2023 Gypsy's Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 120 "~ Snow Covered Branches ~"x
9 total reviews
Comment from aryr
Wow! What a beautiful picture, it snowed and the branches feel the weight from it. Your words of the haiku were wonderful, Gypsy. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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Wow! What a beautiful picture, it snowed and the branches feel the weight from it. Your words of the haiku were wonderful, Gypsy. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
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This was great. You are so welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from Mark D. R.
Nice seasonal presentation Gypsy! Your choice of illustration matches perfectly with your few words.
Not quite sure if "snow-covered" (sic) is correct or not. Otherwise, 'covered' could be read as a verb.
On your second line there is a big space ( in my iPad view) between words - intended or not?
Typical Haiku format is short-long-short. Yours is the opposite.
Consider:
snow-covered branches,
holding the weight of winter (nice alliteration!) --
drag low
Mark
Mark
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Nice seasonal presentation Gypsy! Your choice of illustration matches perfectly with your few words.
Not quite sure if "snow-covered" (sic) is correct or not. Otherwise, 'covered' could be read as a verb.
On your second line there is a big space ( in my iPad view) between words - intended or not?
Typical Haiku format is short-long-short. Yours is the opposite.
Consider:
snow-covered branches,
holding the weight of winter (nice alliteration!) --
drag low
Mark
Mark
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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I like my haiku the way it is. Haiku doesn't have to be 5-7-5. Here is a haiku from haiku master, matsuo basho...
Scarecrow in the hillock
Paddy field --
How unaware! How useful!
Haiku definition from the haiku society of America....
https://www.thehaikufoundation.org/omeka/items/show/206
HAIKU definition
A haiku is a short poem that uses imagistic language to convey the essence of an experience of nature or the season intuitively linked to the human condition
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So noted!
Comment from shelley kaye
ooh this was a cool haiku (no pun intended lol)
i liked how you took branches hanging low
with the weight of winter...
nicely done!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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ooh this was a cool haiku (no pun intended lol)
i liked how you took branches hanging low
with the weight of winter...
nicely done!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Don't we often feel like we hold the weight of the world on our shoulders? Thank you for sharing this beautiful presentation with us. I have always thought branches covered with snow it beautiful.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Don't we often feel like we hold the weight of the world on our shoulders? Thank you for sharing this beautiful presentation with us. I have always thought branches covered with snow it beautiful.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
I like the personification and the phrase "holding the weight of winter" as winter cold does feel heavy as does the snow that can break roofs. Also, it reminds me symbolically of people burdened by grief.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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I like the personification and the phrase "holding the weight of winter" as winter cold does feel heavy as does the snow that can break roofs. Also, it reminds me symbolically of people burdened by grief.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much, big sister. I appreciate your kind review. You always get the meaning of my poems. (*÷*)
Love,
Marival
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Comment from GWHARGIS
This was such a beautiful poem. I loved the image . I could see the boughs with their thick covering of snow like a thick quilt. I loved this peaceful feeling. Such a beautiful poem. A tiny slice of winter. Gretchen
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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This was such a beautiful poem. I loved the image . I could see the boughs with their thick covering of snow like a thick quilt. I loved this peaceful feeling. Such a beautiful poem. A tiny slice of winter. Gretchen
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Gretchen
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend!
Gypsy hugs
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Such a visually stimulating piece of writing and the illustration isn't bad either! I love how my mind goes with you and I can not only see, but feel the weight of those trees. Wonderful writing my friend.
Kiwi
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Such a visually stimulating piece of writing and the illustration isn't bad either! I love how my mind goes with you and I can not only see, but feel the weight of those trees. Wonderful writing my friend.
Kiwi
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Kiwi
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very good haiku that you have presented us with. It is beautifully presented and a pleasure to listen to. I wish you the very best with all of your writing and I also wish you a good weekend. Pat
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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This is a very good haiku that you have presented us with. It is beautifully presented and a pleasure to listen to. I wish you the very best with all of your writing and I also wish you a good weekend. Pat
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend!
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
This is very lovely. These tiny ones must convey so much in such a short space. You have a dab hand.l enjoy reading your work and your pictures are grand.
Karen
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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This is very lovely. These tiny ones must convey so much in such a short space. You have a dab hand.l enjoy reading your work and your pictures are grand.
Karen
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend!
Gypsy hugs
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