Comment from aryr

Excellent

What a great tanka, Gypsy. I loved your picture because it told the truth. The poem was fantastic because it showed how to remain the tide, your excuses and the stuff that is unmentionable. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Blessed be.

Gypsy hugs

reply by aryr on 30-Nov-2023

You are so welcome, Gypsy.

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

Great comparison of the instability of the reeds to the excuses and (my own assumption) lies that permeate the relationship. The tides change probably like the willingness to be honest of the other party. Gretchen

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023

Yes, you are right. It's a juxtaposition between nature and a man's betrayal.

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Excuse can be a problem, but everybody does have them. Many people more than others. These people do seem to come and go, much like the tides. Thank you for sharing the perfect poem with us.

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

ooh interesting and thought-provoking...
never thought of tides in that way before
good imagery and smooth flow in and out

thank you for sharing the pondering thought
shelley :)

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Well, those reeds can keep those lame excuses as they would not be believed after awhile. Then the tides of indecision will stop and the narrator can move on to nurture and love herself into healing.

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023

Yes, she should nurture herself and know she deserves better.

Thank you very much, big sister. Hugs and love.

Marival

reply by lyenochka on 30-Nov-2023

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Comment from Alison Greenwood

Excellent

Oh I love the set out of this one. I must have a bit more of a play around with this to see if I can make my poems stand out so beautifully. I love the layers of meaning in this. Great poem!

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from Jasmine Girl

Excellent

I like this Tanka. The last two lines really expended the details of the excuse. It was his indecisiveness. I like your using "tides" as a metaphor for this man's feeling about the lady.

Well done.

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs