Your Letters
A love poem37 total reviews
Comment from Frank Malley
This is an exceptional poem about a young love lost as time has passed. The love's remembrances are saved in a box, pictures withdrawn to stimulate the imagination's return to a time gone.
The skillful author uses alternating rhymes that are well-chosen to avoid any hint of sing-song, and both feet and the meter of the poem is varied enough to sustain its sense as being more important than its music.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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This is an exceptional poem about a young love lost as time has passed. The love's remembrances are saved in a box, pictures withdrawn to stimulate the imagination's return to a time gone.
The skillful author uses alternating rhymes that are well-chosen to avoid any hint of sing-song, and both feet and the meter of the poem is varied enough to sustain its sense as being more important than its music.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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Thank you for this incredibly kind and perceptive review. Primarily I truck in free verse, so when I do adopt some rhyme scheme, I try very hard to avoid the sing-songy quality you mention (which I rather dislike actually; it can make poems sound a tad trite).
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Be well, Ben. Frank
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a powerful and moving poem about remembering the love of your life who you remember through love letters you kept over the years and she she remains in your heart as a ghost.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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a powerful and moving poem about remembering the love of your life who you remember through love letters you kept over the years and she she remains in your heart as a ghost.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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I?m glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from jenintorre
I really enjoyed reading this beautiful love story in a poem.It is such an original theme.
I think it should do very well in the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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I really enjoyed reading this beautiful love story in a poem.It is such an original theme.
I think it should do very well in the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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Thank you Jen. I?m glad you liked the poem. Unfortunately it was a wash in the contest. Oh well!
Comment from Lisasview
Oh, dear Ben,
I had no idea we were in the Love Poem Contest together!!!!
Yours is such a lovely poem...
I love the whole idea of a box of love letters... simply wonderful...
Lisa
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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Oh, dear Ben,
I had no idea we were in the Love Poem Contest together!!!!
Yours is such a lovely poem...
I love the whole idea of a box of love letters... simply wonderful...
Lisa
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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Thank you Lisa. Congratulations on your first place win!
Comment from rjuselius
This is a beautifully written piece of poetry dear Ben! Although rather sorrowful, i can find a small beacon of hope.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings with hugs!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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This is a beautifully written piece of poetry dear Ben! Although rather sorrowful, i can find a small beacon of hope.
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings with hugs!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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Thank you!
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, my! This is wonderfully evocative -- so sad, and yet, so uncommonly romantic. This is my favorite (although I loved all of it):
"...certain flourishes reminding me of laughter
as they rise and fall; the light purple ink
curling upwards like your lips after
some wry retort."
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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Oh, my! This is wonderfully evocative -- so sad, and yet, so uncommonly romantic. This is my favorite (although I loved all of it):
"...certain flourishes reminding me of laughter
as they rise and fall; the light purple ink
curling upwards like your lips after
some wry retort."
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much for this kind review! I?m glad you enjoyed the poem.
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It was my pleasure. Well done!
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Well tell you what Ben, this is a stunner! The rhymes are great and the story even better! I love a rambling tell of love and lost no matter what kind of love or lost it entails. You do these so well! Good luck.
Kiwi
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Well tell you what Ben, this is a stunner! The rhymes are great and the story even better! I love a rambling tell of love and lost no matter what kind of love or lost it entails. You do these so well! Good luck.
Kiwi
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much! I really appreciate it.
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You are welcome and that should of been "tale" as opposed to "tell". Sorry about that.
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No worries!
Comment from Michael Groover
Your poem paints a beautiful and poignant picture of a chance encounter and reconnection between two people at the corner of Church and Main on a snowy winter night. The imagery of the cold December night and falling snow sets a romantic and wistful atmosphere for the poem.
The narrative flows seamlessly as you describe the initial meeting, the stumble that leads to their interaction, and the instant connection that forms between them. The repetition of the phrase "on the corner of Church and Main" creates a rhythmic quality that reinforces the significance of the location in their story.
The use of descriptive language, such as "flakes on her skin," "silver terrain," and "whispered tones," enhances the sensory experience of the poem, allowing readers to feel the emotions and atmosphere of the moment.
The poem beautifully captures the fleeting nature of such chance encounters and the bittersweet longing that can result from missed opportunities. The ending brings a sense of hope and reunion, suggesting that fate and timing can sometimes align to bring two people back together.
Overall, your poem is a touching and evocative exploration of love, fate, and the enduring connection between two souls.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Your poem paints a beautiful and poignant picture of a chance encounter and reconnection between two people at the corner of Church and Main on a snowy winter night. The imagery of the cold December night and falling snow sets a romantic and wistful atmosphere for the poem.
The narrative flows seamlessly as you describe the initial meeting, the stumble that leads to their interaction, and the instant connection that forms between them. The repetition of the phrase "on the corner of Church and Main" creates a rhythmic quality that reinforces the significance of the location in their story.
The use of descriptive language, such as "flakes on her skin," "silver terrain," and "whispered tones," enhances the sensory experience of the poem, allowing readers to feel the emotions and atmosphere of the moment.
The poem beautifully captures the fleeting nature of such chance encounters and the bittersweet longing that can result from missed opportunities. The ending brings a sense of hope and reunion, suggesting that fate and timing can sometimes align to bring two people back together.
Overall, your poem is a touching and evocative exploration of love, fate, and the enduring connection between two souls.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Ummm, this review is for Jessica Wheeler?s poem, not mine.
Comment from Jessica Wheeler
Another brilliant piece, Ben. The imagery here is vivid and captivating. I really enjoyed the natural flow and rhyme scheme you maintain throughout, with excellent wording. My favorite line:
"Sometimes I unfold you--the way your hair
would tumble down like a final curtain,"
Breathtaking!
Xo
Jessica
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Another brilliant piece, Ben. The imagery here is vivid and captivating. I really enjoyed the natural flow and rhyme scheme you maintain throughout, with excellent wording. My favorite line:
"Sometimes I unfold you--the way your hair
would tumble down like a final curtain,"
Breathtaking!
Xo
Jessica
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Thank you Jessica. This really made my day!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this very sweet love poem writing prompt entry with us. I could feel the passion and I read. You did a great job describing this emotion. The rhymes and near rhymes are excellent.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Thank you for sharing this very sweet love poem writing prompt entry with us. I could feel the passion and I read. You did a great job describing this emotion. The rhymes and near rhymes are excellent.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Thank you!!! I?m so glad you enjoyed it.
