body,mercy,soul
mind,body,and soul5 total reviews
Comment from Bambam1
I liked it the word selection was really good although I just felt the same words were used but it is probably cause I haven't read a lot of this type poetry but I enjoyed it just the same
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I liked it the word selection was really good although I just felt the same words were used but it is probably cause I haven't read a lot of this type poetry but I enjoyed it just the same
Comment Written 09-Dec-2023
Comment from namspoon
I generously gave you 5 stars as I really had difficulty reading this poem. It seems that what you are trying to say is, all things are relative to all things.
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I generously gave you 5 stars as I really had difficulty reading this poem. It seems that what you are trying to say is, all things are relative to all things.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
Comment from Nicki Nance
This intense offering made me dizzy, but, just like I have done at many amusement parks, I couldn't wait to ride it again. Thanks for taking me for a spin.
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This intense offering made me dizzy, but, just like I have done at many amusement parks, I couldn't wait to ride it again. Thanks for taking me for a spin.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2023
Comment from Daylily
There is a lot of repetition going on in the lines of this poem.
I am not sure, but what I gain from reading it is that barriers fulfill an important role regarding the mind, body, and soul, plus there is significant influence from speed and light.
I am not at all an intellectual so there is probably something very deep that I am missing. In any case, I like the format consisting of three septet verses with the first one starting off with mercy.
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There is a lot of repetition going on in the lines of this poem.
I am not sure, but what I gain from reading it is that barriers fulfill an important role regarding the mind, body, and soul, plus there is significant influence from speed and light.
I am not at all an intellectual so there is probably something very deep that I am missing. In any case, I like the format consisting of three septet verses with the first one starting off with mercy.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
Comment from Wy Jung
Interesting format and philosophy to test out.
The no capitals and the use of old words makes it a little laborious but I believe in people creating their own style and practicing within it.
For this particular piece, my take is that it seems to be playing with words and their repetitions, but with so many repetitions circling back onto themselves, I didn't have a 'take away' feeling when I finished.
I'm curious as you continue writing if you will at some point adopt a new style that combines your current style with a storytelling element that keeps some of those beautiful old words alive by bringing them to the reader's attention within a story or phrase that grabs their curiosity about that word. Good luck!
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Interesting format and philosophy to test out.
The no capitals and the use of old words makes it a little laborious but I believe in people creating their own style and practicing within it.
For this particular piece, my take is that it seems to be playing with words and their repetitions, but with so many repetitions circling back onto themselves, I didn't have a 'take away' feeling when I finished.
I'm curious as you continue writing if you will at some point adopt a new style that combines your current style with a storytelling element that keeps some of those beautiful old words alive by bringing them to the reader's attention within a story or phrase that grabs their curiosity about that word. Good luck!
Comment Written 04-Dec-2023
