Poetry Beyond the Ordinary
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
It seems in our society greed runs rampant. I am sure God is not happy with the direction we're moving. Thank you for sharing.
God I have this needs won't you please fulfill my *Greed? (Comma after 'God' and if you use this, it's need, if you just these, then it's needs)
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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It seems in our society greed runs rampant. I am sure God is not happy with the direction we're moving. Thank you for sharing.
God I have this needs won't you please fulfill my *Greed? (Comma after 'God' and if you use this, it's need, if you just these, then it's needs)
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Thanks Again Barbara.
Changed it around a bit.
Doctor Ricky
Comment from Lea Tonin1
I really like this one Ricky! Your first stanza is my favorite if I'm not mistaken. You've got some song lyric lines in there! I also think it's a wonderful reminder and a fine message too I see no issues with grammar or esthetic source sentence structure at all. Got a nice piece of magic here. Best of luck to you. Hope you have a great night!
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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I really like this one Ricky! Your first stanza is my favorite if I'm not mistaken. You've got some song lyric lines in there! I also think it's a wonderful reminder and a fine message too I see no issues with grammar or esthetic source sentence structure at all. Got a nice piece of magic here. Best of luck to you. Hope you have a great night!
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2023
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Thanks Lea.
Doctor Ricky