Sandra's Lover
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Meat"A macabre crime thriller. Grotesque and detailed.
4 total reviews
Comment from Robert Funston
Hey Eileen. I just read Meat. You said my work was scaring you, have you read your book, or were the demons running wild without your knowledge? You are good, very good. Your descriptions are nothing but amazing. One thing I have to say, you left a path for Joe. Joe has an explosive mental issue, which I'm guess may play a factor later on. Just my thought, I'll have to read on. The way you showed your readers is brilliant. His emotions were realistic and put that punch in there that will show the readers a nut. Trust me when I say I was LE for 28 years and have seen my fair share of nuts. Great chapter. You deserve a six.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Hey Eileen. I just read Meat. You said my work was scaring you, have you read your book, or were the demons running wild without your knowledge? You are good, very good. Your descriptions are nothing but amazing. One thing I have to say, you left a path for Joe. Joe has an explosive mental issue, which I'm guess may play a factor later on. Just my thought, I'll have to read on. The way you showed your readers is brilliant. His emotions were realistic and put that punch in there that will show the readers a nut. Trust me when I say I was LE for 28 years and have seen my fair share of nuts. Great chapter. You deserve a six.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2025
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Thank You Jake, from a writer like you, I'm humbled.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
O m g that was hamburger! Completely gruesome this killer is messed up beyond control beyond anything really! Is who could imagine such brutality and you tell it so very well! I see no this is with grammar punctuating Subject matter or sentence structure it is good and gruesome great job! It only one thing to do about that! I hope you have the best Christmas. The most awesome new year and a wonderful evening!
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2023
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O m g that was hamburger! Completely gruesome this killer is messed up beyond control beyond anything really! Is who could imagine such brutality and you tell it so very well! I see no this is with grammar punctuating Subject matter or sentence structure it is good and gruesome great job! It only one thing to do about that! I hope you have the best Christmas. The most awesome new year and a wonderful evening!
Comment Written 21-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much. I tried - however the research is getting on me. so the next few chapters will be lighter.
Comment from Austin Yu
I usually am not at all into these types of stories with gruesome descriptions of gore. However, you seem to do these types of literature extremely well. As long as it's your passion and you enjoy it, I'm always going to read through every single bit of your writing. Keep on pushing yourself, and happy holidays!
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2023
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I usually am not at all into these types of stories with gruesome descriptions of gore. However, you seem to do these types of literature extremely well. As long as it's your passion and you enjoy it, I'm always going to read through every single bit of your writing. Keep on pushing yourself, and happy holidays!
Comment Written 21-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2023
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Thank you for your feedback. I am going to write the next chapters a little lighter. keep tuned!
Comment from Julie Helms
Being new here, I stepped into the middle of this story and, wowzer, what a place to step in...like I stumbled upon a crime in progress! You have a gift for the gory and graphic. You've convincingly put us in the mind of a psychopath.
You have quite a mix of present and past tense verbs used throughout. Either would be fine, but not both together.
Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2023
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Being new here, I stepped into the middle of this story and, wowzer, what a place to step in...like I stumbled upon a crime in progress! You have a gift for the gory and graphic. You've convincingly put us in the mind of a psychopath.
You have quite a mix of present and past tense verbs used throughout. Either would be fine, but not both together.
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 21-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2023
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Oh jeez I will look into that immediately. Hmm Thank you!
