Jonathon Livingston Muck
Based a on a true incident from my husband, Parker's, youth.6 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a fun poem for the contest and your magical melody and rhymes are a pleasure to read and your story is clever and entertaining, good luck with the contest, this is a good entry Kit, love Dolly
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2023
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This is a fun poem for the contest and your magical melody and rhymes are a pleasure to read and your story is clever and entertaining, good luck with the contest, this is a good entry Kit, love Dolly
Comment Written 09-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2023
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Thanks, Dolly! It was a challenge to get the feet right and I think it still needs polish... :)
Kit
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I couldn't wait to see where this poem was going... and the result was satisfactory and interesting. Technically I found the structure intricate. I enjoyed my read. kay
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2023
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I couldn't wait to see where this poem was going... and the result was satisfactory and interesting. Technically I found the structure intricate. I enjoyed my read. kay
Comment Written 09-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2023
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Glad you enjoyed this one! Not deep thinking, just being mentally young enough!
Kit
Comment from Navada
This is one of the more interesting youthful experiments I have read about! Definitely the product of some inquiring minds. One wonders what they did in later life? :)
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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This is one of the more interesting youthful experiments I have read about! Definitely the product of some inquiring minds. One wonders what they did in later life? :)
Comment Written 09-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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Richard wrote spy novels and learned to speak and write in Elvish. Parker had already been in the 5th Special Forces and MACVSOG, in Nam. He became a computer person at NASA (no college degree) and a husband and father to a son who is as brilliant as he is. :)
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That is remarkable! :)
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I think although we struggle with disabilities for 3 of us daily, we are lucky to have each other and to be able to laugh.
Comment from JSD
Excellent and assured rhyming to fit the prompt; well done. Amusing story and a great last line with a clever twist on the name. Good luck with this in the competition.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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Excellent and assured rhyming to fit the prompt; well done. Amusing story and a great last line with a clever twist on the name. Good luck with this in the competition.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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I have my old copy of the book - published in the 1970s I think - so immediately understood. The men were best buds and married sisters! Me and my older sister, Beth.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
That will learn ya. An intriguing and funny story, told very well in poetry form. Timing and rhyming are both flawless. Good job. Hope your holidays are happy ones.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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That will learn ya. An intriguing and funny story, told very well in poetry form. Timing and rhyming are both flawless. Good job. Hope your holidays are happy ones.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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Thanks! My husband and brother-in-law met in their 20s, my sister entered the picture a few years later, and my husband was in his thirties when I met him. Maybe I was lucky he had out grown some of the foolishness by then, but not all! lol!
Comment from Wendyanne
Well this is certainly an unusual subject for a piece of poetry Kit. You have described the scene so well that I can almost smell the stench of the fumes!! It is quite well written and the rhymes are good.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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Well this is certainly an unusual subject for a piece of poetry Kit. You have described the scene so well that I can almost smell the stench of the fumes!! It is quite well written and the rhymes are good.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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Thank you! Part of my husband before we met that I love!
