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Comment from Kate MacDonald
An amazing tale, showing the pain of what might have been, coupled with the secret held for so long, then the joy of a secret shared. The loss, and the gain, so much to deal with.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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An amazing tale, showing the pain of what might have been, coupled with the secret held for so long, then the joy of a secret shared. The loss, and the gain, so much to deal with.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2023
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Wow, how nice you would not only review this one that is no longer promoted. But give it a six star too. Thank you so much for your kind comments for my Merry~go~Rhyme for my Mom?s confession.
I appreciate it all so very much, my dear friend.
Comment from Father Flaps
Wow! That's quite a story, Debi. Your poor mother, set aside by that no-good in college. I hope he never tries to look up his son. He doesn't deserve to find him. But I'm glad you and your mother sought him out, and reconnected. It must have been so good for her. And now you have found your half-brother, Roger. Hopefully, you can stay in touch across the miles.
Thanks for sharing this story, and another Merry~go~Rhyme, complete with rules in the Author notes.
Just a couple of minor suggestions...
"But that's when she started to bawl" ... ( I suggest,
But that's when she began to bawl)
"Of three brothersI've always known" ... ( I suggest,
Of brothers three I'd always known)
Thanks for sharing, Debi!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Wow! That's quite a story, Debi. Your poor mother, set aside by that no-good in college. I hope he never tries to look up his son. He doesn't deserve to find him. But I'm glad you and your mother sought him out, and reconnected. It must have been so good for her. And now you have found your half-brother, Roger. Hopefully, you can stay in touch across the miles.
Thanks for sharing this story, and another Merry~go~Rhyme, complete with rules in the Author notes.
Just a couple of minor suggestions...
"But that's when she started to bawl" ... ( I suggest,
But that's when she began to bawl)
"Of three brothersI've always known" ... ( I suggest,
Of brothers three I'd always known)
Thanks for sharing, Debi!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 25-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Hi Kimbob, great suggestions. I am going to go edit them right now. They are small ones but I do see how it adds something.
I thank you so much for the sweet review and kind comments for my mom's story. I appreciate it so very much, my friend.
Love, Debi
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Hi Debi,
When you read each line, you'll notice that "started" is usually spoken with the accent on the first syllable "start", but your line calls for the accented syllable to be on the "ed" of "started".
"Began" works better because the normal accent is on the second syllable "gan", and that's where you want the accent for smooth reading. Does that make sense?
It's the same thing with "brothers". The normal accent is on the first syllable "broth" rather than the second syllable "ers". Your line calls for "broth" to be unaccented and "ers" to be accented. That's not what you want for smooth reading. "Of brothers three" fixes the problem.
Hugs,
Kimbob
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Oh shoot. I think I forgot to change that one. I thought I did two, but now I have to go check. Thanks for the reminder. Yes, I definitely see the difference. And I always appreciate the awesome suggestions.
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You know what I did. I completely missed that suggestion because I thought you were telling me to change from I've to I'd. and I did. So I missed that suggestion until now. It makes complete sense. But I did fix it now. Thanks again, Kimbob.
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I'm happy to help, Debi!
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Oooh I like this picture best. She is adorable!
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My granddaughter, Isla Bennie McAdam, 3 years old.
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♥️
Comment from June Sargent
What an awesome story in a poem! And it has a happy ending. So glad you and your mom got to meet your half brother. I must try this merry go round form! Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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What an awesome story in a poem! And it has a happy ending. So glad you and your mom got to meet your half brother. I must try this merry go round form! Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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thanks for the very sweet review and for the kind comments for my mom's story.
I appreciate it so very much, my dear friend.
Comment from Sanku
It must have broken her hear to give the baby for adoption .But God's ways are strange and she gotto meet him as grown up son. It is a touching story Debi.. Thanks for sharing .I am glad you have new brother..
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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It must have broken her hear to give the baby for adoption .But God's ways are strange and she gotto meet him as grown up son. It is a touching story Debi.. Thanks for sharing .I am glad you have new brother..
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Hi Santha, I am running behind, as I had so many in a row again. However, I appreciate more than you could possibly know the lovely review for my mom?s poem, your sweet comments and the honor of your six stars. She would have loved you too. 😘🤗
Comment from Douglas Goff
My goodness. Sounds like your mom dodged a real jerk in college.
I'm glad it all worked out and you have a new brother.
Great rhymes in this. I liked this part:
She begged to keep him, so unfair
And every night, for him, a prayer
Very good, my friend.
D
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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My goodness. Sounds like your mom dodged a real jerk in college.
I'm glad it all worked out and you have a new brother.
Great rhymes in this. I liked this part:
She begged to keep him, so unfair
And every night, for him, a prayer
Very good, my friend.
D
Comment Written 24-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Hi Douglas, what an awesome review. Thank you for the kind comments for my mom's story. I appreciate it so very much, my friend.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I am so pleased your mother got to see her son before she passed away, and that you still have a good relationship with him. So many young girls had to give their babies up when the father's walked away. It never leaves the mother, the loss, the guilt, everything. If only the fathers knew what they'd done. But they walk away without a care. This was beautifully written, my friend. Love you lots. Sandra xx
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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I am so pleased your mother got to see her son before she passed away, and that you still have a good relationship with him. So many young girls had to give their babies up when the father's walked away. It never leaves the mother, the loss, the guilt, everything. If only the fathers knew what they'd done. But they walk away without a care. This was beautifully written, my friend. Love you lots. Sandra xx
Comment Written 23-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2023
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Hi Sandra, thanks for the very sweet review. Thank you for the kind comments for my mom's story. I appreciate it so very much, my friend.
Comment from Julie Lau
How heartfelt this is! It's wonderful that you gene-connected people were able to meet, and have grown close. Hopefully such situations will be treated with more compassion and common-sense in time; not all this secrecy and suppression.
Julie x
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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How heartfelt this is! It's wonderful that you gene-connected people were able to meet, and have grown close. Hopefully such situations will be treated with more compassion and common-sense in time; not all this secrecy and suppression.
Julie x
Comment Written 23-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Hi Julie, thank you so much for the sweet review and kind comments for my mom's story. I appreciate it so very much, my friend.
Love, Debi
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Hi Julie, thank you so much for the sweet review and kind comments for my mom's story. I appreciate it so very much, my friend.
Love, Debi
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
We have lots to be thankful for even if we have disappointments in our life. I miss my husband so much as he left this earth on October 18th. Yes, I have children, their spouses, and grandchildren so I'm thankful but I also miss him so much.
I enjoyed your story-like poem. You have gone through so much in life, too. May God reach out to you and your family this Thanksgiving.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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We have lots to be thankful for even if we have disappointments in our life. I miss my husband so much as he left this earth on October 18th. Yes, I have children, their spouses, and grandchildren so I'm thankful but I also miss him so much.
I enjoyed your story-like poem. You have gone through so much in life, too. May God reach out to you and your family this Thanksgiving.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Hi there Rosemary, i was wondering how you did this year? I know family who are missing their dad had to help being together. At least I hope you had each other?
I thank you so much for the sweet review and kind comments for my mom's story. I appreciate it so very much, my friend.
Love, Debi
Comment from jmdg1954
You never know where life will take you and only God in his divine way knows what's in store.
It's nice that you have a relationship with this sibling and I have a sense of where you get your strength and loving ways from... your mom!
Thank you for sharing such a personal part of your life with us, your extended family
Have a blessed Thanksgiving .
John
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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You never know where life will take you and only God in his divine way knows what's in store.
It's nice that you have a relationship with this sibling and I have a sense of where you get your strength and loving ways from... your mom!
Thank you for sharing such a personal part of your life with us, your extended family
Have a blessed Thanksgiving .
John
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Hi John, I was just at your place, but you and Debbie must have been gone for the evening. lol...
I thank you so much for the sweet review and kind comments for my mom's story. I appreciate it so very much, my friend.
Love, Debi
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Sorry we missed you. Jackson, our 5yr old grandson stayed the weekend after Thanksgiving. We took him into NYC today. Walked and walked and walked. Met up with our son, Mark after he finished work.
It was a great day.
John
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How delightful. Well that answers my question. I had hoped you were together with your family. Awesome!
Comment from Jacob1395
It was amazing that your mom got to spend some time with your brother before she passed away, and it is even more so that you still have a relationship. A really well written piece. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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It was amazing that your mom got to spend some time with your brother before she passed away, and it is even more so that you still have a relationship. A really well written piece. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2023
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Hi there Jacob, I thank you so much for the sweet review and kind comments for my mom's story. I appreciate it so very much, my friend.
Love, Debi
