Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a very well written, chapter in your book, and it moves along very well. It's a chapter with quite a bit of intrigue, and was a fun chapter to listen to. I wish you the very best with your book and I also wish you a very merry Christmas and a very happy new year. Patricia.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2023

Thank you.

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

So it begins with William and Angela is to excited by him to stop it from happening. I wonder if he and Caz will have ended their relationship before Angela gets pregnant. Your story is definitely keeping me interested.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2023

Thank you Beth.

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

This is really heating up now between Angela and William! A great chapter, full of girly stuff, making it all very real and readable. Your dialogue is also excellently done and nothing appears forced or unnatural. In short, all very enjoyable with a perfect pace being maintained. And of course an air of danger now creeping into the story. There are a couple of suggestions: He's still grasping (onto) my hand (no need for 'onto'); Caz spotted the Halloween Party advertised (a) couple of weeks ago. But. otherwise, no issues, Jacob. An excellent read and I'd like to fan you, if that's ok, to avoid missing anything further. Thanks, Debbie.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2023

Thank you Debbie.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Oh dear, no turning back now, once both enjoy this kiss then eveything changes, I enjoyed this chapter Jacob and it seems as though Angela has fallen for William and he feels the same, we will see where this leads to, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023

Thank you Dolly.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

This kiss between William and Angela isn't good. I can't wait to know what happens next. We already know Angela gets pregnant, but no idea what happens to Caz.

'Oh, it's just a bit of fun isn't it? (comma after 'fun')

'Yeah I'm coming.' (comma after ('Yeah,')

I reckon there must me at least a hundred people here already. (must be at)

'So no one can interrupt us,' he grins. (us.' He)

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023

Thank you Barbara.

Comment from karenina

Excellent

And here we go! This William is a smooth operator. Dealing drugs, stealing romance on the side. A few character flaws come to light in the last two chapters. Lots of action here and your descriptions bring all your characters to life! I'm holding on tight for the ride, now!

Karenina

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023

Thank you Karenina.

reply by karenina on 04-Dec-2023

Of course!