Saltwater Ghosts
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Heddy, the Fearless"Young girl with special abilities.
16 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Because I am your very good friend I am reviewing your story for no points. This is intriguing, I like this little girl. And, I am pooped from working on My first chapter story. I think it took me longer to find the right picture than to write the darn thing. I will keep reading. Good Work. Karen
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Because I am your very good friend I am reviewing your story for no points. This is intriguing, I like this little girl. And, I am pooped from working on My first chapter story. I think it took me longer to find the right picture than to write the darn thing. I will keep reading. Good Work. Karen
Comment Written 29-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much. Chapters can be tiresome. Gretchen
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You write well. Have a good weekend. Karen :-)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
If he's scared, he must be in trouble. Will Heddy tell her mother? At least when I catch up, I get to read the chapters earlier!! I enjoyed reading this chapter, it was nice to be down by the sea and collecting shells. I love doing that, and might get Graham to take me down to the shore. Off I go! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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If he's scared, he must be in trouble. Will Heddy tell her mother? At least when I catch up, I get to read the chapters earlier!! I enjoyed reading this chapter, it was nice to be down by the sea and collecting shells. I love doing that, and might get Graham to take me down to the shore. Off I go! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 08-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
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Wait until you're better. Lol. Thank you for this wonderful review. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
Even little girls can't un-see what's flashed before their eyes. So, you've just set the stage for what's coming, and not knowing what that could be, it still puts us readers to thinking. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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Even little girls can't un-see what's flashed before their eyes. So, you've just set the stage for what's coming, and not knowing what that could be, it still puts us readers to thinking. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
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Little girls absorb a lit and it shapes them. Same with little boys. Like little magnets. Thanks fir this. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
if you keep this up, I'll expend all my sixes on your work. As I was reading I could visualize the beach, the tall grass, the shells and the horseshoe crab. They used to cover the bottom of the saltwater canal that I fished in at Key West. I never really liked them for some reason. I wasn't sure how they even lived, they seemed like nothing but shell and legs and tail. Well done gal. It's going to be fun to see where this goes.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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Hello Gretchen,
if you keep this up, I'll expend all my sixes on your work. As I was reading I could visualize the beach, the tall grass, the shells and the horseshoe crab. They used to cover the bottom of the saltwater canal that I fished in at Key West. I never really liked them for some reason. I wasn't sure how they even lived, they seemed like nothing but shell and legs and tail. Well done gal. It's going to be fun to see where this goes.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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You have no idea how happy this makes me. I'm so glad you are enjoying this. Thank you for the extra star. Gretchen
Comment from BethShelby
I'm enjoying the story. She seems to be a very perceptive little girl to recognize that the man is scared. It seems she can just talk to her grandmother any only time. Maybe she only sees her grandmothe in her own kitchen. I seem she is willing to obey her mother about the staying out of the water. I'm enjoying the story.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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I'm enjoying the story. She seems to be a very perceptive little girl to recognize that the man is scared. It seems she can just talk to her grandmother any only time. Maybe she only sees her grandmothe in her own kitchen. I seem she is willing to obey her mother about the staying out of the water. I'm enjoying the story.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Thank you, Beth. I'm glad you are enjoying this. Gretchen
Comment from BethShelby
I'm enjoying the story. She seems to be a very perceptive little girl to recognize that the man is scared. It seems she can just talk to her grandmother any only time. Maybe she only sees her grandmothe in her own kitchen. I seem she is willing to obey her mother about the staying out of the water. I'm enjoying the story.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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I'm enjoying the story. She seems to be a very perceptive little girl to recognize that the man is scared. It seems she can just talk to her grandmother any only time. Maybe she only sees her grandmothe in her own kitchen. I seem she is willing to obey her mother about the staying out of the water. I'm enjoying the story.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Her grandmother appears when Heddy needs her. When she second guesses herself. Thank you for this awesome review. Gretchen
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nicely written.
I'm glad Heddy got away unscathed.
Nonni should have been a little more forceful in her admonition.
Thank you for posting. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Nicely written.
I'm glad Heddy got away unscathed.
Nonni should have been a little more forceful in her admonition.
Thank you for posting. Best wishes.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Nonni is a ghost so she is only around to advise. Plus, Heddy neglected to tell her some of the details. Typical of a child who doesn't want to get into trouble. Lol. Thank you for this great review. If it were me, I'd still be giving my granddaughter a lecture. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
So, the man is scared that somebody will discover he's there. I wonder what his story is and how he fits into this story. I am positive it does, somehow. I am really enjoying reading this. I couldn't find any way to improve this. Good writing and good story.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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So, the man is scared that somebody will discover he's there. I wonder what his story is and how he fits into this story. I am positive it does, somehow. I am really enjoying reading this. I couldn't find any way to improve this. Good writing and good story.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much. Glad you liked it. Gretchen
Comment from Mrs. KT
Happy New Year, Gretchen!
I'm hooked!
How I adore Heddy!
But I'll let you in on a little secret: she reminds me of myself!
Your setting is captivating as are the small details of your story.
The ending to this chapter is intriguing!
Onward!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Happy New Year, Gretchen!
I'm hooked!
How I adore Heddy!
But I'll let you in on a little secret: she reminds me of myself!
Your setting is captivating as are the small details of your story.
The ending to this chapter is intriguing!
Onward!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, Diane. This is one of those stories, like Coffee With Iris, where it just grabs me and I run with it. It may not be totally historically accurate but I don't care. This is an inquisitive little girl who keeps her island safe from pirates and Germans and has to navigate through real adult things she doesn't understand. I'm loving it. Sorry, got carried away. Thank you for this and the nice rating. Gretchen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Your story is building up nicely with much more detail about Heddy, her love of nature and her curiosity (which might get the better of her). She's very much in communication with Nonni but is a free spirit and doesn't always do what she knows she should. The mystery has now been stepped up and we're hooked into finding out more about this scared man lurking around the house. Do you mean "the covers are (messed) on the bed? He (doesn't) come home much? An excellent continuation here, Gretchen. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Your story is building up nicely with much more detail about Heddy, her love of nature and her curiosity (which might get the better of her). She's very much in communication with Nonni but is a free spirit and doesn't always do what she knows she should. The mystery has now been stepped up and we're hooked into finding out more about this scared man lurking around the house. Do you mean "the covers are (messed) on the bed? He (doesn't) come home much? An excellent continuation here, Gretchen. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Thank you for this very encouraging review. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I will fix those edits quickly. Gretchen