Miranda's Trouble In Paradise
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Comment from w.j.debi
Nothing ever goes as planned when doing detective work. I like the unexpected encounters that pop up for Mitch and for Miranda. No one is getting out of here unnoticed. LOL
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Nothing ever goes as planned when doing detective work. I like the unexpected encounters that pop up for Mitch and for Miranda. No one is getting out of here unnoticed. LOL
Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Lol. You are spot on with that assessment. Thanks so much. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
A week away from my computer has put me well behind on my reading and reviews, but I'm racing to make sure I don't leave any of my regulars out. I've missed seeing what my favorite writer's minds have been twisted up in. Of course, for me, stripper chicks are always fun. And I hope you'll know I'm just joking. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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A week away from my computer has put me well behind on my reading and reviews, but I'm racing to make sure I don't leave any of my regulars out. I've missed seeing what my favorite writer's minds have been twisted up in. Of course, for me, stripper chicks are always fun. And I hope you'll know I'm just joking. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Hey, I've seen some who take striptease to a whole new level. It honestly becomes an art form. Others it's just "rutting in the gutter" (as my mom used to say.) LOL. Thank you for this nice review. Gretchen
Comment from JSD
Most amusing and excellent piece of writing as usual. I love her strength as she goes into this unsavoury place. The ex-husband sounds like a real catch! x
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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Most amusing and excellent piece of writing as usual. I love her strength as she goes into this unsavoury place. The ex-husband sounds like a real catch! x
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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Farley was a real catch. Just like the plague was a catch. Lol. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
another great post gal. I liked the way that you pointed out the word affair to describe the act of adultery. It's like if we put ribbons and bows on a cow patty, it's somehow something we want to take home. I feel bad for Mitch; obviously he's uncomfortable, and to be confronted by one of his daughter's friends working in a strip club would be almost unbearable. It shows his character. I hope Miranda is taking note. Thanks for sharing gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Hello Gretchen,
another great post gal. I liked the way that you pointed out the word affair to describe the act of adultery. It's like if we put ribbons and bows on a cow patty, it's somehow something we want to take home. I feel bad for Mitch; obviously he's uncomfortable, and to be confronted by one of his daughter's friends working in a strip club would be almost unbearable. It shows his character. I hope Miranda is taking note. Thanks for sharing gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Thank you, Tom. An affair sounds almost classy. Cheating is anything but classy. Thank you for this extra star. Very kind of you. Gretchen
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Hello Gretchen,
I'm always amazed at how common adultery seems to be, like it's no big deal. Tell that to the spouse who's been cheated on. The betrayal would be overwhelming and forgiveness uncommonly hard to give.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
"they might not always agree with you, but the good ones always have your back." So true. I never had a relationship like that. I like Miranda and Mitch ... you create very believable characters. I like the way she took her ex-husband money. LoL. Well done. Another intriguing and entertaining chapter.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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"they might not always agree with you, but the good ones always have your back." So true. I never had a relationship like that. I like Miranda and Mitch ... you create very believable characters. I like the way she took her ex-husband money. LoL. Well done. Another intriguing and entertaining chapter.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Thanks, Gypsy. I'm stoked you enjoyed it. Gretchen
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Oh, this was fantastic, Gretchen! Classic Miranda all the way.
I especially like that Bill's NOT probably cheating, that Farley is as entertaining-without-intending-to-be as ever, and that the guy at the door "Looks like he ate a Buick." HAHAHAHAHAHA. You're so freaking funny every single chapter.
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It's the same swarthy smile that used to greet me back in the good old days.
I don't think "swarthy" is the word you meant. That means dark-colored complexion. I'm pretty sure you want "Smarmy" there...like an over-dressed guy who thinks he's sexy and slick, but he has the undertow of gross and uncouth? That sure sounds like Farley to me.
Anyway, FANTASTIC work moving the plot forward...and I'm glad Mitch got his $40 back!! xo
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Oh, this was fantastic, Gretchen! Classic Miranda all the way.
I especially like that Bill's NOT probably cheating, that Farley is as entertaining-without-intending-to-be as ever, and that the guy at the door "Looks like he ate a Buick." HAHAHAHAHAHA. You're so freaking funny every single chapter.
In this sentence:
It's the same swarthy smile that used to greet me back in the good old days.
I don't think "swarthy" is the word you meant. That means dark-colored complexion. I'm pretty sure you want "Smarmy" there...like an over-dressed guy who thinks he's sexy and slick, but he has the undertow of gross and uncouth? That sure sounds like Farley to me.
Anyway, FANTASTIC work moving the plot forward...and I'm glad Mitch got his $40 back!! xo
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Thanks, swarthy wasn't the right word. Glad you pointed it out. I'm so glad you liked it. Thanks for the extra star. This was the first chapter in a long while that I was really proud of. Glad it was Rachelle approved. Gretchen
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That is so interesting to me. I've liked them just fine. You must be a much harsher critic!! (But you're always so nice to MEEEEE!!!) Go figure. xo
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
This is hysterical. You write the Tracy-Hepburn style very well. For free photos go straight to the motherload at Pinterest. Just mention where the photo came from in your author note's. I loved this.
Karen
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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This is hysterical. You write the Tracy-Hepburn style very well. For free photos go straight to the motherload at Pinterest. Just mention where the photo came from in your author note's. I loved this.
Karen
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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I post from my phone. It won't let me use an outside source for pictures. I glad you liked thos. I love Katherine Hepburn. Your comment was quite a compliment. Gretchen
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Comment from Teri7
Gretchen, This is another very well written chapter to your book. You used very good dialogue and very good descriptive words. When I read your work I can always tell by your words what is going on. Great job my friend. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Gretchen, This is another very well written chapter to your book. You used very good dialogue and very good descriptive words. When I read your work I can always tell by your words what is going on. Great job my friend. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much, Teri. I'm glad it came through for you. Gretchen
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Marinda's so smart. LOL She has Mitches back
and is looking out for her x'es wife and kids as well. She was married to that piece of s;;t? I bet she will find Rita's husband has the janitorial job there. Still, I wouldn't want my man working there. UGH! Farley is right, She is something. Mitch is too. He's a keeper. LOL Nancy:)
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Marinda's so smart. LOL She has Mitches back
and is looking out for her x'es wife and kids as well. She was married to that piece of s;;t? I bet she will find Rita's husband has the janitorial job there. Still, I wouldn't want my man working there. UGH! Farley is right, She is something. Mitch is too. He's a keeper. LOL Nancy:)
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Thanks, Nancy. Poor Miranda was married to that walking bag of testosterone. He really has little else to offer. Lol. Thanks for the extra star. Gretchen
Comment from John Ciarmello
Well, Mitch is undoubtedly out of his comfort zone. His reaction to the situation makes him a super-plausible character.
And Miranda, of course, never breaks stride.
I can't wait to see who the janitor is! Great, Chapter, Gretchen! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Well, Mitch is undoubtedly out of his comfort zone. His reaction to the situation makes him a super-plausible character.
And Miranda, of course, never breaks stride.
I can't wait to see who the janitor is! Great, Chapter, Gretchen! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Thanks so much, John. Mitch might not have been as uncomfortable had Miranda not been there. But seeing a child's former friend and most of her naughty bits is bound to be unnerving. Gretchen