Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Searcher "This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
12 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Okay...a nice little reprieve, but always with that undertow. What horror lurks for this sweet and wonderful girl who just wants a normal, peaceful life? First, the grouch Mr. D, now the handsome dark-haired, blue-eyed interested seemingly okay boy. But you've taught us not to trust anything.
The poem at the beginning is so dark but excellent. Very eye-opening to your soul. Well done.
In the first sentence of the small font, two steps forward, one step....'back' was omitted by mistake.
Another interest-piquing chapter. You have the best knack for building blocks so gradually that we don't realize how quickly we're being swept along. That takes writing chops. xo
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Okay...a nice little reprieve, but always with that undertow. What horror lurks for this sweet and wonderful girl who just wants a normal, peaceful life? First, the grouch Mr. D, now the handsome dark-haired, blue-eyed interested seemingly okay boy. But you've taught us not to trust anything.
The poem at the beginning is so dark but excellent. Very eye-opening to your soul. Well done.
In the first sentence of the small font, two steps forward, one step....'back' was omitted by mistake.
Another interest-piquing chapter. You have the best knack for building blocks so gradually that we don't realize how quickly we're being swept along. That takes writing chops. xo
Comment Written 03-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Hello, my friend, I certainly did make that correction. Thank you so much. I want to thank you again for being my friend for being so helpful. For being the being the stand up candid person that you are thanks again!
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Lea, Sweetie, you do not have to thank me for being your friend. You're a really wonderful person. Only a moron wouldn't want to be friends with you. xoxo
Comment from LJbutterfly
Your memory is serving you well. You're beginning to recall even the smallest details, like the conversation between you and the dark haired guy. Even though you've lived a tough life, it has been a life filled with all sorts of adventures and horrors.
Your final author note should be edited. A new reader will not understand what you are trying to say.
"The story is from an autobile (autobiography)
Should you wish to read, please note sun. Chapters (Please note some chapters)
Chapters are difficult to digest reader the question is advised. (Some chapters are difficult to digest (the remainder of the sentence is unclear).
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Your memory is serving you well. You're beginning to recall even the smallest details, like the conversation between you and the dark haired guy. Even though you've lived a tough life, it has been a life filled with all sorts of adventures and horrors.
Your final author note should be edited. A new reader will not understand what you are trying to say.
"The story is from an autobile (autobiography)
Should you wish to read, please note sun. Chapters (Please note some chapters)
Chapters are difficult to digest reader the question is advised. (Some chapters are difficult to digest (the remainder of the sentence is unclear).
Comment Written 01-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much. Yes, I did see that and make the corrections. I appreciate you pointing them out. Because these things are gold to me as you may know. Thank you too for your kind Remarks and comments and suggestions. They are gold. And I hope that you're having the best day thanks again!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Even though you were working hard at applying for jobs, this feels like a relief or a rest stop at the end, with a young man who was more friendly than aggressive. It seems to serve as reminder that life is normal more often than not. I liked this nearly last paragraph a lot, but I was going to point out a few little fixes in a minor rewrite to make it stand out.
I gazed out the window as we drove along, watching the sunset tease the horizon with golds, pinks, orange and finally red. Succumbing to the drop, the sun made one last blast of color, shining under the clouds before slipping into slumber. It was tranquil...not a feeling I'm used to, but it brought me a smile just the same.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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Even though you were working hard at applying for jobs, this feels like a relief or a rest stop at the end, with a young man who was more friendly than aggressive. It seems to serve as reminder that life is normal more often than not. I liked this nearly last paragraph a lot, but I was going to point out a few little fixes in a minor rewrite to make it stand out.
I gazed out the window as we drove along, watching the sunset tease the horizon with golds, pinks, orange and finally red. Succumbing to the drop, the sun made one last blast of color, shining under the clouds before slipping into slumber. It was tranquil...not a feeling I'm used to, but it brought me a smile just the same.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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Wonderful, thank you so much. I appreciate your suggestions. They're like gold to me. Well. Implement them for sure. I hope that you're having a great evening and I thank you again for reading and offering your thoughts and you're fine rating too!
Comment from JSD
I can see in your head here. You must be wary of trusting anyone. Which is so sad when he might be a perfectly innocent person who has no ulterior motive. Fingers crossed. x
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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I can see in your head here. You must be wary of trusting anyone. Which is so sad when he might be a perfectly innocent person who has no ulterior motive. Fingers crossed. x
Comment Written 29-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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You do see that clearly i'm sure! Thank you so much again i'm so happy to receive your Reviews always glad to see you here. Your support is gold to me. Thank you again!
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
I almost feel like I may have missed a chapter, but I don't know how. I know that you met an Oriental woman and she offered you a place to stay. I guess I didn't realize you were going to be sleeping on a concrete bed-the other option being the floor. I think it would be trying to be staying at the home of someone of a completely different culture. I'm not sure I could do it, but as the saying goes, any port in a storm. I hope that things continue to improve, as you seem to be making some progress in getting a handle on your life.
I think if we're honest with ourselves, most of us question our sanity at times. We've been led to believe, through TV or books or movies that life can be perfect and without challenges, and when we discover that it's not true, we wonder if we're the problem. You've had an enormous amount to deal with in your life, problems that most of us have never encountered. Every day that you awaken and take a breath is a good day. I don't think a life without problems exists, but how we view and deal with those problems can make or break us. You're a survivor gal. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Hello Lea,
I almost feel like I may have missed a chapter, but I don't know how. I know that you met an Oriental woman and she offered you a place to stay. I guess I didn't realize you were going to be sleeping on a concrete bed-the other option being the floor. I think it would be trying to be staying at the home of someone of a completely different culture. I'm not sure I could do it, but as the saying goes, any port in a storm. I hope that things continue to improve, as you seem to be making some progress in getting a handle on your life.
I think if we're honest with ourselves, most of us question our sanity at times. We've been led to believe, through TV or books or movies that life can be perfect and without challenges, and when we discover that it's not true, we wonder if we're the problem. You've had an enormous amount to deal with in your life, problems that most of us have never encountered. Every day that you awaken and take a breath is a good day. I don't think a life without problems exists, but how we view and deal with those problems can make or break us. You're a survivor gal. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Tom, thank you so much.
Bruce apart and kind words really mean a lot to me! Thank you again For all your reboot for reading and for being here with Me. It is gold!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like the most optimistic post I have read so far Lea. Not that I expect you to just write an optimistic tale, we want to hear the truth, but I am just glad that things seem to be looking up for you at last. I also know that life can keep throwing hard balls when we are not looking though. Another fine chapter Lea, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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This sounds like the most optimistic post I have read so far Lea. Not that I expect you to just write an optimistic tale, we want to hear the truth, but I am just glad that things seem to be looking up for you at last. I also know that life can keep throwing hard balls when we are not looking though. Another fine chapter Lea, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much again Dolly! I appreciate all your kind comments always and forever grateful! Okay have the greatest day ever!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This post was calmer. I am wondering if this is the calm before the storm. I am guessing so. Thank you for sharing.
The next morning I woke with (The following morning and a comma after morning)
Oh shit!" He exclaimed. (lower case 'h' on 'he')
"Oh, yes please." I answered. (comma after please,")
I sat down with my coke and waited. (you can omit 'down' it's understood)
Not correcting the rest of the dialogue
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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This post was calmer. I am wondering if this is the calm before the storm. I am guessing so. Thank you for sharing.
The next morning I woke with (The following morning and a comma after morning)
Oh shit!" He exclaimed. (lower case 'h' on 'he')
"Oh, yes please." I answered. (comma after please,")
I sat down with my coke and waited. (you can omit 'down' it's understood)
Not correcting the rest of the dialogue
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Thank you again. I shall do a little self toughest as well. Try get this under control. I have gotten some help and i'm learning well thank you again!
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I write novels and actually writing the story is easy. It's the editing that's the hardest part. Of course, I write romance, your story is much different, so I'm sure writing is hard too. The editing is what many publishers look at. Of course, you can self-publish, but you'll struggle with marketing.
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Thank you so much. I appreciate you're exactly right. You're worthless and important and I have read some of your work too I think that you're an amazing writer and you're where you're at for a reason because you are so anything you have to say to me is like gold. Thank you again.!
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Thank you. I have 5 published books. Another one should be out in January. It's been through 3 editors and is now ready for me to okay it, but I'm finding additional errors, so it may have to go through another editing.
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I believe that that makes sense. I wanted to be perfect even if I can't make it so. I think that with your advice and others I will get there thank you again!
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I know you will.
Comment from EILEEN LAW
Again - powerful clear writing. You bring the reader along on the journey. I could almost feel the kink in my neck! And drink the warm Chai tea. Keep going!
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Again - powerful clear writing. You bring the reader along on the journey. I could almost feel the kink in my neck! And drink the warm Chai tea. Keep going!
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you again!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is sounding much better now. And do I assume that those raised voiced didn't result in your eviction? It's a lovely read after all the trauma you've suffered and the start of an affirmation that not all human life is to be avoided...I hope:) As ever, I always welcome your fine nature descriptions which so perfectly capture the glow of optimism and beauty that can never be extinguished. Take care, Lea! Debbie x
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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This is sounding much better now. And do I assume that those raised voiced didn't result in your eviction? It's a lovely read after all the trauma you've suffered and the start of an affirmation that not all human life is to be avoided...I hope:) As ever, I always welcome your fine nature descriptions which so perfectly capture the glow of optimism and beauty that can never be extinguished. Take care, Lea! Debbie x
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Thank you, Gabby, I'm glad you like it. I'm glad you like the nature stuff because I'll just adore it! That's always i'm very happy to see your review Your helpful comment and for supporting me I am eternally grateful! I hope your day is amazing!
Comment from Jacob1395
You tell your life story really well, Lea, in a really engaging way. I really can't imagine the trials you've been through. Another excellent chapter, it was really engaging.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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You tell your life story really well, Lea, in a really engaging way. I really can't imagine the trials you've been through. Another excellent chapter, it was really engaging.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Thank you again you are very insightful. I appreciate your comment very much. Thank you for your review. Thank you for hanging in there with me. Hope you have the best day!
