2023 Gypsy's Haiku
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Comment from aryr
This was a wonderful double haiku, Gypsy. Unfortunately 'Mom forgot to pay the power bill', poor mom! She will have to read between the lines. The pictures were ideal because the moon shone through the blinds. Then mom forgot to pay the bill. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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This was a wonderful double haiku, Gypsy. Unfortunately 'Mom forgot to pay the power bill', poor mom! She will have to read between the lines. The pictures were ideal because the moon shone through the blinds. Then mom forgot to pay the bill. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
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You are most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from dovemarie
Hi Gypsy, deep dark feelings, especially in line "mom forgot to pay the bills," and I can just see someone reading between the lines through window blinds on a dark, moonlit night. Dove
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Hi Gypsy, deep dark feelings, especially in line "mom forgot to pay the bills," and I can just see someone reading between the lines through window blinds on a dark, moonlit night. Dove
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
yea well electric is expensive... probably couldn't pay it lol
great double senryu
like the double meaning of reading between the lines
perfect second pic!!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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yea well electric is expensive... probably couldn't pay it lol
great double senryu
like the double meaning of reading between the lines
perfect second pic!!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Moonlight through the blinds is very beautiful. Forgetting to pay the electric bill is not a good thing, but things happen. Thank you for sharing this entire presentation with us. Great job.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Moonlight through the blinds is very beautiful. Forgetting to pay the electric bill is not a good thing, but things happen. Thank you for sharing this entire presentation with us. Great job.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was one of those poems that made me see two different scenes. One of the sweet mother who whispers lovingly to her child. The electric bill accidently forgotten. The other a mother who had been unable to pay. It was either formula or electricity. Very moving either way. Gretchen
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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This was one of those poems that made me see two different scenes. One of the sweet mother who whispers lovingly to her child. The electric bill accidently forgotten. The other a mother who had been unable to pay. It was either formula or electricity. Very moving either way. Gretchen
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
A great job with this, you've cleverly managed to weave some great stuff through this, ambiguity with a dash of abstraction sown deep with these senryu, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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A great job with this, you've cleverly managed to weave some great stuff through this, ambiguity with a dash of abstraction sown deep with these senryu, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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Welcome
Comment from lyenochka
That's so clever! You took the idiom of "reading between the lines" for hidden meanings to show us the physical reading between the lines of light offered by the moonlight since there was no electricity!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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That's so clever! You took the idiom of "reading between the lines" for hidden meanings to show us the physical reading between the lines of light offered by the moonlight since there was no electricity!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thank you, big sister, I'm happy you like it. I had an idea but I kept writing over and over until I got it right. It has been hard to write because Atticus is home. Thankfully, he goes back to school tomorrow.
Love
Marival (*<>*)