Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

This is a very clever write Dove and I am glad you shared it with us here on FS. I would mention that the really red background is overpowering and it's hard to see your words.... but, I read it and think its well done.

Melissa

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023

HI Melissa, thank you for your comments and review. Dove

Comment from Julie Helms

Excellent

Dovemarie, this is a lovely poem (lyrics) for your missing loved one. I love the parallel between the fire building/desire increasing.

This may just be totally me, but the color of the words was difficult...it was sort of flashing, clearly tricking my eyeballs.

Thanks for sharing and Happy New Year! Julie

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023

Hi Julie, thanks for your comments and review - Happy New Year! Dove

Comment from Daylily

Excellent

It is the saddest situation for parents to be separated from their beloved children. You are reaching out to your son through this beautiful poetry. Hopefully, he will feel something fluttering in his heart as your words somehow find their way into his.

Blessings for the New Year, Lily.

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023

Dear Lily, thank you for your comments and review. Blessings and Happy New Year. Dove