Stage Fright
A young actress has a problem15 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Navada,
Just wondering, have you been involved with a theatre production before? You seem to know a lot about the backstage rigmarole, the atmosphere before the opening curtain, last minute jitters, and the director's last minute pep talks with his actors... fine-tuning.
Actors and actresses have to be on top of their roles; not wise to have a lot of negative thoughts passing through their heads. Cell phones should be confiscated when the cast arrives, for example.
I think the best advice for actors is to read the lines of the play over and over. Practice makes perfect. It gives confidence.
But Miranda's issue isn't stage fright. Hers is health. I thought that, perhaps, her iron might be low. Maybe that's why she was fainting. But it could be more serious... a heart issue? She should have made an appointment with her doctor to get to the bottom of it before opening night.
I think Rick likes her, but why wouldn't he suggest a visit to her doctor rather than covering up for her?
"I must make more of an effort to put him at his ease." ... (I suggest,
I must make more of an effort to put him at ease.)
"When it had happened for the first time, the company was performing their first preview of the season with an audience in the house." ... ( I suggest,
When it happened before, the company was performing their first preview of the season with an audience in the house.)
You've written a terrific story for the "Sentence Starts The Story" contest. I won't be a bit surprised if you win.
Good Luck!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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Hi Navada,
Just wondering, have you been involved with a theatre production before? You seem to know a lot about the backstage rigmarole, the atmosphere before the opening curtain, last minute jitters, and the director's last minute pep talks with his actors... fine-tuning.
Actors and actresses have to be on top of their roles; not wise to have a lot of negative thoughts passing through their heads. Cell phones should be confiscated when the cast arrives, for example.
I think the best advice for actors is to read the lines of the play over and over. Practice makes perfect. It gives confidence.
But Miranda's issue isn't stage fright. Hers is health. I thought that, perhaps, her iron might be low. Maybe that's why she was fainting. But it could be more serious... a heart issue? She should have made an appointment with her doctor to get to the bottom of it before opening night.
I think Rick likes her, but why wouldn't he suggest a visit to her doctor rather than covering up for her?
"I must make more of an effort to put him at his ease." ... (I suggest,
I must make more of an effort to put him at ease.)
"When it had happened for the first time, the company was performing their first preview of the season with an audience in the house." ... ( I suggest,
When it happened before, the company was performing their first preview of the season with an audience in the house.)
You've written a terrific story for the "Sentence Starts The Story" contest. I won't be a bit surprised if you win.
Good Luck!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 03-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful and detailed feedback and generous six stars! :) Yes, I've been involved with theatre for many years, although I've never known anyone who has experienced the same issue as Miranda. I think Rick's discussion about his sister's doctor was a subtle way of telling Miranda she should visit him as well.
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Yes, perhaps you're right. Rick was just being subtle. A nice story for the contest!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
This is a very nice story. And very well written.
Presumably, Miranda will see Rick's sister's doctor?
And also presumably, the coffee will be fabulous.
You give readers easy pickings for speculation. (smiley face here)
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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This is a very nice story. And very well written.
Presumably, Miranda will see Rick's sister's doctor?
And also presumably, the coffee will be fabulous.
You give readers easy pickings for speculation. (smiley face here)
Best wishes.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much, Wayne! I would imagine you'd be right on both counts. :)
Comment from Jim Wile
This was so well done, Navada. You really made us feel this poor woman's discomfiture about her situation and having to pretend it was due to stage fright. You had us believing it right up until we find out it was something else entirely which her friend, Rick, figures out.
Rick realizes this is a potentially serious condition for which she needs help from a doctor, and he helps steer her in the right direction like the good friend he is.
The realism of a theatrical performance makes me believe you have experienced acting in theater productions before. This was so believably written and was such a wonderful job. - Jim
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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This was so well done, Navada. You really made us feel this poor woman's discomfiture about her situation and having to pretend it was due to stage fright. You had us believing it right up until we find out it was something else entirely which her friend, Rick, figures out.
Rick realizes this is a potentially serious condition for which she needs help from a doctor, and he helps steer her in the right direction like the good friend he is.
The realism of a theatrical performance makes me believe you have experienced acting in theater productions before. This was so believably written and was such a wonderful job. - Jim
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback and for your generous six stars - this is greatly appreciated! Yes, I've been involved in many theatre productions over the years - on stage, backstage and in the orchestra pit.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is an interesting story beginning with a knock on the door...backstage. The settings and scenes are authentic, demonstrating a knowledge of stage plays. The dialogue is realistic and unforced. The story is well written with descriptions that are easily envisioned. This is well done. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
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This is an interesting story beginning with a knock on the door...backstage. The settings and scenes are authentic, demonstrating a knowledge of stage plays. The dialogue is realistic and unforced. The story is well written with descriptions that are easily envisioned. This is well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much for this lovely positive feedback! :)
Comment from lyenochka
We learn a lot about the dynamics of a stage crew and management in this piece. It's good that there is such support and willingness to cover up the medical syncope. (The literary device syncope is when we abbreviate words and use an apostrophe to denote that missing syllable.)
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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We learn a lot about the dynamics of a stage crew and management in this piece. It's good that there is such support and willingness to cover up the medical syncope. (The literary device syncope is when we abbreviate words and use an apostrophe to denote that missing syllable.)
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 30-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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Thank you! :)
Comment from royowen
You've done well forging a good plot, excellent characters that are believable and stand up to examination, there is realism and good plot woven atound the story, beautifully written my friend, happy new year, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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You've done well forging a good plot, excellent characters that are believable and stand up to examination, there is realism and good plot woven atound the story, beautifully written my friend, happy new year, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much, Roy! :)
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Most welcome
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent story, very engrossing, a great response to the prompt sentence - and I can tell you have the background experience for this to be very authentic. It's certainly a strong contender, as you write flawlessly and smoothly. Very best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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An excellent story, very engrossing, a great response to the prompt sentence - and I can tell you have the background experience for this to be very authentic. It's certainly a strong contender, as you write flawlessly and smoothly. Very best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much for this positive feedback, Wendy! :)
Comment from Teri7
You did a really great job on this contest entry - Stage Fright. You used great descriptive words, great dialogue and I love the art work you chose to go with your words. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, teri
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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You did a really great job on this contest entry - Stage Fright. You used great descriptive words, great dialogue and I love the art work you chose to go with your words. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, teri
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thanks so much, Teri! :)
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You are so welcome! I wish I had six stars to give you, but I was all out!
Comment from BethShelby
This is an excellent story. This sound a bit serious but if one can be treated and cured that is wonderful. I always helps to have an ally in your corner and this sound like a good one to have. Excellent dialogue.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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This is an excellent story. This sound a bit serious but if one can be treated and cured that is wonderful. I always helps to have an ally in your corner and this sound like a good one to have. Excellent dialogue.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much, Beth - I really appreciate your feedback! :)
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This story sounds so authentic and I know why now, looking at your profile introduction. The dialogue is excellent, capturing the essence of the characters and everything here reads faultlessly and with pace and interest. The knock on the door is a perfect starting sentence for a theatre story and I would predict this to be a strong contender, Navada! Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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This story sounds so authentic and I know why now, looking at your profile introduction. The dialogue is excellent, capturing the essence of the characters and everything here reads faultlessly and with pace and interest. The knock on the door is a perfect starting sentence for a theatre story and I would predict this to be a strong contender, Navada! Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful review, Debbie! :)