Sories Poetically Speaking
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Don't Mess With My Holiday"A complete story in written as a poem.
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Comment from Ric Myworld
I don't think I'll ever learn to like free verse poetry as much as rhyming poems. You know that I don't understand the first thing about poetry, but I'm learning slowly to appreciate a few of you. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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I don't think I'll ever learn to like free verse poetry as much as rhyming poems. You know that I don't understand the first thing about poetry, but I'm learning slowly to appreciate a few of you. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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Thank you Ric. I appreciate the great review and six stars in spite of not being a poetry fan. I've got to get back to the biography I was writing.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Well done, in your writing and deciding to be certain your twins got an additional Christmas. Did you happen to have them wear bows before placing them before the tree ... not under.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Well done, in your writing and deciding to be certain your twins got an additional Christmas. Did you happen to have them wear bows before placing them before the tree ... not under.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you Tom. I must be truthful. With bows under the tree but I refrained from wrapping them in gift paper.
Beth
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tee-hee
Comment from LJbutterfly
This was a joy to read and quite entertaining. No apologies to Poe needed. You cleverly told the story, in rhyme, of the birth of your twins who arrived just before Christmas. I can tell, writing this required thought and time. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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This was a joy to read and quite entertaining. No apologies to Poe needed. You cleverly told the story, in rhyme, of the birth of your twins who arrived just before Christmas. I can tell, writing this required thought and time. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much for the review. I so glad you like it. It did take a while to write but I had fun with it. I really appreciate the six stars.
Beth
Comment from lyenochka
Loved this! And you did get the Edgar Allan Poe meter for the Raven poem just right. And I do remember about the birth of your twins. So glad that you all survived. But your husband was wrong about the "Nevermore." Lol.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Loved this! And you did get the Edgar Allan Poe meter for the Raven poem just right. And I do remember about the birth of your twins. So glad that you all survived. But your husband was wrong about the "Nevermore." Lol.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you Helen. I really appreciate the review. He definitely thought our family was complete at that point. For a while he wasn't able to have sex, because he was afraid I get pregnant again. I happened ten year later.
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😊He didn't know we drop more eggs later in life. Glad you had your complete family! 💖
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Wow, Beth, you really love your rhyme and will challenge yourself to the limit! What a story you've neatly conveyed in this fun verse about the birth of your twins at Christmas time (I had one born on the 28th, simply no room in my belly after all the Christmas indulgence!) One small edit: amending (one 'm'). Well you've certainly fulfilled the 'rhyming' part of the brief in this excellent entry! Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Wow, Beth, you really love your rhyme and will challenge yourself to the limit! What a story you've neatly conveyed in this fun verse about the birth of your twins at Christmas time (I had one born on the 28th, simply no room in my belly after all the Christmas indulgence!) One small edit: amending (one 'm'). Well you've certainly fulfilled the 'rhyming' part of the brief in this excellent entry! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you Debbie. I appreciate the nice review and the comments. I'm glad you pointed out the misspelling. They were due on Christmas Eve and Don married a girl who was born on Christmas Eve.
Comment from patcelaw
I am a friend on this kind of captured my attention. Did I read this right or did you have your children on Christmas Day? I enjoyed this poem very much and I feel for you. Patricia.,
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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I am a friend on this kind of captured my attention. Did I read this right or did you have your children on Christmas Day? I enjoyed this poem very much and I feel for you. Patricia.,
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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No they were born early on December 17. I did have them near the middle of the month so I was home long before Christmas. They weighed 6'9 and 6'12 which was big for twins. I was miserable.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Ah, this is when your twins were born!
Do you want to say "Birth on Christmas Eve was pending" - you have Brith
He"d - change to He'd
grateful hearts filled with elation - grateful is the only word that is not capitalized at the beginning of the line
No apologies needed to Edgar (you have Edgan) - this was a fun rhyming poem that told us the story of your twins' birth. Lots of fun, Beth. Best of luck.
xo
Pam
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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Ah, this is when your twins were born!
Do you want to say "Birth on Christmas Eve was pending" - you have Brith
He"d - change to He'd
grateful hearts filled with elation - grateful is the only word that is not capitalized at the beginning of the line
No apologies needed to Edgar (you have Edgan) - this was a fun rhyming poem that told us the story of your twins' birth. Lots of fun, Beth. Best of luck.
xo
Pam
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Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you, Pam. I really appreciate the review and you catching my screw ups.
Beth
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nicely done. I like the anticipation, the mood of pending childbirth and tying it all into the Christmas season. I like the ending line the best with a wry reference to the Poe poem making it a bit of a dark twist at the end.
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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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nicely done. I like the anticipation, the mood of pending childbirth and tying it all into the Christmas season. I like the ending line the best with a wry reference to the Poe poem making it a bit of a dark twist at the end.
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Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you Jake. I appreciate the review and nice comments.
Beth
