Dreams to Pursue
We all need a dream6 total reviews
Comment from Katiesherrill
This piece says a lot with few words. We typically dream about selfish pursuits. Your character here dreams of making the world better and making life better for others. I also like how your character is older but isn't going to stop trying to make a positive impact. So often we just complain about how the world has fallen. Your character wants to be a part of the solution. We could all learn from that.
Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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This piece says a lot with few words. We typically dream about selfish pursuits. Your character here dreams of making the world better and making life better for others. I also like how your character is older but isn't going to stop trying to make a positive impact. So often we just complain about how the world has fallen. Your character wants to be a part of the solution. We could all learn from that.
Well done.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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Thanks for these words. They are an encouragement to keep on and to be part of the solution. --Judy
Comment from Navada
This is such an appropriate desire and we all wish that it would be universal. I like the idea of Avery doing a good deed every day and hoping that it might catch on. What a good goal to emulate!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2024
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This is such an appropriate desire and we all wish that it would be universal. I like the idea of Avery doing a good deed every day and hoping that it might catch on. What a good goal to emulate!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2024
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Thank you for your kind review. - Judy
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A very commendable message in this succinct word count form. I like the way it evolves with this little seed of wanting to do good growing, then a wobble of self-doubt, before the finale of resolution. And I like the accompanying brief notes which can always enhance posts. Thanks for sharing and good luck, Judith! Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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A very commendable message in this succinct word count form. I like the way it evolves with this little seed of wanting to do good growing, then a wobble of self-doubt, before the finale of resolution. And I like the accompanying brief notes which can always enhance posts. Thanks for sharing and good luck, Judith! Debbie
Comment Written 05-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Thank you Debbie, for your kind review. I will be looking out for your work too. Blessings.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
I enjoyed your story which is an excellent response to the challenge. I dream and think abut these things day in and day out, since I was very young. I worry about the whole world and dream about everyone finding solutions together. Your story is short but very important. Well done!
Best wishes
Alex
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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I enjoyed your story which is an excellent response to the challenge. I dream and think abut these things day in and day out, since I was very young. I worry about the whole world and dream about everyone finding solutions together. Your story is short but very important. Well done!
Best wishes
Alex
Comment Written 05-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Thanks for you encouraging words. I, too, worry about the path our world is taking. So much anger. We need more love. -Judy
Comment from Janis M.
Your author notes helped with clarification, but the story was a little confusing. The first three lines don't connect well. Avery needed a dream suggesting she didn't have one, but the third sentence states that she chose to pursue her dreams. The second line asks a question, but the next lines don't really answer it in the way that it is asked. I think the idea is good, but the 80-word contest may be too short to fully get this idea flushed out.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Your author notes helped with clarification, but the story was a little confusing. The first three lines don't connect well. Avery needed a dream suggesting she didn't have one, but the third sentence states that she chose to pursue her dreams. The second line asks a question, but the next lines don't really answer it in the way that it is asked. I think the idea is good, but the 80-word contest may be too short to fully get this idea flushed out.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Thanks for you input. I appreciate you taking the time to write. -Judy
Comment from Julie G1
So well written, in a concise and clear manner. Power to the peaceful. This tale worked well for this reader. The writer shows the audience the benefits of walking on the mild side of life, with apt and evocative language. I anticipate reading more such tales.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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So well written, in a concise and clear manner. Power to the peaceful. This tale worked well for this reader. The writer shows the audience the benefits of walking on the mild side of life, with apt and evocative language. I anticipate reading more such tales.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much for critiquing this flash fiction. Your words of encouragement spur me on. - Judy