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Return To Concorde Valley

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Fantasy based on the intersection of two worlds.

20 total reviews 
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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I still have more to get through. This is so involving am going to copy this so I can read faster. I like this story very much. But without any points. I need to increase my time. I hope this does not offend you in any way. Karen

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2024

Comment from w.j.debi
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This is an enchanting chapter. Theo is charming. He seems to know just how much to tell Echo at a time to keep her intrigued and not scare her. I like that the horse comes when called. I've had two horses out of a couple of dozen we've had that would do that no matter where they were. One was so good at it that I often let her wander around the yard with no bridle or halter even if the gate was open to the street. She always came so I like that Nifty is that way too.
Congrats on third place for the month!

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 09-Jan-2024
    Hi Debi, I've missed you!!
    Thank you for your comments. I always enjoy your perspective.
    And thank you on the congrats. I was surprised and pleased.
    That's so exciting about your horse coming when called. What a special bond!!

    Hugs,
    Rhonda
Comment from rspoet
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Hello Rhonda,
There is a nice ease about this chapter. (which probably means there
will be changes ahead) The peace of family life, the developing relationship
between Theo and Echo, meeting Nifty all add to the calm. But also the little hints and suggestions that imply there is much Echo doesn't yet know.
Of course, there are still Specters and the Enemy, who have to be dealt with.
Hopefully Phoebus and his sons, descendants of Poseidon, will prevail.
Excellent chapter.
Best wishes and Happy New Year.
Robert

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
    Hi Robert, thank you for the brilliant stars and insightful review, my friend. I love the way you whittle to the core! Nailed it all the way around. A couple more of calm and getting to know each other, then the games begin.

    Thank you again,
    Rhonda
Comment from BethShelby
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I've always enjoyed this story and I'm glad I've been reading it since the beginning. It has turned out to be a wonderful fantasy story and I is full of the unexpected. I look forward to more.
Beth

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2024
    Thank you, Beth. I appreciate the review and comments, and I?m equally glad you?ve been here from the beginning!

    Take care,
    Rhonda
Comment from Teri7
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Rhonda, This is a very good chapter. You used great descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work you used. That is a very beautiful cat. You used great dialogue and very good descriptive words. I can't wait to read more! love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
    Thanks so much, Teri. I appreciate your time and thoughts.
    Much love,
    Rhonda
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I'm glad I didn't miss any chapters, I very much enjoyed this one. We have learned a lot more about Theo's life and his family. I would love to be able to talk to animals, how cool would that be? Now we are off to meet the rest of his family. Loving this story, Rhonda! :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
    Hi Sandra!! Thank you for the six stars so late in the week, and I'm so glad to see you feeling well enough to review. You're a trooper for sure!
    Now I know why it took me three weeks to post, just waiting for you.
    Hope you're feeling better!
    Much love,
    Rhonda
Comment from Pam (respa)
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I love the picture to go with this chapter, Rhonda. It is gorgeous. You did a good job with everything from the re-cap of the last chapter, the new chapter, and the book summary.

Theo's dad seemed very nice and treated Echo well so her wounds were healing. They had a good discussion, and she learned a little bit about the hospital there. Through her observations, we have a good idea of what it was like. Phoebus even had a sense of humor about her cat, but she was taken aback at first.

You did a great job with all of the information about the animals there, and how they communicated with each other. I liked the section when Theo held up Sunny's backpack and Sunny seemed to be looking to Theo to translate what he said.

I also like the part when Theo asks what she liked about the horse's owner. A very good conclusion that leaves us wondering about some of Echo's questions about what to expect.

Well done, my friend, and have a great 2024. Hope you had a good Christmas, too.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
    Hi Pam,
    Thank you for the brilliant six stars to start out this new year!

    Thank you for carefully going through each section and commenting. That is so helpful!

    I appreciate the comments on the recap so I know how that part is perceived.

    I?m going to try to post more this year. I might start posting some short stories as well.

    Take care, and Happy New Year,
    Rhonda

reply by Pam (respa) on 02-Jan-2024
    You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Rhonda. You're doing a good job with the story and characters. You take care, too, and Happy New Year!!!
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
    Happy New Year!!
Comment from Ulla
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Aw Rhonda, it's so good to see you back with this story and it's that beautiful horse. You got me right there.
Echo's life is now so different after she's entered the valley. I'm so enjoying this you write it so very well. Hugs, Ulla xxx

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
    Hi Ulla!
    Thank you for the lovely six stars! I appreciate them and your time. I?m going to work harder to post more often. It?s so easy to fall behind. I?m about to get caught up on reviewing as wee, then back I go to work tomorrow, uggg.

    Hugs,
    Rhonda
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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It's funny reading this story I don't know why I am going back to Rick Riodan the author of Percy's Jackson saga. Myths and life that goes intertwined with the human aspect. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
    Thank you so much for the review and comparison to the Percy Jackson series. I never read it, but have heard of it, andconsider it a compliment!
    Hugs,
    Rhonda
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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I really enjoy Theo and Echo's story. Her life has changed so dramatically since she entered the valley that it must be hard for her to simply accept some of the differences. You might want to change these 3 problems: (")It means you . . . . . .benefits far (outweigh) the . . . . . . mere (infatuation) born of . . .

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2024


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2024
    Thank you for the great review, Carol!
    I made the changes you suggested, thank you so much,
    Rhonda