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Comment from Tonimoesdaughter
I like how you wrote a poem about worms I never read a poem about worms before. They are mystical creatures that nobody really appreciates or acknowledges. I do wish you would've put more effort in choosing better words and putting them together. I feel like the last line didn't need to rhyme and you should've came up with something else to describe the tragic life cycle. Also the picture I feel doesn't go with the poem.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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I like how you wrote a poem about worms I never read a poem about worms before. They are mystical creatures that nobody really appreciates or acknowledges. I do wish you would've put more effort in choosing better words and putting them together. I feel like the last line didn't need to rhyme and you should've came up with something else to describe the tragic life cycle. Also the picture I feel doesn't go with the poem.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Sorry you did not enjoy maybe I could rewrite and make it better with a different picture to denote God in his judgement and a fleeing people of Nineveh ... it was amazing they were the fiercest warrior people ever made hung the dead bodies of their enemies on their city walls and guess what they all enjoyed it my poem that is ...
Comment from Brenda Strauser
What a cute picture. This reminds me of when I went fishing with my dad. I hated putting the worms on the hook. I liked the poem. Well written great job
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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What a cute picture. This reminds me of when I went fishing with my dad. I hated putting the worms on the hook. I liked the poem. Well written great job
Comment Written 05-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Excellent much appreciate.
Comment from Janet Foor
A fun and funny read this morning. Excellent use of alliteration and concrete imagery. Very creative. I don't think I've ever read a poem about a worm before.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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A fun and funny read this morning. Excellent use of alliteration and concrete imagery. Very creative. I don't think I've ever read a poem about a worm before.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 05-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Excellent much appreciate glad you enjoyed the read
Comment from T.A. Walk
We Got Worms- the store from dumb and dumber lol!
As a fisherman I've gotten to know worms well. More often than not I go with fake baits so I don't have to whack the live ones!
The way you write is interesting. I'll have to read more!
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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We Got Worms- the store from dumb and dumber lol!
As a fisherman I've gotten to know worms well. More often than not I go with fake baits so I don't have to whack the live ones!
The way you write is interesting. I'll have to read more!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2024
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Excellent a very conscious fisherman how funny
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I think the only thing more silly would be a conscious hunter lol!!
Comment from Navada
This is a really interesting choice of subject and I like your language choices to juxtapose a life of wriggling beneath the soil versus forming a tangible temptation for a fish. Thanks for the share!
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
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This is a really interesting choice of subject and I like your language choices to juxtapose a life of wriggling beneath the soil versus forming a tangible temptation for a fish. Thanks for the share!
Comment Written 31-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
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Excellent thank you it was an interesting choice it was piece that inspired me ...
