Return To Concorde Valley
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Edge of Destiny"Fantasy based on the intersection of two worlds.
20 total reviews
Comment from Jill D
I'm enjoying this Rhonda as you know I'm reading it to my mum, we got to bed late last night so we didn't get to read as many chapters as I would have liked plus we're at an exciting part where Echo will get to meet her future in laws .. Lol! I'm back at my mum's on Saturday night, tempted though to read on but it wouldn't go down very well with Joanie..xx
reply by the author on 30-May-2024
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I'm enjoying this Rhonda as you know I'm reading it to my mum, we got to bed late last night so we didn't get to read as many chapters as I would have liked plus we're at an exciting part where Echo will get to meet her future in laws .. Lol! I'm back at my mum's on Saturday night, tempted though to read on but it wouldn't go down very well with Joanie..xx
Comment Written 30-May-2024
reply by the author on 30-May-2024
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Awww, Jill, you're so sweet, and wow have you gotten far!! I'm so excited to have you dong this. It's an honor. Please tell mum hi and I hope she's liking it.
Hugs,
Rhonda
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She's loving it Rhonda thanks:) x
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Yay!!!!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I still have more to get through. This is so involving am going to copy this so I can read faster. I like this story very much. But without any points. I need to increase my time. I hope this does not offend you in any way. Karen
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I still have more to get through. This is so involving am going to copy this so I can read faster. I like this story very much. But without any points. I need to increase my time. I hope this does not offend you in any way. Karen
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
Comment from Pam (respa)
An excellent chapter, Rhonda. It held my attention all the way through. Echo and Theo are so good together. This was an important journey, one that became more important than she thought. Theo is more open with her and explains a few things here and there. It's nice to know she will have a chance to get her horse name and a patch, as well.
You did a great job with Theo's background and his parents. They certainly have a remarkable history. It will be interesting to see what their world is really like. I don't envy you doing all of the characters that will be involved, but I know you will do a good job, and I am looking forward to learning about this world, too.
A nice touch at the end when Theo blew into Echo's face so she wouldn't learn too much too fast. I assume that is the main reason, but there is probably more to it that will be explained. I don't think she will be happy that she was drugged while entering the valley that seemed so beautiful.
Well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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An excellent chapter, Rhonda. It held my attention all the way through. Echo and Theo are so good together. This was an important journey, one that became more important than she thought. Theo is more open with her and explains a few things here and there. It's nice to know she will have a chance to get her horse name and a patch, as well.
You did a great job with Theo's background and his parents. They certainly have a remarkable history. It will be interesting to see what their world is really like. I don't envy you doing all of the characters that will be involved, but I know you will do a good job, and I am looking forward to learning about this world, too.
A nice touch at the end when Theo blew into Echo's face so she wouldn't learn too much too fast. I assume that is the main reason, but there is probably more to it that will be explained. I don't think she will be happy that she was drugged while entering the valley that seemed so beautiful.
Well done, my friend.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Hi Pam,
Thank you for the very helpful review. I appreciate it and the golden stars!
There will be a lot of characters, you are so very right, however, I will try to keep track. If you start getting lost, please let me know.
I plan on writing a prequel on the parents when this book is finished. I?m glad their back story is coming through.
Theo is very careful to be considerate of Echo?s emotional state, while trying to satisfy her reporter?s needs.
Theo actually had two reasons for the sedative and Echo will forgive him for both, though she will be a bit upset at the beginning. After examining her leg earlier, he realizes just how bad it is, though he doesn?t let on to Echo.
Thanks again, my friend,
Rhonda
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Rhonda. Thanks for sharing in your reply. By the time I got to the end of the story, I had forgotten about the pain Echo was in. I am enjoying the story.
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Awww, thank you! Theo was trying to keep her mind off her pain and bide his time until he could get her to safety and help.
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Thanks for sharing.
Comment from Jacob1395
I loved the dialogue in this piece between Echo and Theo, and I thought you did a brilliant job of bringing their personalities to life. I found your writing really engaging and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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I loved the dialogue in this piece between Echo and Theo, and I thought you did a brilliant job of bringing their personalities to life. I found your writing really engaging and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Hi Jacob. I?m thrilled you read my chapter. I?m glad the dialogue worked out well as well as character development. I appreciate you!
Rhonda
Comment from rspoet
Hello Rhonda,
Another marvelous chapter in the book with excellent dialogue
and interaction between Echo and Theo. The story of Theo's early days
and his Primary Journey add nice depth the his character.
Theo's father sounds like quite a god: King, wise-man, doctor, warrior and gardener, plus the son of Poseidon's.
Their tree journey reminds me of gibbons effortlessly swinging from
branch to branch. :)
It's also nice to get away from the specters for awhile too.
When echo awakens, I think she'll be entering the Wonderful World of Oz,
or Magical Concorde Valley, a nice hook for the next chapter.
Well done, my friend.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Hello Rhonda,
Another marvelous chapter in the book with excellent dialogue
and interaction between Echo and Theo. The story of Theo's early days
and his Primary Journey add nice depth the his character.
Theo's father sounds like quite a god: King, wise-man, doctor, warrior and gardener, plus the son of Poseidon's.
Their tree journey reminds me of gibbons effortlessly swinging from
branch to branch. :)
It's also nice to get away from the specters for awhile too.
When echo awakens, I think she'll be entering the Wonderful World of Oz,
or Magical Concorde Valley, a nice hook for the next chapter.
Well done, my friend.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 29-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Hi Robert, thank you for the review and the six stars, my friend!!
I probably should add a bit about how sore her hands and feet are getting from all that swinging about, lol. My problem is I keep adding more and more until it gets super long. I need to perfect the flash fiction mentality to help with that.
Specters are away for a bit, but Echo will find worse eventually. For a while, there will just be fun, though.
Echo will love the new world, and its people, but snakes love a paradise!
Thanks again, for your wonderful review. I really do appreciate your time and attention to detail.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from w.j.debi
The story is progressing nicely. Theo has so much to reveal but is careful not to overwhelm Echo. It is best to discover things oneself. It makes them that much more special, adding to the wonder.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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The story is progressing nicely. Theo has so much to reveal but is careful not to overwhelm Echo. It is best to discover things oneself. It makes them that much more special, adding to the wonder.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Hi Debi!
Thank you for the brilliant six stars, and for your words of encouragement. You're right about Theo trying not to overwhelm poor Echo, at least not until he gets her to Concorde Valley, lol. No promises on the other side.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from lyenochka
What a fun conversation! It was like Echo interviewed Theo and each answer made her even more curious. I like the idea of the "name" as it reminds me of the secret name in the white stone given to each one in Revelation 2:17. Great introduction to the new world that Echo will experience.
Comment:
I've only heard the idiom "I have you know," as "I'll have you know". Did you want to leave out the future form?
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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What a fun conversation! It was like Echo interviewed Theo and each answer made her even more curious. I like the idea of the "name" as it reminds me of the secret name in the white stone given to each one in Revelation 2:17. Great introduction to the new world that Echo will experience.
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I've only heard the idiom "I have you know," as "I'll have you know". Did you want to leave out the future form?
Comment Written 29-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023
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Hi Helen, thank you for your beautiful review, my friend!
I actually didn?t make that connection with the names. Good observation. That one must have been Divine inspiration!
That was a typo on the quote. I?ll change it. Thanks for noticing!
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from royowen
I've always been a fan of stories thst arrested my time here on earth and projected me into an ethereal world of wonder as yours is certainly becoming, I love to see what's brewing in your mind dear Rhonda, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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I've always been a fan of stories thst arrested my time here on earth and projected me into an ethereal world of wonder as yours is certainly becoming, I love to see what's brewing in your mind dear Rhonda, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Roy, thank you so very much for the lovely six stars and for your comments in the review. I'm glad it was able to transform you to a different place. That is absolutely the purpose of this story.
Thank you again and again,
Rhonda
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Well done Rhonda
Comment from Ulla
Oh, Rhonda, this was a beautifully written chapter. I'm so glad I have one last six to give you. It is so well deserved. I'm spellbound by the the this wonderful story. I can't wait to reading on. Ullaxcx
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Oh, Rhonda, this was a beautifully written chapter. I'm so glad I have one last six to give you. It is so well deserved. I'm spellbound by the the this wonderful story. I can't wait to reading on. Ullaxcx
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Oh, Ulla, you are so generous!! Thank you for the stars and the review. You encourage me so much.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I love this story. Thank you for sharing it with us. I can't wait to find out what Echo learns in this strange new world.
Theo turned to Echo and spoke. "We've been (comma after 'spoke')
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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I love this story. Thank you for sharing it with us. I can't wait to find out what Echo learns in this strange new world.
Theo turned to Echo and spoke. "We've been (comma after 'spoke')
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you for the six stars, Barbara. I know how hard the are to hold onto and I appreciate the gift. I appreciate, as well, you're staying with the story and encouraging me.
Take care,
Rhonda