Herky the Turkey
A Thanksgiving poem41 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jim,
This is a witty poem of limerick like stanzas shows us a good scheme gone bad by impatience.
I think you don't need they stuffed and cooked him in that line because that is obvious. Then that line wouldn't break the meter.
Congrats on second place in the reviewer of the month contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great weekend
Joan
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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Hi Jim,
This is a witty poem of limerick like stanzas shows us a good scheme gone bad by impatience.
I think you don't need they stuffed and cooked him in that line because that is obvious. Then that line wouldn't break the meter.
Congrats on second place in the reviewer of the month contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great weekend
Joan
Comment Written 02-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2024
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Thanks very much, Joan. Thanks also for your congrats on the reviewing contest. It's much appreciated.
I couldn't quite figure out the problem with the meter on the line you mentioned. It is iambic heptameter like all the other stanza first lines and should read the same way. It is a little longer, though, because of the length of some of the syllables. Perhaps that's what seems to throw it off for you.
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You?re welcome, Jim.
I think that you are right.
Joan
Comment from Ginda Simpson
This is a fun, rhyming verse you have penned, recording Herky's demise. It is well-written, but I doubt it will keep anyone from their Thanksgiving feast. Gobble Gobble. Happy Thanksgiving.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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This is a fun, rhyming verse you have penned, recording Herky's demise. It is well-written, but I doubt it will keep anyone from their Thanksgiving feast. Gobble Gobble. Happy Thanksgiving.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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Thanks so much, Ginda. It's not going to keep me from enjoying Thanksgiving. You have a happy one too!
Comment from Chrissy710
Ha ha Jim
A Turkey story, well told on meter and rhyme I did think you would let him live but no not to be Old Herkey met his match or even rack
Good story
Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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Ha ha Jim
A Turkey story, well told on meter and rhyme I did think you would let him live but no not to be Old Herkey met his match or even rack
Good story
Cheers Chris
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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Thanks, Chris. Too many Thanksgiving poems let him live. I thought I'd mix it up a little.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Hahahaha! Poor ol' turkey got a surprise of his own... I have to admit, that weird artwork you chose is what drew me in to read your poem, but now that I did, I enjoyed it tremendously. :))
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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Hahahaha! Poor ol' turkey got a surprise of his own... I have to admit, that weird artwork you chose is what drew me in to read your poem, but now that I did, I enjoyed it tremendously. :))
Comment Written 22-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2023
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Why, thanks, Dawn. I superimposed that mask on top of a turkey picture to make that picture.
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LOL -- it's great! So is the poem.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a masterful and moving poem about the turkey's plight. Here's two of my own you might enjoy....
BTW I'd love to feature this poem on my blog along with my Thanksgiving poem. let me know if that is okay with you. my blog is called the world according to cosmos.com
Turkey's Revolt - A Thanksgiving Dinner Nightmare
On Thanksgiving Day
The feast started late
The turkey was having a problem
He refused to go quietly
Into the oven
The turkey stood up
Screaming
What is wrong with you people?
You are going to burn me alive?
What have I done to you?
Why can't you just pardon me?
Like the President did
I mean, I am cuter than Peter Butter
And Jelly anyway
The turkey grabbed a knife
And killed the guests
Running out into the dark
Joining all the other
Suddenly woke turkeys
All screaming
"I am mad as hell
and not going to take it anymore
Death to all humans."
That was the day
that went down
As the Thanksgiving
Turkey revolt.
Another Thanksgiving Nightmare from Turkey's Point of View
Death to All Humans Turkey Screams
The big feast was ready
and the family
made its way
to the dinner table
when suddenly,
the turkey woke up,
jumping off the table
he picks up a knife
and attacks
and kills the family
screaming
"Death to all humans"
Ending the Thanksgiving Day
a feast for the family.
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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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a masterful and moving poem about the turkey's plight. Here's two of my own you might enjoy....
BTW I'd love to feature this poem on my blog along with my Thanksgiving poem. let me know if that is okay with you. my blog is called the world according to cosmos.com
Turkey's Revolt - A Thanksgiving Dinner Nightmare
On Thanksgiving Day
The feast started late
The turkey was having a problem
He refused to go quietly
Into the oven
The turkey stood up
Screaming
What is wrong with you people?
You are going to burn me alive?
What have I done to you?
Why can't you just pardon me?
Like the President did
I mean, I am cuter than Peter Butter
And Jelly anyway
The turkey grabbed a knife
And killed the guests
Running out into the dark
Joining all the other
Suddenly woke turkeys
All screaming
"I am mad as hell
and not going to take it anymore
Death to all humans."
That was the day
that went down
As the Thanksgiving
Turkey revolt.
Another Thanksgiving Nightmare from Turkey's Point of View
Death to All Humans Turkey Screams
The big feast was ready
and the family
made its way
to the dinner table
when suddenly,
the turkey woke up,
jumping off the table
he picks up a knife
and attacks
and kills the family
screaming
"Death to all humans"
Ending the Thanksgiving Day
a feast for the family.
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Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Sure. I'd be happy to have you add it to this collection of gems, Jake.
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cool I will add it to my blog posting and send you a link. Can i use your bio photo and bio to go with the piece?
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Sure.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Okay, first I laughed heartily at your notes. Second we raise chickens but have had turkeys. They are dumber than the chickens...by a neck.
This line cracked me up you witty Master Word Smith:
stupidity runs off the charts.
The rhymes were all done. The whole piece a treat! A sixer for me all day long!
D
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Okay, first I laughed heartily at your notes. Second we raise chickens but have had turkeys. They are dumber than the chickens...by a neck.
This line cracked me up you witty Master Word Smith:
stupidity runs off the charts.
The rhymes were all done. The whole piece a treat! A sixer for me all day long!
D
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Thanks so much, D. High praise coming from a comic genius such as yourself! Thanks for the 6 too.
Comment from Sally Law
This is a Thanksgiving treat and made my day. A flawless offering too, and served up right. Sending you my best today as always and a Happy Thanksgiving to you all.
Sal :))
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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This is a Thanksgiving treat and made my day. A flawless offering too, and served up right. Sending you my best today as always and a Happy Thanksgiving to you all.
Sal :))
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Thanks so much, Sally. Hope you have a wonderful Thanksgiving too.
Comment from nomi338
What an amazing and amusing story. It has not an ounce but a full pound of wisdom in it. You must keep your clever plans to yourself. Divulging your brainstorm to a rival is equivalent to experiencing a brain fart. The end result will almost always lead to your downfall, placing you on someone's plate.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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What an amazing and amusing story. It has not an ounce but a full pound of wisdom in it. You must keep your clever plans to yourself. Divulging your brainstorm to a rival is equivalent to experiencing a brain fart. The end result will almost always lead to your downfall, placing you on someone's plate.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Thanks, Nomi, for your great review and for the 6 stars too. It didn't even take industrial espionage; the silly turkey practiced in front of the whole barnyard! Have a great Thanksgiving.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
Hekey is the Turkey who is destined to be people's feast.
Why is it a tradition to serve turkey on Thanksgiving day. Why is the turkey for being the feast for everyone?
I avoid eating Turkey on Thanksgiving.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Hekey is the Turkey who is destined to be people's feast.
Why is it a tradition to serve turkey on Thanksgiving day. Why is the turkey for being the feast for everyone?
I avoid eating Turkey on Thanksgiving.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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I guess it's traditional, dating back to the time of the pilgrims who likely served wild turkey at their Thanksgiving meals. Much better tasting than goose or duck, other common choices, although I'm told wild turkeys don't taste quite like today's farm-raised turkeys.
Comment from lyenochka
Alas, poor Herky! I enjoyed your story in rhyme but I'm sad also. I think your story gives much more credence to the turkey's intelligence than what the turkey owner shared about the huddling turkeys in the sleet. However, it did make me think how community-oriented they are to suffer together. And that alone is enough to not read this to the kids as my grandson has become a vegetarian because of his love and respect for animals. But fish is alright so I'm baking salmon for him! Thanks for kicking off Thanksgiving week with your humorous post! Happy Thanksgiving!!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Alas, poor Herky! I enjoyed your story in rhyme but I'm sad also. I think your story gives much more credence to the turkey's intelligence than what the turkey owner shared about the huddling turkeys in the sleet. However, it did make me think how community-oriented they are to suffer together. And that alone is enough to not read this to the kids as my grandson has become a vegetarian because of his love and respect for animals. But fish is alright so I'm baking salmon for him! Thanks for kicking off Thanksgiving week with your humorous post! Happy Thanksgiving!!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2023
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Same to you, Helen. We won't be having turkey, unfortunately, this Thanksgiving because we are going to our daughter's house, and she doesn't like it (if you can believe it), and she'll be serving chicken instead.
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Sorry to hear but oh well, my son-in-law and grandson don't eat meat so I'm making a side of salmon. 😊💞 (not that fish isn't meat but y'know.)