Miranda's Trouble In Paradise
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Lol, I hardly think so! Cash or nothing with those girls. So that's where we are off to next. That'll be fun, I've never been in one before. Obviously you've had to do your research!!! LOL!
Miranda's session with Dr Carrie went well. I'm glad it did. I wonder what is in those letters. I wish she would open them. Okay, I'm off to the Nudie Bar!! They might teach me how to pole dance without creaking my back!! Lol :)) Sandra xxx Just discovered I'm all caught up! Next Please!! xxx
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Lol, I hardly think so! Cash or nothing with those girls. So that's where we are off to next. That'll be fun, I've never been in one before. Obviously you've had to do your research!!! LOL!
Miranda's session with Dr Carrie went well. I'm glad it did. I wonder what is in those letters. I wish she would open them. Okay, I'm off to the Nudie Bar!! They might teach me how to pole dance without creaking my back!! Lol :)) Sandra xxx Just discovered I'm all caught up! Next Please!! xxx
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Haha! No research, just a doggone good imagination. Thanks for this review and fun comments. Gretchen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
It sounds like Mitch was right about Miranda seeing Carrie. Therapy works for most people. I think it will be helpful.
Poor Miranda, I can understand why she has bad memories of Missy trying to kill her at Haynes Pond. But Miranda has good memories about kissing Mitch. He is a good guy.... a keeper.
The end is funny. It's hard for men not to look at sexy girls, but I wouldn't worry about Mitch.
You are the expert writer but this sounds a little awkward to me....
"I can see why you picked here to meet."
Maybe....
(( I can see why you picked to meet here ))
Maybe that's the way the chapter speaks.
Well done!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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It sounds like Mitch was right about Miranda seeing Carrie. Therapy works for most people. I think it will be helpful.
Poor Miranda, I can understand why she has bad memories of Missy trying to kill her at Haynes Pond. But Miranda has good memories about kissing Mitch. He is a good guy.... a keeper.
The end is funny. It's hard for men not to look at sexy girls, but I wouldn't worry about Mitch.
You are the expert writer but this sounds a little awkward to me....
"I can see why you picked here to meet."
Maybe....
(( I can see why you picked to meet here ))
Maybe that's the way the chapter speaks.
Well done!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Men are men and he will, of course be looking. Might see more than he wants too. Lol. Thanks for this kind review. Gretchen
Comment from w.j.debi
I take it that Waylon will not be joining them. Pizza and T.V. will keep him occupied while the grown-ups go out.
The dialogue is realistic. Glad to see Mitch and Miranda have made up.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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I take it that Waylon will not be joining them. Pizza and T.V. will keep him occupied while the grown-ups go out.
The dialogue is realistic. Glad to see Mitch and Miranda have made up.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Thanks so much. I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter. Gretchen
Comment from John Ciarmello
Well, it seems the meeting went well. Carrie is a believable character, and I won't be emboldened enough to attempt a guess as to whether you've had experience with shrinks or not! Hahaha!
I'm not sure where the nudie bar scene is going. I may be forgetting some back narrative or dialogue on Miranda promising someone she'd check it out. Oh, Well! I'm sure it will all come out or perhaps OFF! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Well, it seems the meeting went well. Carrie is a believable character, and I won't be emboldened enough to attempt a guess as to whether you've had experience with shrinks or not! Hahaha!
I'm not sure where the nudie bar scene is going. I may be forgetting some back narrative or dialogue on Miranda promising someone she'd check it out. Oh, Well! I'm sure it will all come out or perhaps OFF! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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She promised Rita to look into her husband's late nights. Should be a fun time at the club. Gretchen
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Ahh! That's right! Okay, I got it!
Comment from Jacob1395
You have some well formed characters here and I enjoyed reading the conversation between Mitch and Carrie. Mitch sounds like a person who has been through some tough times, especially when he talks about what happened between him and Missy. The dialogue was really engaging and you held my interest, I'm looking forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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You have some well formed characters here and I enjoyed reading the conversation between Mitch and Carrie. Mitch sounds like a person who has been through some tough times, especially when he talks about what happened between him and Missy. The dialogue was really engaging and you held my interest, I'm looking forward to reading more.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
Well, this ought to be interesting. This is a bit of a surprising development, going to a gentlemen's club. Why are they called that anyway? Sounds better than glorified peep show I guess. Another great chapter gal. I'm glad she's meeting the therapist. I liked the comment about being paid before she gives her opinion. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Hello Gretchen,
Well, this ought to be interesting. This is a bit of a surprising development, going to a gentlemen's club. Why are they called that anyway? Sounds better than glorified peep show I guess. Another great chapter gal. I'm glad she's meeting the therapist. I liked the comment about being paid before she gives her opinion. Well done.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Thanks, Tom. The next chapter should be fun and enlightening. Lol. I appreciate the extra star. Gretchen
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Okay; it's Wednesday. You KNOW I am far too impetuous to still have a sixth star by this point in the week. I'll give you a Lucky Leprechaun boost, instead. Sorry.
I do love this chapter --full of interesting facets, like the give-and-take with Carrie [she is so chill and likable!], what Miranda might see at the ti--um, I mean "gentlemen's club," and how Mitch and Miranda are now back on track.
I really do love the way you write, Gretchen. xoxo
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Okay; it's Wednesday. You KNOW I am far too impetuous to still have a sixth star by this point in the week. I'll give you a Lucky Leprechaun boost, instead. Sorry.
I do love this chapter --full of interesting facets, like the give-and-take with Carrie [she is so chill and likable!], what Miranda might see at the ti--um, I mean "gentlemen's club," and how Mitch and Miranda are now back on track.
I really do love the way you write, Gretchen. xoxo
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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I know exactly what she's going to see at said Gentlemen's club. Lots of young T and A. Lol. I can't wait for Mitchs reaction while in there. Thanks for this. I'm glad you enjoyed this and thanks for the lucky Leprechaun tag. Gretchen
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My pleasure.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Mitch is so teasing her. I hope she doesn't fall for it. LOL I love the banter. This is a very good post and I so enjoy them together. I wish Miranda would have opened up about the phone call, but okay, we'll have it for later. Good job writing.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Mitch is so teasing her. I hope she doesn't fall for it. LOL I love the banter. This is a very good post and I so enjoy them together. I wish Miranda would have opened up about the phone call, but okay, we'll have it for later. Good job writing.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Thanks for this, Barbara. I'm so glad you enjoy those two characters. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
Morning here. I read this last night. Interesting aftermath at the lagoon or whatever and the first interview with the therapist. Keep it coming I want to see where it goes with the therapist and Mitch with Miranda.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Morning here. I read this last night. Interesting aftermath at the lagoon or whatever and the first interview with the therapist. Keep it coming I want to see where it goes with the therapist and Mitch with Miranda.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Thanks so much for this nice review. I am clueless about where it's going. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Come on now that's funny, I don't care who you are,
The story gets more involved, I will keep reading, it's got me all wrapped up in it. Happy Turkey Day, Karen
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Come on now that's funny, I don't care who you are,
The story gets more involved, I will keep reading, it's got me all wrapped up in it. Happy Turkey Day, Karen
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Thanks, Karen. I'm glad you got a kick out of this. Gretchen
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You write very well. Karen