Spectre
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "The Other World P3"This is book two of a trilogy book 1 "Ghost"
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
These chapters are hard to read, and for you hard to relive I am sure.
You had no idea the situation you, or your friend, was putting you into. There was never any blame for you, Lea.
stay strong,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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These chapters are hard to read, and for you hard to relive I am sure.
You had no idea the situation you, or your friend, was putting you into. There was never any blame for you, Lea.
stay strong,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Thank you, Valda, your kindness, and your empathy is very important. Appreciate your understanding above all! I hope you have the best holiday season and it's filled with love and joy. Thank you again my friend!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is the second time this week that hearing or reading something has made me feel perpetually sad for someone. The first time was regarding a young student whose family was homeless. It was no fault of his own. And how awful that a man took advantage of you with that stuff you described as: something that tasted like honey and had a weird chemical aftertaste. That friend of yours must have never really known love, either, if her standards were that low. That man was just after gratifying himself. It doesn't matter if you started with marijuana or alcohol. Legally, whatever he added on to that is reprehensible in committing assault against a minor, and even if he didn't literally force it down your throat, it would still be contributing to the delinquency of a minor. The dream at the end confused me because of the last line: "C'mon slut, it's time for you to be one."
I take it that dreams and reality were starting to blur together symbolically if not in actuality. Maybe the next few posts will explain that sentence better.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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This is the second time this week that hearing or reading something has made me feel perpetually sad for someone. The first time was regarding a young student whose family was homeless. It was no fault of his own. And how awful that a man took advantage of you with that stuff you described as: something that tasted like honey and had a weird chemical aftertaste. That friend of yours must have never really known love, either, if her standards were that low. That man was just after gratifying himself. It doesn't matter if you started with marijuana or alcohol. Legally, whatever he added on to that is reprehensible in committing assault against a minor, and even if he didn't literally force it down your throat, it would still be contributing to the delinquency of a minor. The dream at the end confused me because of the last line: "C'mon slut, it's time for you to be one."
I take it that dreams and reality were starting to blur together symbolically if not in actuality. Maybe the next few posts will explain that sentence better.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2023
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This is a great and wonderful review you have Offer very good valid points and some great insight too For which I really appreciate your review and your comments as well. You got great insight too. Thank you for the review and rating!
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
I'm sorry that you had to have such an unpleasant experience for what should be reserved for two people in love. Your friend sounds like a real piece of work. I understand that you needed to keep a roof over your head, but at what cost? It's too bad that you didn't meet up with a church group like the Salvation Army who could have helped you, but you obviously had no experience with who to turn to when you had a need. I hope that you've forgiven yourself. We've all done things we regret, but beating ourselves up doesn't help any. We can't go back and change the past. I'm hoping that other young women will learn from your unpleasant experience. Have a blessed evening gal.
Tom
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Hello Lea,
I'm sorry that you had to have such an unpleasant experience for what should be reserved for two people in love. Your friend sounds like a real piece of work. I understand that you needed to keep a roof over your head, but at what cost? It's too bad that you didn't meet up with a church group like the Salvation Army who could have helped you, but you obviously had no experience with who to turn to when you had a need. I hope that you've forgiven yourself. We've all done things we regret, but beating ourselves up doesn't help any. We can't go back and change the past. I'm hoping that other young women will learn from your unpleasant experience. Have a blessed evening gal.
Tom
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Further to my email, thank you so much for your wonderful review. And you're fine reading very much appreciate it!
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is another phenomenal, but gut wrenching chapter. You had a very realistic realization. You equated being wanted with love. I still say...not your fault. You didn't know how to recognize real love. The thought of love sounded good, so you did what you had to do to get it. Except it wasn't love.
It's like a baby who sees fire for the first time and thinks it's pretty. The baby reaches out to touch the beauty, and gets burnt. The baby didn't know, until it got burnt.
You got burnt by new evil people.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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This is another phenomenal, but gut wrenching chapter. You had a very realistic realization. You equated being wanted with love. I still say...not your fault. You didn't know how to recognize real love. The thought of love sounded good, so you did what you had to do to get it. Except it wasn't love.
It's like a baby who sees fire for the first time and thinks it's pretty. The baby reaches out to touch the beauty, and gets burnt. The baby didn't know, until it got burnt.
You got burnt by new evil people.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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You are so incredibly right. And you hit the nail right on the head. With this one yeah, I did a lot of finger fires there. It was unfortunate, but the only way to learn was to make a mistake. We remember those always. Your review is right on the money and Perfect commentary all the way through. Your reviews are amazing and I thank you for them. Your comments are always confirmational in a lot of ways to me. So I don't feel so alone and that is a beautiful thing. I thank you for it! I hope you have the best evening!
Comment from Jim Wile
Lea, this was so well written the way you began with that eerie poem then the remarks about your naivete. It sounds like you were blaming yourself for your naivete, but you don't need to. You had led a sheltered, abnormal life; how could you not have been naive about life and love? You had never experienced either.
None of what happened was your fault. Yes, you might have made some different decisions, but peer pressure is very tough for young, inexperienced people to fight, and you were going along to get along the way your upbringing had trained you to do. Even if you'd had an inkling of what would eventually happen, your naivete told you that if he wanted you, that meant he loved you.
You felt such guilt about it afterward that you had a horrible dream that your biggest tormentor was giving you your just desserts for being the things he had always called you.
Every part of this chapter was so well done. The preamble, the description of the action, and the analysis afterward. This was perhaps the most horrible chapter in your story so far because it served to rob you of your self-respect. It was so sad, and I felt like crying along with you in that closet. My heart goes out to you, my friend. - Jim
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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Lea, this was so well written the way you began with that eerie poem then the remarks about your naivete. It sounds like you were blaming yourself for your naivete, but you don't need to. You had led a sheltered, abnormal life; how could you not have been naive about life and love? You had never experienced either.
None of what happened was your fault. Yes, you might have made some different decisions, but peer pressure is very tough for young, inexperienced people to fight, and you were going along to get along the way your upbringing had trained you to do. Even if you'd had an inkling of what would eventually happen, your naivete told you that if he wanted you, that meant he loved you.
You felt such guilt about it afterward that you had a horrible dream that your biggest tormentor was giving you your just desserts for being the things he had always called you.
Every part of this chapter was so well done. The preamble, the description of the action, and the analysis afterward. This was perhaps the most horrible chapter in your story so far because it served to rob you of your self-respect. It was so sad, and I felt like crying along with you in that closet. My heart goes out to you, my friend. - Jim
Comment Written 23-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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Jimmy, you are just the best reviewer in the best person. Really not too many in your caliber. I can think of a few on this site including yourself that are people of integrity. Thank you again!
Comment from Chuck Keller
Brutal and heartbreaking, Lea
I know a little about being naive enough to think someone cares.
There are few things more painful than a young broken heart.
What you endured that first time is unthinkable to me.
I'm against the death penalty but I'd have no problem with someone causing great pain to "K"
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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Brutal and heartbreaking, Lea
I know a little about being naive enough to think someone cares.
There are few things more painful than a young broken heart.
What you endured that first time is unthinkable to me.
I'm against the death penalty but I'd have no problem with someone causing great pain to "K"
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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You have definitely been through it too I think and the different things you have shared with me. I appreciate that you do as well! PTSD can be debilitating. Thank you, my friend for your review once again. I'm always happy to receive it. No, it's happy to see you here. Have the best day!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
My prayers are with you.
if a guy desired me, then he must love me too. (Far too many females still fall into that trap.)
"It's okay honey, I like it this way." The mans voice said. (way," The man's voice)
"Your thirsty." he said. "Drink this." He gave me something that tasted like honey and had a weird chemical aftertaste. "What was that?" I slurred. "Untie me." "Take it easy beautiful, just relax." (TRY:
"Your thirsty," he said. "Drink this." He gave me something that tasted like honey and had a weird chemical aftertaste.
"What was that?" I slurred. "Untie me."
"Take it easy beautiful, just relax.")
"You got laid, that's what happened." She said. (happened," she) & and you need to correct the rest of your dialogue)
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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My prayers are with you.
if a guy desired me, then he must love me too. (Far too many females still fall into that trap.)
"It's okay honey, I like it this way." The mans voice said. (way," The man's voice)
"Your thirsty." he said. "Drink this." He gave me something that tasted like honey and had a weird chemical aftertaste. "What was that?" I slurred. "Untie me." "Take it easy beautiful, just relax." (TRY:
"Your thirsty," he said. "Drink this." He gave me something that tasted like honey and had a weird chemical aftertaste.
"What was that?" I slurred. "Untie me."
"Take it easy beautiful, just relax.")
"You got laid, that's what happened." She said. (happened," she) & and you need to correct the rest of your dialogue)
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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Hi Barbara, thank you so much for this. Yeah, punctuation is not my strong suit. It is true I will need to edit for Punctuations and some sentence structures issues perhaps. Thank you. I appreciate you pointing out the edits.
That's awesome.. Thanks so much! I hope your day is amazing and I thank you for your fine review and rating!
Comment from patcelaw
I am so sorry that you have to go through this, but I am thrilled that you have been able to write about it and be able to get some freedom from the pain that you suffered from the abuse. I admire your work and I wish you the very best with all of your books. Patricia.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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I am so sorry that you have to go through this, but I am thrilled that you have been able to write about it and be able to get some freedom from the pain that you suffered from the abuse. I admire your work and I wish you the very best with all of your books. Patricia.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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Further to my message. Thank you again. Have a great day!
Comment from Jacob1395
This is such a powerful, emotive, and an intense piece of writing. I could sense the fear and feel the anger coming through, and I am really sorry for what you went through. This is a really well told piece and I applaud you for having the courage to tell your story.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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This is such a powerful, emotive, and an intense piece of writing. I could sense the fear and feel the anger coming through, and I am really sorry for what you went through. This is a really well told piece and I applaud you for having the courage to tell your story.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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Thank you again thank you so much!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Ohhhhhh, Honey. Oh, Sweetie, Sweetie Girl. Not ONE part of that is on you. Not. One. Single. Second of that has ANYTHING to do with perceived .shortcomings of YOURS. You're a grown-up now. You know things. If you were watching this happen to a seventeen-year-old girl, would you for ONE MOMENT think, "Oh, she did this to herself." You know for a fact you would NEVER think that. Because it would be wrong. This is an egregious wrong that was committed against you. I hope the perpetrators suffer long, tortured, horrible lives. You were a child, and they used that to their fullest disgusting advantage. Ugh. Sending you just SOO so much love today, you amazing BRAVE, extremely talented woman.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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Ohhhhhh, Honey. Oh, Sweetie, Sweetie Girl. Not ONE part of that is on you. Not. One. Single. Second of that has ANYTHING to do with perceived .shortcomings of YOURS. You're a grown-up now. You know things. If you were watching this happen to a seventeen-year-old girl, would you for ONE MOMENT think, "Oh, she did this to herself." You know for a fact you would NEVER think that. Because it would be wrong. This is an egregious wrong that was committed against you. I hope the perpetrators suffer long, tortured, horrible lives. You were a child, and they used that to their fullest disgusting advantage. Ugh. Sending you just SOO so much love today, you amazing BRAVE, extremely talented woman.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2023
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You're always so kind to me.
Brings tears to my eyes. I appreciate it so very much I hope you know. I'm sure you do. You're understanding this is a great gift too! I appreciate everything you say all your advice and all your kind words. Thank you so much and for the review as well as your fine rating, thank you!
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Always my pleasure, Sweetie. xo
