Songs of Recovery
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Gravity and Milkweed"A collection of poems around healing.
8 total reviews
Comment from Frank Malley
What a truly beautiful love poem! And for once, a contest winner that knocks my socks off! Plus, I'm a monarch and milkweed enthusiast, thrilled every New York August to find beautiful caterpillars, chrysalles (didn't look up the plural), and imagos in that heart-grabbing pattern of red, orange, black, and white. But that's off topic. This poem has not one banal line, and works its way to its moving conclusion about imperfect outcomes and love - well, I can't find an adequate adverb meaning "by a whole bunch."
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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What a truly beautiful love poem! And for once, a contest winner that knocks my socks off! Plus, I'm a monarch and milkweed enthusiast, thrilled every New York August to find beautiful caterpillars, chrysalles (didn't look up the plural), and imagos in that heart-grabbing pattern of red, orange, black, and white. But that's off topic. This poem has not one banal line, and works its way to its moving conclusion about imperfect outcomes and love - well, I can't find an adequate adverb meaning "by a whole bunch."
Comment Written 14-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your kind words and that you took the time. I?m glad you felt it measured up for the contest. Thank you, and I hope you have a wonderful week.
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I look forward to other work by you, and I will check out your portfolio. Frank
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is truly excellent. I am out of 6's, but I see your awesome first place award may make up for that. Great lines: I feel it in my chest every time you leave me,
drawing me along in your wake,
a fish hooked on spinner by an absent angler.
Very nice share.
The only suggestion I would say is that the last two lines seem to be in a dark gray font color rather than black like the rest of the font.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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This is truly excellent. I am out of 6's, but I see your awesome first place award may make up for that. Great lines: I feel it in my chest every time you leave me,
drawing me along in your wake,
a fish hooked on spinner by an absent angler.
Very nice share.
The only suggestion I would say is that the last two lines seem to be in a dark gray font color rather than black like the rest of the font.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your kind words and that you took the time. I?ll try to fix the font issue. For some reason it looks fine to me, but I appreciate having it pointed out! Thank you, and I hope you have a wonderful week.
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Yeah, it's not a big issue. I have to look at grays and blacks all the time with my posts, too.
Comment from dragonpoet
HI K,
This is a wonderfully written free verse that tells what love is using a lot of imaginative metaphors. Although I am not a fisherman, I like the fishing metaphor. It shows how much the speaker loves the other because she is willing to stay friends until the other is ready. But, maybe, she should let the other know because he/she may feel the same and be afraid to say it.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy your weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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HI K,
This is a wonderfully written free verse that tells what love is using a lot of imaginative metaphors. Although I am not a fisherman, I like the fishing metaphor. It shows how much the speaker loves the other because she is willing to stay friends until the other is ready. But, maybe, she should let the other know because he/she may feel the same and be afraid to say it.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy your weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 13-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your kind words and that you took the time. I?m not sure I?m ready to say something, but I appreciate the encouragement. Thank you, and I hope you have a wonderful week.
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You're welcome on all accounts, K.
Review when you're ready.
Thanks for the good week wishes,
Joan
Comment from Chris OConnell
Just wow I am speechless,
This poem made my heart just melt into all the analogies and metaphors of the writers love or being in love, oh my heart just fluttered and found myself smiling at the end awesome work well deserved winner congratulations
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Just wow I am speechless,
This poem made my heart just melt into all the analogies and metaphors of the writers love or being in love, oh my heart just fluttered and found myself smiling at the end awesome work well deserved winner congratulations
Comment Written 13-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your kind words and that you took the time. Thank you, and I hope you have a wonderful week.
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 13-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Thank you very much for the recognition. I really appreciate it! I hope the committee has a wonderful week.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Oh, your second stanza is so beautiful. This whole poem is exceptional, painting metaphors with the skill of a master. You express deep wisdom, longing and affection, the very things that grow Love. Beautiful!
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Oh, your second stanza is so beautiful. This whole poem is exceptional, painting metaphors with the skill of a master. You express deep wisdom, longing and affection, the very things that grow Love. Beautiful!
Comment Written 24-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! I really appreciate your time and kind words, and I hope you have a wonderful week.
Comment from Julie Helms
Ohh, the agony of unrequited love! As a gardener, I absolutely love your metaphors of plants, and nature, and heavenly bodies.
Those last two stanzas are powerful...the longing!! Very well done!
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Ohh, the agony of unrequited love! As a gardener, I absolutely love your metaphors of plants, and nature, and heavenly bodies.
Those last two stanzas are powerful...the longing!! Very well done!
Comment Written 23-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! I really appreciate your time and kind words. I hope you have an awesome week.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed your poem for the contest and agree with your analysis here of love and how to define it. Love is something that slowly grips us inside and we cannot let it go, a fine post for the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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I enjoyed your poem for the contest and agree with your analysis here of love and how to define it. Love is something that slowly grips us inside and we cannot let it go, a fine post for the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! I really appreciate your time and kind words. It was a hard one to write. I hope you have a wonderful week.
