Velvet Blue
a 5-7-5 poem27 total reviews
Comment from jim vecchio
This was a beautiful poetic image. Three lines cannot always say a lot, but you posted a vivid picture of a dark blue and starry night. The illustration perfectly topped your work.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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This was a beautiful poetic image. Three lines cannot always say a lot, but you posted a vivid picture of a dark blue and starry night. The illustration perfectly topped your work.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much, Jim. I appreciate your lovely comments.
Melissa
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I appreciate your writing!
Comment from Aussie
Best wishes with your contest entry Melissa. In different places at different times, the diamonds on velvet sparkle brighter. There have been sightings of the Min Min lights in the outback of Oz. The Aborigines say they are their ancestors. The lights streak and dance. The blue blanket is amazing and we thank God for its beauty. K xx
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Best wishes with your contest entry Melissa. In different places at different times, the diamonds on velvet sparkle brighter. There have been sightings of the Min Min lights in the outback of Oz. The Aborigines say they are their ancestors. The lights streak and dance. The blue blanket is amazing and we thank God for its beauty. K xx
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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I really appreciate your lovely comments, Kay. Thanks for the notes about the Outback. It is such a strange tale to me and I know their history must be fascinating. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Ohhhh.... so beautiful. I love the words imagery and presentation. Wonderful haiku for the 3 Line Poetry Contest. Goodluck!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Ohhhh.... so beautiful. I love the words imagery and presentation. Wonderful haiku for the 3 Line Poetry Contest. Goodluck!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thanks so much for your lovely comments, Gypsy! Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from Gloria ....
A beautiful description of the midnight sky on a clear night when away from light pollution.
The gems glowing on velvet so soft and sumptuous.
Wishing you great luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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A beautiful description of the midnight sky on a clear night when away from light pollution.
The gems glowing on velvet so soft and sumptuous.
Wishing you great luck with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thanks so much, Gloria!! Glad you liked it!!
Melissa
Comment from Michael Groover
This haiku is a beautifully crafted piece that captures the enchanting beauty of the night sky. The imagery is vivid and evocative, painting a picture that is both majestic and intimate.
The opening line, "Midnight's bedecked in," immediately sets a regal and ornate tone, as if midnight itself is a figure adorned in finery. The use of the word "bedecked" adds a touch of elegance and grandeur, setting the stage for the imagery that follows.
The second line, "delicate, crystalline gems...," beautifully describes the stars. Comparing them to "crystalline gems" emphasizes their brilliance, clarity, and preciousness. This metaphor not only enhances the visual imagery but also conveys the awe-inspiring quality of a starlit sky.
The final line, "flung on velvet blue," completes the picture with a rich description of the night sky. The term "velvet blue" suggests a deep, luxurious darkness, a perfect backdrop to the sparkling stars. The word "flung" implies a certain carefree abundance, as if the stars were scattered across the sky with a generous hand.
Overall, this haiku is a splendid portrayal of the night sky, full of wonder and beauty. Its strength lies in its ability to convey a vast, celestial scene in a few carefully chosen words, leaving the reader with a sense of awe and a renewed appreciation for the natural world's beauty. The imagery is both precise and imaginative, making the haiku a memorable and enchanting read.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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This haiku is a beautifully crafted piece that captures the enchanting beauty of the night sky. The imagery is vivid and evocative, painting a picture that is both majestic and intimate.
The opening line, "Midnight's bedecked in," immediately sets a regal and ornate tone, as if midnight itself is a figure adorned in finery. The use of the word "bedecked" adds a touch of elegance and grandeur, setting the stage for the imagery that follows.
The second line, "delicate, crystalline gems...," beautifully describes the stars. Comparing them to "crystalline gems" emphasizes their brilliance, clarity, and preciousness. This metaphor not only enhances the visual imagery but also conveys the awe-inspiring quality of a starlit sky.
The final line, "flung on velvet blue," completes the picture with a rich description of the night sky. The term "velvet blue" suggests a deep, luxurious darkness, a perfect backdrop to the sparkling stars. The word "flung" implies a certain carefree abundance, as if the stars were scattered across the sky with a generous hand.
Overall, this haiku is a splendid portrayal of the night sky, full of wonder and beauty. Its strength lies in its ability to convey a vast, celestial scene in a few carefully chosen words, leaving the reader with a sense of awe and a renewed appreciation for the natural world's beauty. The imagery is both precise and imaginative, making the haiku a memorable and enchanting read.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much for your wonderful and descriptive review, Michael. I cherished each word! I really appreciate your comments and I'm glad it resonated with you!
Melissa
Comment from Carol Clark2
Wow, this is lovely! I like the idea of midnight wearing jewelry, perhaps on a blue velvet gown. It's a gorgeous metaphor. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Wow, this is lovely! I like the idea of midnight wearing jewelry, perhaps on a blue velvet gown. It's a gorgeous metaphor. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thanks so much, Carol!! I really appreciate your comments and review. Glad you liked it!!
Melissa
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Your 3 line verse beautifully reflects the colours and ambience of the image with its majestic, textured gown of midnight. Thanks for sharing and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Your 3 line verse beautifully reflects the colours and ambience of the image with its majestic, textured gown of midnight. Thanks for sharing and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thanks so much, Debbie!! Glad you liked it!!
Melissa
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
Very nice way to describe a starry, starry night. And a good entry for the 3-Line Poetry contest! I wish you Good Luck.
I haven't been getting your posts in my messages, except for this last one. I was starting to wonder where you disappeared to.
That third line is quite a tongue-twister,
"flung on velvet blue" ... (with an "l" in each word, except "on", of course. Maybe it's because of Christmas ornaments, but I was thinking this might have worked, too:
hung on velvet blue)
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Hi Melissa,
Very nice way to describe a starry, starry night. And a good entry for the 3-Line Poetry contest! I wish you Good Luck.
I haven't been getting your posts in my messages, except for this last one. I was starting to wonder where you disappeared to.
That third line is quite a tongue-twister,
"flung on velvet blue" ... (with an "l" in each word, except "on", of course. Maybe it's because of Christmas ornaments, but I was thinking this might have worked, too:
hung on velvet blue)
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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OH KB!!, I love. 'Hung on velvet blue'. That is way better than 'flung'. Thank you for your wonderful comments and suggestion. Hugs, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
Beautiful imagery, Melissa, captured in just three short lines. I love the artwork highlighting this piece. Should do very well in the cintest. I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Beautiful imagery, Melissa, captured in just three short lines. I love the artwork highlighting this piece. Should do very well in the cintest. I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thanks so much, June!! Glad you liked it!!
Melissa
Comment from Ulla
Oh, Melissa, it's so good to seeing you back and with a lovely 5-7-5 poem for the three line poem contest. I loved it. Such a beautiful way with words you got. Ulla xx
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Oh, Melissa, it's so good to seeing you back and with a lovely 5-7-5 poem for the three line poem contest. I loved it. Such a beautiful way with words you got. Ulla xx
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2023
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Thanks so much, sweet Ulla!! Glad you liked it!!
Melissa