Scripted
Read between the lines.7 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This sounds like a beautiful happily-ever-after play that I would love to watch. This is an excellent, very creative approach to this entry, and I bet you will do great with it in the polls, Mystery Contestant. Good luck! xo
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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This sounds like a beautiful happily-ever-after play that I would love to watch. This is an excellent, very creative approach to this entry, and I bet you will do great with it in the polls, Mystery Contestant. Good luck! xo
Comment Written 26-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Thanks Rachelle. 'Happily-ever-after' would be nice.
Comment from Tina Crute
Engaging, relatable and a feel-good poem.
This is a whole-package presentation. Happiness was found in the poem and by the poem. The photo and poem are meant to be together.
Good luck in the contest!
Tina
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Engaging, relatable and a feel-good poem.
This is a whole-package presentation. Happiness was found in the poem and by the poem. The photo and poem are meant to be together.
Good luck in the contest!
Tina
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Very nice review. Thank you.
Comment from tempeste
I think we are all flawed the important thing is to learn from our past mistakes ..turn them into stepping stones that take us to a better place
Finally you have written a poem that ends on a positive note. Yeah!
I love how you constructed the poem too .. in acts.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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I think we are all flawed the important thing is to learn from our past mistakes ..turn them into stepping stones that take us to a better place
Finally you have written a poem that ends on a positive note. Yeah!
I love how you constructed the poem too .. in acts.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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You brought a smile to my face. ?a positive note?
Thank you!
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You now have 5 votes.. I?m glad to see others voted for this impactful poem. 😐
Comment from jim vecchio
This was an excellent approach to this competition. I admire the way the words of the stanzas grow, progressing from the previous one. This will probably be a winner.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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This was an excellent approach to this competition. I admire the way the words of the stanzas grow, progressing from the previous one. This will probably be a winner.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Wouldn?t that be nice. Thank you
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Wishing you the best!
Comment from Navada
What a lovely extended metaphor and imagery, extending to the visual image as well. I enjoyed the concept of a person's life separated into stages and telling different elements of the story - a bit like Shakespeare's seven ages of man, but in the unique form of a scriptwriter creating "transitions" between stages. I also like the positivity of the third stanza - it feels that this story is moving swiftly to an ideal resolution.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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What a lovely extended metaphor and imagery, extending to the visual image as well. I enjoyed the concept of a person's life separated into stages and telling different elements of the story - a bit like Shakespeare's seven ages of man, but in the unique form of a scriptwriter creating "transitions" between stages. I also like the positivity of the third stanza - it feels that this story is moving swiftly to an ideal resolution.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Wouldn?t that be grand. Thanks so much for your kind review.
Comment from Paul Manton
A great stacked haiku, and reminiscent of the Dickens novella, 'A Christmas Carol', where Scrooge is visited by the Spirits of Christmas Past, Present and Future - though he doesn't reach the right place until all three have educated him.
This poem is one of encouragement and optimism - a person who has learned from their mistakes a lot quicker than Scrooge! I particularly liked the phrase 'a present future'.
Well written. Thank you.
Paul
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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A great stacked haiku, and reminiscent of the Dickens novella, 'A Christmas Carol', where Scrooge is visited by the Spirits of Christmas Past, Present and Future - though he doesn't reach the right place until all three have educated him.
This poem is one of encouragement and optimism - a person who has learned from their mistakes a lot quicker than Scrooge! I particularly liked the phrase 'a present future'.
Well written. Thank you.
Paul
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Thanks Paul. Much appreciated.
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Welcome.
Comment from Janis M.
I love the creativity here and it is very fitting for the contest constraints. I think this will be a competitive winner. The presentation with the font and gray background was also useful and fitting to the poem.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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I love the creativity here and it is very fitting for the contest constraints. I think this will be a competitive winner. The presentation with the font and gray background was also useful and fitting to the poem.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Great. Glad you liked it. Thank you.
