Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

That's such a sad poem. I guess the time of the end of the day can be "tangled with the scent of death" both for the death of daylight and also of the person that the narrator grieves.

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2023

It's okay, in Japanese culture death is a transition from the physical world to nature. Jesei is an old kind of poem. I think it's similar for Christians, a transition between the physical world to heaven with God. It gives people hope.

I think the sadness of the poem reflects the sadness of family and friends left behind. Life is suffering until we accept God and living in the present moment. It's something I work towards. I am getting better. When I was young, I worried about the past and the future all the time... such a waste of time.

Thank you very much, Big Sister, I appreciate your continuing support, kindness, and helpful feedback.

Love,
MariVal

Comment from Mary Vigasin

Excellent

"His spirit soars free!" I must remember these words, considering the future may hold limited movement and, finally, death due to a debilitating disease in my household.
These are comforting words when death comes.
They are beautifully presented.
Best regard,
Mary

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I suppose because of my loss, this poem resonates with me so much. Each line brings us closer to the last line, His spirit soars free. That is so beautiful, and the words so comforting. Well done, I really liked this poem. Warmest hugs, Sandra xx

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023

Hello, Sandra,

I'm happy the poem is comforting. I know Ian's spirit soars free.

Thank you very much , my friend, may you have a serene and comforting day.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from aryr

Excellent

This was a great JISEI (death poem), Gypsy. What a pair of fantastic pictures, the first one was of the moon light night and the second one showed stones on the water. Your words were justified they showed that they were one both in death as in life. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs

reply by aryr on 24-Nov-2023

You are so very welcome, Gypsy.

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

yup- the spirit soars free. . .
love that line - great ending!

love the purple and imagistic word choices - nice smooth flow

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

Man, these Japanese death poems are very intense. I felt a chill as I read the line about the purple shadows covering the dead body. Very unique. Gretchen

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023

It's a zen concept that the spirit goes on, it doesn?t die, it changes form in nature.

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from royowen

Excellent

It's funny, I don't think I'd like to sit in the same room as someone who had died, this is a classically presented post, and a first class work, with great langage in the narrative well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023

Thank you, Roy. It's always great to hear from you.

Nobody is sitting with the dead body, just the wind and dusk. It's a jisei, a Japanese death poem. It goes back to the 17th century.

I appreciate you took the time to read my poem.

Gypsy hugs

reply by royowen on 24-Nov-2023

I did realise that

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

I find this particular form to be very interesting, but in a way kind of disturbing to think that somebody created this, anticipating their own death. You have presented it beautifully though. Have a great week and weekend coming up. Patricia.

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023

It's Japanese culture.

Thank you very much for your excellent review.