2023 Gypsy's Free Verse
Viewing comments for Chapter 51 "Tonight".
11 total reviews
Comment from Navada
This poem is really an interesting combination of positivity and sadness, with the varying images of light and love in each stanza contrasting with the repeated refrain "and you will not be here/to see them shine". It's both beautiful and poignant. Thanks for sharing this.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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This poem is really an interesting combination of positivity and sadness, with the varying images of light and love in each stanza contrasting with the repeated refrain "and you will not be here/to see them shine". It's both beautiful and poignant. Thanks for sharing this.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for the lovely review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
This reminds me of the moon, sun and the stars at night shining in the sky; if we look, can we see perhaps one of them? I like your elegant poem; very well-written, too.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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This reminds me of the moon, sun and the stars at night shining in the sky; if we look, can we see perhaps one of them? I like your elegant poem; very well-written, too.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi MariVal,
I really like this free verse poem the is a strong personification/metaphor for the relationship between the sun and the moon. The artwork seems to show it as a dance of love.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.
Joan
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Hi MariVal,
I really like this free verse poem the is a strong personification/metaphor for the relationship between the sun and the moon. The artwork seems to show it as a dance of love.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.
Joan
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Joan, I hope you had a wonderful Christmas and you will have a wonderful new year too.
Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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You're welcome, MariVal. It was much deserved.
Joan
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well worded, and it presented in a lovely manner. I enjoyed it very much and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. May your new year bring forth more beautiful writing. Patricia.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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This is very well worded, and it presented in a lovely manner. I enjoyed it very much and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. May your new year bring forth more beautiful writing. Patricia.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from aryr
This was a wonderful free verse, Gypsy. The pictures were magical in that they showed the magic held between the words. I liked the fact that moonflowers bloom at night. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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This was a wonderful free verse, Gypsy. The pictures were magical in that they showed the magic held between the words. I liked the fact that moonflowers bloom at night. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Once again, you painted gorgeous vivid pictures with your words. Thank you for, once again, sharing your talent with us. I am always blessed by reading your poems.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Once again, you painted gorgeous vivid pictures with your words. Thank you for, once again, sharing your talent with us. I am always blessed by reading your poems.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
cool free verse
great imagery putting the moonflower centerstage
liked the firework bouquets
smooth flow of words throughout
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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cool free verse
great imagery putting the moonflower centerstage
liked the firework bouquets
smooth flow of words throughout
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
I like your analogy of the moonflower as a trumpet. And in Psalm 19:5, the sun is also compared to a bridegroom ("The sun comes out like a bridegroom from his bedroom") so you have come up with the same metaphor as the ancient poet.
Enjoyed all the celestial personifications but sorry for the one who will miss out.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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I like your analogy of the moonflower as a trumpet. And in Psalm 19:5, the sun is also compared to a bridegroom ("The sun comes out like a bridegroom from his bedroom") so you have come up with the same metaphor as the ancient poet.
Enjoyed all the celestial personifications but sorry for the one who will miss out.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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I didn't know about Psalm 19:5, I love that idea. Should I use bridegroom instead?
Thank you very much, big sister. I always appreciate your insightful reviews. Good night.
Love,
Marival
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I think the way you had it is fine because it is the same idea. 💖
Comment from Teri7
Gypsy, this is a very beautiful and very well written free verse poem you have penned about the moonflowers. Thank you for explaining about them. Great descriptive words and very neat imagery from the artwork you chose. Thank you for sharing sweet friend! love and blessings, Teri.
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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Gypsy, this is a very beautiful and very well written free verse poem you have penned about the moonflowers. Thank you for explaining about them. Great descriptive words and very neat imagery from the artwork you chose. Thank you for sharing sweet friend! love and blessings, Teri.
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Comment Written 27-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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You are so welcome my friend! love and blessings, Teri
Comment from Julie Helms
Beautiful imagery in this poem. Anthropomorphizing nature makes it feel like a whole world is going on without our notice. A lovely progression and aching yearning at the end of each stanza. I really enjoyed it.
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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Beautiful imagery in this poem. Anthropomorphizing nature makes it feel like a whole world is going on without our notice. A lovely progression and aching yearning at the end of each stanza. I really enjoyed it.
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Comment Written 27-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs