Comment from Lea Tonin1

Excellent

Oh my somebody's going to have her innocence taken very soon. By the big boy William, how nice your characters are actually very believable because you describe them in such a way that their movements in their conversations are what anyone would say so that's a good writing! Have yourself a great evening!

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2023

Thank you Lea

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

I'm reading this in the wrong order but it all makes perfect sense. She's under his spell alright and you're holding all the cards so I must just wait patiently... but it's not going to be good this path she's taken! Debbie

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2023

Thank you Debbie.

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Oh! Is William being understanding and patient? He's grooming her for the "kill" --

Just whose kill remains to be seen, but I feel it coming!

Angela is not half as bright as I'd hoped.

I hope Michelle enters and spies the sullied moment!

Karenina

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2023

Thank you Karenina.

reply by karenina on 10-Dec-2023

Welcome. Am I into this story or what?

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I am not at all happy with Angela. She's going into this willing. Of course, we know how it ends. She does not. Michelle gave her warnings, and she had her own warnings and didn't listen. You are doing a good job writing this.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2023

Thank you Barbara.

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

These is no she is going to remain a virgin. She has let her fantacies run away with her without thinking it through. The beginning of this story indicated that it is something she regrets. I'm wondering what will happen when Michelle finds out. You story is enjoyable to read.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2023

Thank you Beth.