2023 Gypsy's Tanka
Viewing comments for Chapter 78 "Love Poems "-
16 total reviews
Comment from Ginda Simpson
The imagery you have created in this Tanka is simply exquisite, coupled by the emotional impact of each carefully chosen word. So worthy of its win. Congratulations.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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The imagery you have created in this Tanka is simply exquisite, coupled by the emotional impact of each carefully chosen word. So worthy of its win. Congratulations.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2024
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Thank you, ginda
I appreciate your exceptional six stars review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I like Tanka's. The pictures are exquisite. Your, work was flawless, however, I have no sixes left to give. So much good stuff this week. Have a good weekend. Karen
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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I like Tanka's. The pictures are exquisite. Your, work was flawless, however, I have no sixes left to give. So much good stuff this week. Have a good weekend. Karen
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Karen
Thank you for the lovely review and kind words. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
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Send out this notice to everyone you can. Jesse James Doty is going under the knife at 1pm Monday. The operation is on his neck. Dangerous. Please encourage others to pray or send good wishes if you can. They are trying to strengthen his neck so he will have less pain. Pass this along please.
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Oh, no, poor Jesse, he was so happy about falling in love. I will definitely pray. Thanks
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Pass it along to everyone. Karen
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi MariVal
This is a well done tanka. It is so sad that her love poems don't cause anything but tears. I would assume because they aren't answered. That is why there are grey clouds.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Have a good holiday season
Joan
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Hi MariVal
This is a well done tanka. It is so sad that her love poems don't cause anything but tears. I would assume because they aren't answered. That is why there are grey clouds.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Have a good holiday season
Joan
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thank you, Joan. I appreciate your exceptional five-star review and kind words. Have a wonderful day.
gypsy hugs
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You are most kindly welcome, MariVal.
Joan
Comment from dovemarie
Hi Gypsy, good tanka, has all the syllables, and it strikes me that love can tangle us up at times. Good pictures too, it reminds me of that song "A World Without Love," containing the line "and rainclouds hide the moon."
Dove
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Hi Gypsy, good tanka, has all the syllables, and it strikes me that love can tangle us up at times. Good pictures too, it reminds me of that song "A World Without Love," containing the line "and rainclouds hide the moon."
Dove
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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"rainclouds hide the moon" I love it. Thank you, Dove Marie, I appreciate your exceptional six stars review and kind words. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. This entry is very descriptive and lonely. The presentation is beautiful. I enjoyed the entire presentation and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. This entry is very descriptive and lonely. The presentation is beautiful. I enjoyed the entire presentation and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Barbara,
Thank you for taking the time to review my poem. I appreciate your kindness. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
wow i think this will do well in the tanka contest!
deep, meaningful, and thought-provoking imagistic word choices smoothly flowing...
nice!
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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wow i think this will do well in the tanka contest!
deep, meaningful, and thought-provoking imagistic word choices smoothly flowing...
nice!
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Shelley,
Thank you for taking the time to review my poem. I appreciate your kindness. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
I'd have to say when one was young passion could almost overcome you, I can remember when pubescent young hit, hormones everywhere, a beautifully written tanka Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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I'd have to say when one was young passion could almost overcome you, I can remember when pubescent young hit, hormones everywhere, a beautifully written tanka Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem. I appreciate your kindness. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
I love how this tanka starts off with a promise, but turns with the ill winds of its fortune... and your visual image drives this thought so beautifully as one ponders, pauses for that time in its reflection before moving toward the sadness of the personification...
My heart dipped in lonesome dew...
and paper sprinkled with tears.
What a magic metaphor!
How beautifully it all comes together as a whole.
This stunning tanka poem delivers more than just one read... it lives in echoes.
This surely has to be a top contender in this upcoming Tanka Poetry Contest... your presentation, the construction and composition are just perfect... and in such a heart-touching way. It really connects one to the emotions of a lonely love.
Wow, twenty-five words, thirty-one syllables used with considered thought... beautiful!
All the very best wishes in this contest, Gypsy Queen.
With our thoughts we create...
the strength of written emotion.
Warmest regards,
James.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Hi MariVal,
I love how this tanka starts off with a promise, but turns with the ill winds of its fortune... and your visual image drives this thought so beautifully as one ponders, pauses for that time in its reflection before moving toward the sadness of the personification...
My heart dipped in lonesome dew...
and paper sprinkled with tears.
What a magic metaphor!
How beautifully it all comes together as a whole.
This stunning tanka poem delivers more than just one read... it lives in echoes.
This surely has to be a top contender in this upcoming Tanka Poetry Contest... your presentation, the construction and composition are just perfect... and in such a heart-touching way. It really connects one to the emotions of a lonely love.
Wow, twenty-five words, thirty-one syllables used with considered thought... beautiful!
All the very best wishes in this contest, Gypsy Queen.
With our thoughts we create...
the strength of written emotion.
Warmest regards,
James.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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James, it's always so good to hear from you, my heart sings and beats fast with anticipation. Your reviews are so poetic, deep, and heartfelt, I hope you know how grateful I am. You, Karenina, and Helen always know what I mean. Yesterday, Karenina (or little sister), went through my whole profile and reviewed the 15th review for all my poems with14 reviews so I could get recognition ribbons. Helen (big sister) reviews every single poem I write and always knows what they mean. And you... you are my kindred spirit and know exactly what I mean in such a poetic way... you are a true poet at heart. I wish you had time to write more. You are such a gifted artist.... and good friend.
Con carino,
MariVal
with all my art, I give a little piece of my heart = me
"Art is coming face to face with yourself" unknown author
Comment from karenina
This is no time to be out of sixes!
The bifurcation of love and loss frequently double back and catch us unaware...
There seems to me melancholic here...and bitterness...and still love, which so stubbornly clings to our hearts!
Karenina
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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This is no time to be out of sixes!
The bifurcation of love and loss frequently double back and catch us unaware...
There seems to me melancholic here...and bitterness...and still love, which so stubbornly clings to our hearts!
Karenina
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thank you, little sister, I am so grateful for all your insightful and heartfelt reviews. Your kindness is such a wonderful gift.
Love,
marival
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?Choose to spend time with your friends and you will always have a good time.?
Comment from lyenochka
Your tanka develops very well with the initial introduction of love poems but then we learn that these are "tangled" with gray clouds and the middle line pivots to show us the grief in the heart of the narrator.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Your tanka develops very well with the initial introduction of love poems but then we learn that these are "tangled" with gray clouds and the middle line pivots to show us the grief in the heart of the narrator.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thank you, big sister. I hope I win, I need the money to pay for Atticus presents LoL Nah, I am happy to compete in a Tanka contest. I hope you have a wonderful day.
love,
marival