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This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"

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Comment from T B Botts
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Hello Lea,
It looks like I'm reading the story in order again. Of course it does no good to mention something after the fact, but all the alarm bells should have been ringing in your head. This gal is no friend, regardless of giving you a place to get out of the weather. I'll have to wait and see what happened, but hopefully you dumped this friend and left on the run.
Blessings,
Tom

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
    Oh yes I got angry every time I get angry stuff happens. I thank you. Yes, I did didn't take me long to wise up a matter of a couple of days and I was done. Thank you Tom happy to see you! Keep the wolves in the hills and your spouse in bed l o l! Enjoy your evening!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Congratulations on your 200-milestone post. This is very well written. You have a valuable story here that needs to be told. Keep an eye on punctuation.

My ankles and my wrists felt sore A low throb between my (a)

"Alright." She said. (Alright," she said)

We'll have to go tomorrow night though." E said. (though," E) I didn't correct the rest of the dialogue, but it needs to be corrected.

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
    Hi Barbara, thank you again. I appreciate it. I'm just trying to figure out how I can fix that issue. Because, as mentioned it's not my strong suit. Although I'm fully educating myself. I can see by your suggestions for edit. That there seems to be consistent thing going on here.s when there should be comments things like that feel it is registered. I would just like to have something that tells me if I'm right or wrong. I tried grammarly but for some reason process work on the site. I have to copy and paste it over to something else. And when I paste it back again on my formatting is gone. Definitely thinks I need to learn for sure. So I very much appreciate you doing this. I really do cause you are the consummate professional, you're number 1 for a reason I totally respect your opinion. I thank you again, Barbara, and you have very good things to say too. I'm I have to mention that as well thanks so much have a great night!
Comment from LJbutterfly
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You were in a situation where there was no way out. If you wanted to survive, you had to be a part of the only option available to you at the time. You did what any young girl in the same situation would have done. If you hadn't had that closet at the bottom of the stairs, you would have been in the street. I congratulate you on your ability to have survived that horrifying situation.

Congratulations also on your 200th milestone post.

 Comment Written 24-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
    As always your insight is clear like crystal!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
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Oy. This leaves me bereft. This is such an important story to tell, Lea, because it's the story of the lifelong repercussions of abuse. You keep WANTING to escape, but you don't have the necessary tools with which to formulate and carry out that plan effectively. I think this is what people who are unfamiliar with the situation don't understand. They naively think, "What's your problem? You're out from that awful house. Why don't you make better choices" And the answer is: We only know what we're TAUGHT in this world. At seventeen, plus as isolated as your life was, you had NO WAY to "know" any part of this horror that ensnared you.

I'm sending you barrels full of love today. I admire you SO very much. You're very special in the best possible way there is to be special. xoxo

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
    Thank you again you are amazing. Your insight is impeccable and clear side of the big picture is fabulous! Thank you so much my flame haired warrior friend! You're understanding is very much appreciated!
reply by Rachelle Allen on 23-Nov-2023
    My pleasure. xo
Comment from Jim Wile
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Lea, your story is so interesting and absorbing that yours are the first posts I read each day. Congratulations on your 200th post, by the way.

I found this passage particularly interesting: "My stepfather kicked me over and over along with K his new helper. This was a new addition to an old but powerful nightmare. The new feature in my dark dream." As if your life hadn't been horrible enough, now you have a whole other aspect to contend with. It sounds like bad luck that you happened to choose a friend like E to go to when you escaped from home. When will you ever catch a break?

It will be interesting to see how deeply you get sucked into this vortex since your resistance is low, but I know this about you: You are a fighter, and eventually you will overcome this too, where many in the same boat wouldn't. I just hope you aren't too hard on yourself for what happened. - Jim

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
    Thank you jim! I appreciate everything you say you always bring tears to my eyes with your kindness and empathy. You are one of the ones that keep me standing up and writing. I had a soon port to me. Thank you again!
Comment from BethShelby
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I don't think what you were feeling be unusual at all. I think most girls would feel the same as you. You are in a situation where there are no real answers. You don't feel you can go back home and your friend is the only one offering a temporary roof over you head and she is wanting to put you back into the same situation that led to rape. You feel you been used but with nightmares you don't see how you can move past it.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
    Thank you Beth you are the best! You're understanding is gold a precious gift. Thank you again for revealing for your fine rating as always. I appreciate you times ten! I hope you're enjoying you're day!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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This is such a harrowing story and my anger increases as I dwell on the wicked acts of those two men. I can fully understand how they fuse together into your nightmare because they aren't humans, they're a force of evil, whose spell you're going to break forever. Even allowing for youth, I'm astounded by the insensitivity of your friend. Rest with soothing music after this, Lea. I must overlook the small edits here. Take care Debbie

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
    Thank you Debbie! There are definitely things to work on got sure. I just have to speed it up for now. And I think you understand that thank you very much. I really appreciate you pointing out the edits. It is very helpful to me. I thank you for hanging in there too I know it's hard sometimes to read these kinds of things. I do come to a place of understanding believe me hard one but there. Thank you again my friend I hope you have a wonderful day!
Comment from JSD
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Yes there are errors but we can overlook them as you pour out your troubles, your memories and your feelings. Let this writing be as cleansing as that hot bath. Tears form for you. Xxx

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
    Thank you John has always you're so kind and understanding! I know that some of this is tough to read. So I'm so happy to see you. Hanging in there with me is so supportive and kind thank you again!
Comment from Chuck Keller
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WOW Kiddo
It's intense and painful to read
I can relate to the "out of body" experience
Sometimes in order to survive we must exit reality
I likened it to hovering over myself in Vietnam
Watching myself work but allowing the spirit to be somehow separated from the horror
I'm still here.
So sorry for your experience but hopeful that in the end telling the story will be freeing and helpful

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
    Hi Chuck! I'm sorry you had to go through Is such an ordeal as going to war. I've read about Vietnam, not good. Although it's the not same kind of war. I thank you very much as always for your kind words and your comments of support. That mean so much to me thank you have a great day!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This is a painful post to read Lea as the realisation of being brutally violated is dreadful. The feeling of despair and hopelessness here is terrifying Lea. You are just a girl fighting in the arena with grown men and being beaten time and time again. These men should both be punished for what they did to you Lea. It makes me angry that you had no one to stick up for you and fight for you. Another fine chapter in your very sad story Lea, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
    Thank you again such an awesome and insightful review! Don't let to do appreciate you reading alone I know what's not easy sometimes. Oh my gratefully appreciate this thank you!