Comment from Lea Tonin1

Excellent

I like how you move back-and-forth in twhen. You create these chapters it's just a think I like to use as well. I'm more and more entwined with one another's new likes and new dislikes form. It's a very intriguing story that's going on here, which I'm assuming. Will all culminate in one large act or maybe a few acts. I think you've got a great submission here and a really interesting story and keep on writing. I find no issues with grammar subject matter spelling of punctuation good job!

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023

Thank you Lea.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Well, Angela something is happening between you and William and people are noticing. Not only that, but it will also affect the rest of your life. I can't wait to see how you bring all of this together. This is another good read.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023

Thank you Barbara.

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

I wonder why Michelle thinks William will hurt Angela. Angela is suppoed to be so concerned about Michelle but she seems to get a bit angry when she sees her friend acting in certain ways. I get the feeling Michelle is jealous of any attention Angela gives anyone other than her. This story was very short but it is always interesting.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023

Thank you Beth.

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Oh, but I think it could spoil the friendship...and likely will! I like these forward steps allowing us to nibble around the edges of whatever it was that twisted these friendships, old and new into the dilemma that it is now!
Each of these characters has the potential to be the catalyst. And so I must read on!

Karenina

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023

Thank you Karenina.

reply by karenina on 01-Dec-2023

Smile. Thank you!