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Wayne

An asylum seeker

7 total reviews 
Comment from Wendy G
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Seems his life has taken some unfortunate twists and turns. Yet the subjects of bullying and drugging others in order to take advantage are indeed serious. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2023

reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
    I may have exaggerated a bit for effect. Thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Some people weave a tangles web in life and get themselves into all sorts of scrapes, I hope Wayne survives his present troubles, a fine post for the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2023

reply by the author on 31-Dec-2023
    I have lost contact with Wayne. He was a passing acquaintance. But thank you very much.
Comment from Douglas Goff
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Is this a true story? I have no idea what you are talking about which actually made this quite intriguing. I'm not sure which way was up after reading this.

If Wayne cra-cra? Is is a spy. Did they mean he was gay happy or gay liked butts?

All very mysterious indeed. What an interesting read.
D

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2023

reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
    Yes, it is basically true, although slightly exaggerated. I'm afraid I libelled the CIA, but it was the only thing that would rhyme. Thank you for your interest.
Comment from royowen
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It seems that the author's name is Wayne, and after being despatched to Germany, being examined by the CIA, and accused of being gay, I'm wondering why his country would deny deny him, beautifully written, blessings Roy





 Comment Written 28-Dec-2023

reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
    Wayne was an acquaintance of mine. He was an asylum seeker in the UK. Thank you for your kind review.
reply by royowen on 29-Dec-2023
    I see
Comment from bhogg
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I don't know, tells a story, but as a poem, rhyme, near rhyme and meter are all awkward. Sorry, but just didn't resonate with me. In any event, best of luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2023

reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
    I take your criticisms. I was in two minds whether to post this. Anyway, thank you for your time.
Comment from patcelaw
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The writing prompt says you detect a serious message and treated as humor. Your writing is good, but I do not see anything humorous about what you wrote.

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2023

reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
    I was afraid of that. As I indicated in the notes, it is all enormously exaggerated. I am sorry it fell short of your expectations.
Comment from Daylily
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You have responded well to this writing prompt with an excellent rhyming couplet poem. Best wishes!

A small correction needed here:

He has being (been) drugged and scammed and stalked.

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2023

reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
    Thank you for the review and the correction. I always get mixed up with being and been.
reply by Daylily on 28-Dec-2023
    You are among many! :-)