust strangers.
Congrats for the honorable mentions in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good rest of the day and week.
Joan
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
Comment from Ric Myworld
Now I'll be afraid of little yellow flowers; especially, the ones with teeth. And everywhere I go, I'll be straining to hear those little voices crying out for help. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2024
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Now I'll be afraid of little yellow flowers; especially, the ones with teeth. And everywhere I go, I'll be straining to hear those little voices crying out for help. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much for reading.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Well, Miss Iza. That is a creepy spin about. I did find myself wondering if you meant the jungle or the online shopping titan.
Anyways, great piece of work. Good luck in the upcoming competition.
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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Well, Miss Iza. That is a creepy spin about. I did find myself wondering if you meant the jungle or the online shopping titan.
Anyways, great piece of work. Good luck in the upcoming competition.
D
Comment Written 10-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much Mr. Douglas:)it's an honor for my work to be reviewed by yourself.
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Feeling is mutual!
Comment from Navada
This is very creative and interesting. It really does focus our attention on how we interact with the environment and encourage us to be mindful when randomly picking flowers! :)
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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This is very creative and interesting. It really does focus our attention on how we interact with the environment and encourage us to be mindful when randomly picking flowers! :)
Comment Written 10-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Yup, it's so true. And I do have a bad habit to pick up flowers.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I thought Maddy was older at the beginning of the contest entry. I guess I was wrong. I enjoyed reading this creative entry. Thank you for sharing it with us. Good luck with the contest.
The next day, (The following day...)
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I thought Maddy was older at the beginning of the contest entry. I guess I was wrong. I enjoyed reading this creative entry. Thank you for sharing it with us. Good luck with the contest.
The next day, (The following day...)
Comment Written 07-Jan-2024
Comment from estory
This was a great little fairy tale. There is an eerieness to it, this strange knock knock on the door and in the head of the girl. And the spooky thing is that the voice doesn't identify itself, or really promise anything. And I like how you had the girl replaced with the flower she took from the rainforest. On some level it speaks to our intervention with nature and it is a voice for our respect of nature. estory
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This was a great little fairy tale. There is an eerieness to it, this strange knock knock on the door and in the head of the girl. And the spooky thing is that the voice doesn't identify itself, or really promise anything. And I like how you had the girl replaced with the flower she took from the rainforest. On some level it speaks to our intervention with nature and it is a voice for our respect of nature. estory
Comment Written 07-Jan-2024
Comment from lyenochka
Well, that is quite the mystery! I think you created some new form of supernatural fiction that the environmentalists would love! Best wishes in the contest!
By the way, I suggest changing your formatting to go to a new paragraph when you change speaker like:
"You were wrong; now you need to restore the balance. Let me in, and you will be free."
Maddy cried: "Fine, come in! But please don't hurt me!"
"I promise you will feel nothing."
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Well, that is quite the mystery! I think you created some new form of supernatural fiction that the environmentalists would love! Best wishes in the contest!
By the way, I suggest changing your formatting to go to a new paragraph when you change speaker like:
"You were wrong; now you need to restore the balance. Let me in, and you will be free."
Maddy cried: "Fine, come in! But please don't hurt me!"
"I promise you will feel nothing."
Comment Written 06-Jan-2024
Comment from Erin sauce
I like the idea of what's being talked about and where Ur gin with it but what now it ended to skin and and to me it kind seemed like it was ran through way to fast without enough details.i like it but I think you could do much better.but who am I to judge another its just my opinion.but good luck with your writing ,respectfully. Erin sauce
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I like the idea of what's being talked about and where Ur gin with it but what now it ended to skin and and to me it kind seemed like it was ran through way to fast without enough details.i like it but I think you could do much better.but who am I to judge another its just my opinion.but good luck with your writing ,respectfully. Erin sauce
Comment Written 06-Jan-2024
Comment from Raul1
I found this story quite suspenseful and full of mystery. It is perfect for the horror genre. You told a well-told story. I did enjoy reading it. Excellent work! Good luck!
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I found this story quite suspenseful and full of mystery. It is perfect for the horror genre. You told a well-told story. I did enjoy reading it. Excellent work! Good luck!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2024