Flanders Poppies
A word of war5 total reviews
Comment from Gerard F Keogh
I like this piece for its undercurrent of commentary about the lingering costs of war. The language is largely unadorned and that helps in this case because it has a dry detached tone that leaves the reader feeling empty and ruminating. Regards GK
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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I like this piece for its undercurrent of commentary about the lingering costs of war. The language is largely unadorned and that helps in this case because it has a dry detached tone that leaves the reader feeling empty and ruminating. Regards GK
Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Thank you Gk for your review. I appreciate your time and attention into my writing. I invite you to read my book Sandra's lover. Perhaps you could help me with reviewing that one as well?
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Sure, Eileen, I will give it a perusal in the next few days and I will give you my thoughts. Regards GK
Comment from BenThrone
The tone of this poem falls somewhere between John McCrae's "In Flanders Fields" and Wilfred Owen's "Dulce et Decorum est" (skewing towards the latter). I like the second stanza best for its snappy delivery; the first two lines of the final stanza, however, seem to stumble a bit--the construction of the first line, with "for" at the end in particular--and I think if in the future you chose to revise them the poem as a whole would be all the stronger. Thank you for sharing this poem; I very much enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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The tone of this poem falls somewhere between John McCrae's "In Flanders Fields" and Wilfred Owen's "Dulce et Decorum est" (skewing towards the latter). I like the second stanza best for its snappy delivery; the first two lines of the final stanza, however, seem to stumble a bit--the construction of the first line, with "for" at the end in particular--and I think if in the future you chose to revise them the poem as a whole would be all the stronger. Thank you for sharing this poem; I very much enjoyed it.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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Thank you Ben - I appreciate your comments and guidance towards a better flow
Comment from evilynne
Somber words regarding the tragedy of war. There is no victory is death. Your poem is touching and well written, painting a dark picture as it describes the grave sites of the casualties of war.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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Somber words regarding the tragedy of war. There is no victory is death. Your poem is touching and well written, painting a dark picture as it describes the grave sites of the casualties of war.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2023
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Thank you for your reveiew
Comment from Yusita
Wow. This is a moving and beautiful poem that evokes much emotion from the reader. The opening lines were epic and made me swallow a lump in my throat:
As I wander between the stones
Treading upon these broken bones
And then:
The people around are all asleep.
I keenly feel the sadness felt for the fallen... A powerful poem.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023
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Wow. This is a moving and beautiful poem that evokes much emotion from the reader. The opening lines were epic and made me swallow a lump in my throat:
As I wander between the stones
Treading upon these broken bones
And then:
The people around are all asleep.
I keenly feel the sadness felt for the fallen... A powerful poem.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Wendyanne
To be honest I was struggling to read this poem as the font is small and it was difficult to identify each letter! LOOSE should be LOSE. The contest guidelines states NO IMAGES FOR THIS CONTEST PLEASE--LET YOUR WORDS DO ALL THE WORK.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023
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To be honest I was struggling to read this poem as the font is small and it was difficult to identify each letter! LOOSE should be LOSE. The contest guidelines states NO IMAGES FOR THIS CONTEST PLEASE--LET YOUR WORDS DO ALL THE WORK.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2023
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I changed the font and removed the picture. Thank you. I also corrected loose to lose.
Your feedback is essential and greatly appreciated.
