Ghost
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Comment from CrystieCookie999
I think your painting is worth six stars.
I think the content of this epilogue merits six stars. And I liked reading it. I did find a few very small fixes to suggest:
It's a strange feeling coming to the end of this book. A mixture of "not yet" and "it's done".
I would put the period after done so it is inside the quotation marks.
I feel like I've written, as I have spent a lot of my life, stumbling around in the dark.
You have a contraction I've in the first phrase, but then there isn't a contraction for I have spent a lot of my life. I would either use a contraction again: as I've spent a lot of my life
or else change the I've written part to I have written
That way it is a consistent pattern.
There's just a girl inside those pages trying to stay alive.
I think I would say inside these pages
I find myself taking a deep breaths regularily.
I find myself taking a deep breath regularly.
It's funny the things we take for granted until it's not there or never experienced it.
There is a difference in the antecedent here. Maybe say:
It's funny how we take things for granted, until they are not there or are never experienced again.
or if you prefer:
It's funny how we take something for granted, until it is not there or never becomes a part of our experience.
(Hopefully I did not change the meaning of what you meant, but I was trying to show that a singular subject should be referred to in the singular, or else a plural subject should be referred to in the plural, in the entire sentence.)
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023
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I think your painting is worth six stars.
I think the content of this epilogue merits six stars. And I liked reading it. I did find a few very small fixes to suggest:
It's a strange feeling coming to the end of this book. A mixture of "not yet" and "it's done".
I would put the period after done so it is inside the quotation marks.
I feel like I've written, as I have spent a lot of my life, stumbling around in the dark.
You have a contraction I've in the first phrase, but then there isn't a contraction for I have spent a lot of my life. I would either use a contraction again: as I've spent a lot of my life
or else change the I've written part to I have written
That way it is a consistent pattern.
There's just a girl inside those pages trying to stay alive.
I think I would say inside these pages
I find myself taking a deep breaths regularily.
I find myself taking a deep breath regularly.
It's funny the things we take for granted until it's not there or never experienced it.
There is a difference in the antecedent here. Maybe say:
It's funny how we take things for granted, until they are not there or are never experienced again.
or if you prefer:
It's funny how we take something for granted, until it is not there or never becomes a part of our experience.
(Hopefully I did not change the meaning of what you meant, but I was trying to show that a singular subject should be referred to in the singular, or else a plural subject should be referred to in the plural, in the entire sentence.)
Comment Written 19-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2023
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Thank you. This is so great and valuable. I'll be thankful for your fine rating again. I really appreciate it, wow, I'm truly honest. Thank you corrections right away. Thank you so much for that. That's gold and again for your review and fine rating thanks!
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
well, it's been quite a journey, both for you and your readers. It sounds like you've come out on top of the situation, though not unscathed. I hope you understand that you have value as a person, because God made you and loves you. When the seeds of doubt creep in, remember this scripture from Jeremiah 29:11- "For I know the plans I have for you" says the Lord.
"Plans to prosper you and not to harm you. Plans to give you a hope and a future." I hope God reveals the plans He has for you clearly, and that you will hang on to His promise, though your life has been filled with difficulty. Have a blessed evening gal.
Tom
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Hello Lea,
well, it's been quite a journey, both for you and your readers. It sounds like you've come out on top of the situation, though not unscathed. I hope you understand that you have value as a person, because God made you and loves you. When the seeds of doubt creep in, remember this scripture from Jeremiah 29:11- "For I know the plans I have for you" says the Lord.
"Plans to prosper you and not to harm you. Plans to give you a hope and a future." I hope God reveals the plans He has for you clearly, and that you will hang on to His promise, though your life has been filled with difficulty. Have a blessed evening gal.
Tom
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you Tom so much for your kindness. For your words of hope and empathy. Thank you for hanging in there with me too while I go through this process. Very fine review thank you for that too I don't know if i'm leaving!
Comment from JSD
My last six for you this week in response to the cumulative effect of your wonderful spirit and your wonderful writing. If you weren't on the other side of the Atlantic I'd come and give you a big hug. You'll have to have a virtual one instead. Stay strong and don't stop writing. You're brilliant.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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My last six for you this week in response to the cumulative effect of your wonderful spirit and your wonderful writing. If you weren't on the other side of the Atlantic I'd come and give you a big hug. You'll have to have a virtual one instead. Stay strong and don't stop writing. You're brilliant.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you again for this wonderful gift I so appreciate it!
Comment from BethShelby
You certainly got your share of talents. Your family should be incredibly proud of you. It hard for me to see you as a ghost because a ghost is pale semi-invisible creature who really has no power. You sister seems more ghost like. You have always had the will survive and the desire to fight back and once you were a teenager you did fight back and you won your independence. I expect the next part of you story will show you gut and backbone even more. I'm surprised that you name it Spectre because that is just another term for ghost.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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You certainly got your share of talents. Your family should be incredibly proud of you. It hard for me to see you as a ghost because a ghost is pale semi-invisible creature who really has no power. You sister seems more ghost like. You have always had the will survive and the desire to fight back and once you were a teenager you did fight back and you won your independence. I expect the next part of you story will show you gut and backbone even more. I'm surprised that you name it Spectre because that is just another term for ghost.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you for this really kind review. Your empathy is amazing for writing and your curiosity is also amazing as well! Thank you again my friend. You're fine with you and you're fine rating. I'm honored to received. I hope you have a wonderful evening! Oh the main spectre is following a particular path i'm trying to take There will be three and total books I mean. Thank you again My dear friends for all you have said for all your kind. Reduce all of your wonderful suggestions Have a great evening!
Comment from Jim Wile
Yes, it was a difficult journey, Lea, but well worth the trip. You taught us a lot about perversion, psychopathy, narcissism, sadism, cruelty, laziness, slavery, and all the worst attributes of man as exhibited by your parents and grandmother, as well as the apathy, gullibility, and groupthink of your other relatives.
But on the other hand, you also taught us about strength of character, determination, survivorship skills, creative thinking and planning, grit, a strong ethical compass, and many other positives as exemplified by you. I am truly in awe of how you came through your first 16 years--not completely unblemished--but intact. There are not enough superlatives in my vocabulary for me to express my admiration for you and your ability to survive this ordeal.
I look forward to Book 2 to see how you ended up dealing with all of this when it was over. You certainly deserve a few breaks now, and I hope you got them. You did an outstanding job of presenting your story, Lea. - Jim
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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Yes, it was a difficult journey, Lea, but well worth the trip. You taught us a lot about perversion, psychopathy, narcissism, sadism, cruelty, laziness, slavery, and all the worst attributes of man as exhibited by your parents and grandmother, as well as the apathy, gullibility, and groupthink of your other relatives.
But on the other hand, you also taught us about strength of character, determination, survivorship skills, creative thinking and planning, grit, a strong ethical compass, and many other positives as exemplified by you. I am truly in awe of how you came through your first 16 years--not completely unblemished--but intact. There are not enough superlatives in my vocabulary for me to express my admiration for you and your ability to survive this ordeal.
I look forward to Book 2 to see how you ended up dealing with all of this when it was over. You certainly deserve a few breaks now, and I hope you got them. You did an outstanding job of presenting your story, Lea. - Jim
Comment Written 17-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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Thank you again my friend you are amazing person!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It sounds like the worst is over for you here Lea and perhaps you will find your identify and feel worthy now that you have survived. Life has so much to offer us and when we have a bad start we think it is never worth the journey, but we learn that there are so many joys to come. A fine end of chapter and I look forward to the reading about the next chapter in your life, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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It sounds like the worst is over for you here Lea and perhaps you will find your identify and feel worthy now that you have survived. Life has so much to offer us and when we have a bad start we think it is never worth the journey, but we learn that there are so many joys to come. A fine end of chapter and I look forward to the reading about the next chapter in your life, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 17-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you, darling, you've been amazingly kind to me. I appreciate it more than you know. I also appreciate your fine reviews too. Speak generally hit it right on the nail which is what I like. Appreciate this and all the other reviews you have done too. Thank you so much. Wishing you an amazing day!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
You're so welcome, Lea! And thank you for sharing this part of your life with strength and courage. The 'Ghost' in your writing and that loss - or even absence - in the first place of any identity has been heart-rendingly captured throughout your impressively expressed book. I look forward to reading the next. Take care! Love Debbie x
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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You're so welcome, Lea! And thank you for sharing this part of your life with strength and courage. The 'Ghost' in your writing and that loss - or even absence - in the first place of any identity has been heart-rendingly captured throughout your impressively expressed book. I look forward to reading the next. Take care! Love Debbie x
Comment Written 17-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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W you're so very kind, and thank you so very much, really.
Thanks, I am honored truly by your kind words. Thank you for this awesome radio too. If you're fine waiting always nice to have you here!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Okay!! You've done it! Step One, completed. CHECK!!
I'm so happy for you, Lea, and so immensely proud of you, too. You are a remarkable, self-motivated, clear-headed SURVIVOR. You're also amazingly KIND and COMPASSIONATE and GENEROUS with your words and thoughts to others at all times. And you're very smart and a superior writer, impressively in command of your syntax and feelings.
I can't wait until this heart-wrenching book is out on the shelves in every store imaginable, both in your country and mine.
xoxox
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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Okay!! You've done it! Step One, completed. CHECK!!
I'm so happy for you, Lea, and so immensely proud of you, too. You are a remarkable, self-motivated, clear-headed SURVIVOR. You're also amazingly KIND and COMPASSIONATE and GENEROUS with your words and thoughts to others at all times. And you're very smart and a superior writer, impressively in command of your syntax and feelings.
I can't wait until this heart-wrenching book is out on the shelves in every store imaginable, both in your country and mine.
xoxox
Comment Written 17-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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I'm gonna keep this one forever. I don't know what to say, except thank you so much.
It's interesting the mixed emotions I get inside not being proud. Others are like wait a minute Who said you deserve that. Old programming? I wish I could get rid of but it's going leave me. My gratitude to YOU my friend!
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I'm a Jewish Mommie, and that means I just LOVE to repeat myself! It is, in fact, my birthright. So I'll just keep repeating and repeating and repeating to you until your Little Voice starts saying it inside your head. xoxo
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Lol...thank you so much!!
Comment from Chuck Keller
What you've shared is the tragedy that made part 2 possible.
I know very well the feeling of being a slave.
Sad but character building.
Life is a river we ride the currents, go through rapids, eddies, calm waters and occasional water falls until we reach the ultimate sea.
I look forward to seeing book 2
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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What you've shared is the tragedy that made part 2 possible.
I know very well the feeling of being a slave.
Sad but character building.
Life is a river we ride the currents, go through rapids, eddies, calm waters and occasional water falls until we reach the ultimate sea.
I look forward to seeing book 2
Comment Written 17-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Such fluidity you have when you write! Thank you again shock. I really appreciate you hanging in there. I might sound like A broken record that's been broken twice over. I hope your evening is grand!
Comment from damommy
Beautiful painting. I'm glad this ordeal is over for you. Now, to see what comes next and how you've pulled your life together. I'm hanging with you, so you hang in there, too.
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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Beautiful painting. I'm glad this ordeal is over for you. Now, to see what comes next and how you've pulled your life together. I'm hanging with you, so you hang in there, too.
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Comment Written 17-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much. That's so kind of you to say I appreciate that wow. I appreciate your review as well and for your fine rating. I thank you too for your kind support which is important to me. I thank you for reading along I hope you have the best evening!