Exposed
Exposed11 total reviews
Comment from Wendyanne
I found this to be a very interesting and thought-provoking read. It must be a wonderful, uplifting feeling to be able to accept things and to accept yourself for what you are. Well done.
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I found this to be a very interesting and thought-provoking read. It must be a wonderful, uplifting feeling to be able to accept things and to accept yourself for what you are. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
Comment from estory
This is the ultimate epiphany moment. I love how you articulated this, full of emotion, and we get that movement from despair to acceptance of just being in God's world and being free to be and go wherever the winds and waters of life take you. That image of the water in the last paragraph was super; this really captures the sense of laying back and letting God take you where the landscape dictates. The cats too. They just are. One of your best. estory
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This is the ultimate epiphany moment. I love how you articulated this, full of emotion, and we get that movement from despair to acceptance of just being in God's world and being free to be and go wherever the winds and waters of life take you. That image of the water in the last paragraph was super; this really captures the sense of laying back and letting God take you where the landscape dictates. The cats too. They just are. One of your best. estory
Comment Written 20-Nov-2023
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I like the theme here of seeking for the truth within yourself and not keeping everything under wraps whilst you look outside. You speak philosophically and inspired by faith here, Iza, knowing that you simply have to be, live in the moment. Your last 5 lines are particularly well expressed. The whole post, however, needs a further proofread from the 4th line down. Otherwise, excellently done! Debbie
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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I like the theme here of seeking for the truth within yourself and not keeping everything under wraps whilst you look outside. You speak philosophically and inspired by faith here, Iza, knowing that you simply have to be, live in the moment. Your last 5 lines are particularly well expressed. The whole post, however, needs a further proofread from the 4th line down. Otherwise, excellently done! Debbie
Comment Written 19-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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Hi Debbie I know, I literally posted this 5 min before the end of my shift:)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
AMEN!! Being happy is about being who we are. We are children of God. We can rejoice in that. Thank you for sharing this with us.
I put my hope in other to bring me some meaning and establish some order. (others???)
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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AMEN!! Being happy is about being who we are. We are children of God. We can rejoice in that. Thank you for sharing this with us.
I put my hope in other to bring me some meaning and establish some order. (others???)
Comment Written 19-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much Barbara, and so sorry for my mistakes, I literally posted this 5 min before the end of my shift
Comment from BethShelby
You have discovered an important truth. You are what you are created to be. Just be 'you' because trying to someone other than who you are is denying your purpose. God loves an accepts you just as you are. You are a blessing to those around you. Relax and leave any changes up to God and don't try to reinvent yourself. You're a smart lady.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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You have discovered an important truth. You are what you are created to be. Just be 'you' because trying to someone other than who you are is denying your purpose. God loves an accepts you just as you are. You are a blessing to those around you. Relax and leave any changes up to God and don't try to reinvent yourself. You're a smart lady.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much Beth from your heart to my heart:) you are a blessing:)
Comment from Navada
I really like this philosophy of letting go and just trusting in yourself to see things through. It's a positive way of looking at life. I noticed a few little spag issues you might like to fix - "truth" in line 2, "people's", "mostly" and "others" in line 4, "questions" in line 8, two "doesn't"'s in the last three lines and two extra words in your final line. I find it helpful to run my work through a spellcheck first to help pick up these little typos. I really liked your references to your cats in this piece - if ever there were creatures who just exist for their owners and live a chill life, it's cats! Thanks for the share.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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I really like this philosophy of letting go and just trusting in yourself to see things through. It's a positive way of looking at life. I noticed a few little spag issues you might like to fix - "truth" in line 2, "people's", "mostly" and "others" in line 4, "questions" in line 8, two "doesn't"'s in the last three lines and two extra words in your final line. I find it helpful to run my work through a spellcheck first to help pick up these little typos. I really liked your references to your cats in this piece - if ever there were creatures who just exist for their owners and live a chill life, it's cats! Thanks for the share.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much Navada, thank you for the corrections and for taking the time to read my silly story.
Comment from patcelaw
The story here is beautiful. I only see one thing that you might change a little bit. You might go back and do a little bit of paragraphing so that it's not like one long paragraph. Also, in the very last line you have written like like twice. So we might want to change that. Patricia.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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The story here is beautiful. I only see one thing that you might change a little bit. You might go back and do a little bit of paragraphing so that it's not like one long paragraph. Also, in the very last line you have written like like twice. So we might want to change that. Patricia.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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Hi Pat as per your request I've done some paragraphing, it looks much much better, thank you:)
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With the paragraph and you have done a very good job of breaking it up so it is a little more understandable. I am glad I was able to help you with this.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Let the bad wash over you, been and gone. Let the good be absorbed into your very skin. When traveling life's highways remember it's the journey that counts, not the destination. Good work here.
Karen
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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Let the bad wash over you, been and gone. Let the good be absorbed into your very skin. When traveling life's highways remember it's the journey that counts, not the destination. Good work here.
Karen
Comment Written 19-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much Karen for your beautiful words... I feel so special now:)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed your philosophy here Iza and agree with you, let us not make life too complex, but breathe in the air and enjoy the fact that we are alive.
Suggestion for this line, there is a an apostrophe after people with an added (s) required here:
(I always searched in other (people's) faces)
Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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I enjoyed your philosophy here Iza and agree with you, let us not make life too complex, but breathe in the air and enjoy the fact that we are alive.
Suggestion for this line, there is a an apostrophe after people with an added (s) required here:
(I always searched in other (people's) faces)
Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 19-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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Good Evening Ms. Dolly, and thank you so much for your kind review and comments:)
Comment from lyenochka
Yes, I agree - Let there be Iza! And all you have to be is the unique you that God has made you to be. You will be a blessing because God is pleased to use us for His glory.
The true is that I have serched (The truth is that I have searched)
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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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Yes, I agree - Let there be Iza! And all you have to be is the unique you that God has made you to be. You will be a blessing because God is pleased to use us for His glory.
The true is that I have serched (The truth is that I have searched)
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Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
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Hi Hellen, thank you so much for taking the time to review my little " revelation":) and if course for the corrections as well
