Week Three 2023 - 2024
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Waterfall"... Freeverse ...
6 total reviews
Comment from Sabrina H.
Wow what a powerful piece. Beautifully, well written poem that flowed one line to the next. No grammar errors that I saw. I really liked you word usage. That's what made it so powerful to me. Loved it.
Keep writing:)
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2024
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Wow what a powerful piece. Beautifully, well written poem that flowed one line to the next. No grammar errors that I saw. I really liked you word usage. That's what made it so powerful to me. Loved it.
Keep writing:)
Comment Written 06-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2024
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Excellent ... much appreciate !
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like some kind of persecution, although I am not quite sure who is being persecuted here. Perhaps someone wrongly accused by the Police, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2024
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This sounds like some kind of persecution, although I am not quite sure who is being persecuted here. Perhaps someone wrongly accused by the Police, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2024
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Your correct its about the abuse of power and the struggle of an individual at the hands of abusive authorities.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Oh my that's a dark one when I must say a very relevant one too! Although I haven't read a lot of your work I don't really need to to know if you're a good writer or not I can see that already so great job for that! Your word choices made me grin and smiles are hard to come by these days so one must take them when they can. Financially as you know issues with aesthetics subject matter punctuation sentence structure identifying job it's a fine entry I wish best of luck to you hope you have a great night!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2024
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Oh my that's a dark one when I must say a very relevant one too! Although I haven't read a lot of your work I don't really need to to know if you're a good writer or not I can see that already so great job for that! Your word choices made me grin and smiles are hard to come by these days so one must take them when they can. Financially as you know issues with aesthetics subject matter punctuation sentence structure identifying job it's a fine entry I wish best of luck to you hope you have a great night!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2024
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Excellent much appreciate as always my friend ... glad you could smile !
Comment from Julie Helms
I'm trying really hard not to read my own paranoia of the way things are into this. But I'm not being very successful. In a sense, I feel like I know exactly what you're talking about. But you really don't give enough specific information for me to be sure about that. And that is a sign of a very well-written piece... So specific and yet so vague. Almost like a mirror to look into. I love it!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2024
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I'm trying really hard not to read my own paranoia of the way things are into this. But I'm not being very successful. In a sense, I feel like I know exactly what you're talking about. But you really don't give enough specific information for me to be sure about that. And that is a sign of a very well-written piece... So specific and yet so vague. Almost like a mirror to look into. I love it!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2024
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It is a mirror and specific to the facts but vague to the detail its almost like a commentary or flashback denouncing the essence of abuse rather than telling the story of the abuse.
Comment from Janis M.
This feels like a depiction or likeness of the gestapo. Of course in different ways I think every country has their own version that still goes around.
But aside from that it ALSO has a feeling of being falsely accused and/or not being heard by the police and instead becoming a form of entertainment for them. And all the power is in their hands to destroy your life.
Many different dimensions here,
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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This feels like a depiction or likeness of the gestapo. Of course in different ways I think every country has their own version that still goes around.
But aside from that it ALSO has a feeling of being falsely accused and/or not being heard by the police and instead becoming a form of entertainment for them. And all the power is in their hands to destroy your life.
Many different dimensions here,
Comment Written 05-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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It sure has and one reviewer already got a taste of it as you well know !!!
Comment from Beau Snoopers The Smartest Dog In The World
I think your subject matter may be guided by too much emotion, even writing from the heart has to consider some amount of work toward appealing to the reader.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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I think your subject matter may be guided by too much emotion, even writing from the heart has to consider some amount of work toward appealing to the reader.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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I'm supposed to take that from someone who disguises themselves as something that sniffs their arse and licks their own balls ... its a perfect Freeverse mate and there's nothing wrong with the subject matter and its not actually guided by to much emotion as far I'm concerned not enough emotion ... thank you glad you didn't enjoy !
