Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

Well, this was an intriguing read with an original setting! Mark is certainly beginning to learn on the job and I think his interest is going to develop quite quickly now. I just wonder what CC has in mind for more extra curricular activity! Small edits: but (t)his didn't stop Mark from training; para starting One Saturday...- there are some 'gremlins' in the font; (likewise further down in the dialogue). This is an engaging story with great potential. So I'll look forward to reading more. Many thanks, Eileen! Debbie

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024

Thank you Debbie I am now working on the next chapter. Lets see what happens there!

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a very well written story that you have told us about Mark. I wish you the very best with your writing. Your story flows well and read aloud. It also is punctuated greatly, and it is also grammatically very structured.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024

Thank you so much, your input is appreciated. I try my best to make my characters distinctive and unique.
I must go to my cabin in Montana now........