Comment from Wendyanne

Excellent

This is an interesting and intriguing chapter of your book which makes me want to learn more about what's happened to the characters in the past. I look forward to reading more.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023

Thank you I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I read this post out of order. Now, I wanting to know if Caz is dead. It sure sounds like she is. What happened and why? Thank you for sharing.

'What does he want Angela? (comma after 'want')

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023

Thank you Barbara.

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Another intriguing chapter... I was hankering for some action and revelations but I now get the sense that won't be happening soon.

More clues, though!

Karenina

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023

Thank you Karenina.

reply by karenina on 20-Nov-2023

Welcome!

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

The mystery deepens as we are still in the dark here Jacob. We are siting on the edge of our seats as your story slowly unfolds, much enjoyed.

Just a couple of suggestions here:

(Is that why he's so irate (with) you with now?')

(How dare (she), after all this time, Hayley tell me to be careful around Michelle).

Love Dolly x

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023

Hi Dolly. Thank you. I was just wondering if there's anything you could possibly suggest that might make the story move a bit quicker? No worries if you can't I've had a couple of people comment on it being quite slow, but I'm not so sure what to do. The rest of the book is written. After another couple of chapters we'll move back twenty years to see the friendship group living in London during the 90s and early 2000s. Thank you again.

reply by Dolly'sPoems on 20-Nov-2023

If you have already written the chapters then I would not change it at this stage as you could disrupt the flow. Love Dolly x

Comment from lancellot

Exceptional

You do a good job here of building the tension and pain of old once friends, coming together again, reluctantly. The reader gets a good sense of a raw nerve or old wound being ripped open. A very emotional chapter.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023

Thank you for the six stars. I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.

Comment from eliz100

Excellent

This is another excellent chapter. I liked the descriptions falling together inside her insides. I look forward to the next chapter. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023

Thank you.

Comment from John Ciarmello

Excellent

Hi Jacob!

I went back and read the first two chapters and am trying to get a handle on what's happening. This has a great storyline. I have to read more back chapters and keep current simultaneously. Best, JohnC

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023

Thank you John, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

Each post gives more and more hints at what might have happened that tore these friends apart. It looks as though it will be a while before what really happened come to light. What happened involved the police and Angela was acused of lying to them. William speaks of Caz as if she is dead and says Angela knew what happened to her. This mystery deepens. I look forward to more.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023

Thank you Beth.

Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

Okay so, they think she slept with William she didn't. He robbed her. Her mother went behind her back to talk to her former friends who didn't believe her in the first place. Something is hinky about Caz. And, William is trying to stir things up. Have I got it right?
Karen

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023

Thank you, there are a lot more darker secrets to be revealed.

reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 19-Nov-2023

We will see :-)