Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

The descriptive words you use in this poem are perfect for evoking an image in your reader's mind. Of course, the presentation is in a league of its own. Thank you for sharing this with us.

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

Hello Gypsy, this is a very well-written verse that is crafted with meaning and feeling. I enjoyed reading it. You did a fine job in crafting this Sedoka poetic form and it's perfect for this prompt. Hugs!

Melissa

 Comment Written 17-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

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Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

That's a sweet correspondence between two lovers waiting to meet not at a specific time of the clock but at the "at the edge of summer dusk" and they will be together until dawn. But summer nights are so short!

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023

Yes, also, the longest night of the year is coming soon... I think on the 21st. Maybe I'll write a poem about it.

Thank you, big sister, I hope you have a wonderful day.

Love

MariVal

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

love the "you're the air in my lungs" line
and the edge of summer dusk...
wonderful imagery and smooth flow of words

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

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Comment from aryr

Excellent

This was love sedoka, Gypsy. The picture proved to do that- a couple sitting close together. I find it interesting that they shared an interest. The first response was issued by the first responder where as the second one answered the first responder. Wow! That provided a lot of information. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Blessed be.

Gypsy hugs

reply by aryr on 16-Dec-2023

You are so welcome, Gypsy.

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Hi Gypsy (what's your name if you wouldn't mind sharing)?

This is an emotional love poem, question posed and positively answered.

After 44 years of marriage, my wife still takes my breath away when she enters a room.

Loved the poem,
John

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023

John, how sweet, after 44 years? That's wonderful.

My name is MariVal. I'm from Spain though I grew up in California.

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

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Comment from Janis M.

Excellent

I love this form and that the reply is woven into the poem. I wonder though... what if the reply also had something to do with the night or summer dusk? Even if not directly word for word related, but something associated

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023

Thank you, great feedback.

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

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Comment from royowen

Excellent

I love that, I think that God is the air in my lungs, but some girls have certainly left me breathless, staggered by their beauty, this is a classy piece of work Gypsy, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs

reply by royowen on 17-Dec-2023

Most welcome