Life of a Mob Wife
Inspired by the movie Goodfellas10 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
You have given a wonderful image of this film and the character of Karen,
I don't know much about music though would like to hear this as a song, it has great rhyme and flow and I think would sound wonderful, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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You have given a wonderful image of this film and the character of Karen,
I don't know much about music though would like to hear this as a song, it has great rhyme and flow and I think would sound wonderful, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 13-May-2024
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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Thank you so much :)
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This was so enjoyable. I love your storytelling in this poem. You showed the excitement of the early romance to the turmoil of a troubled relationship so well. I thought the emotions came through well. My favorite part of the poem was the defiance shown with the the possession of a gun and the decision not to use it. I thought the poem was about showing inner strength and determination to take control of ones own destiny.
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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This was so enjoyable. I love your storytelling in this poem. You showed the excitement of the early romance to the turmoil of a troubled relationship so well. I thought the emotions came through well. My favorite part of the poem was the defiance shown with the the possession of a gun and the decision not to use it. I thought the poem was about showing inner strength and determination to take control of ones own destiny.
Comment Written 13-May-2024
reply by the author on 26-May-2024
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Thank you, i appreciate it! :)
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very writing. What you're telling about the mob wife should make everyone stop and think about wanting to marry the bad guy. And I am sure that most of those wives fell in love with the bad guy because they thought he was cool. I enjoyed your poem very much, and I wish you the best in the contest. patricia.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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This is a very writing. What you're telling about the mob wife should make everyone stop and think about wanting to marry the bad guy. And I am sure that most of those wives fell in love with the bad guy because they thought he was cool. I enjoyed your poem very much, and I wish you the best in the contest. patricia.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, it is much appreciated :)
Comment from Wendyanne
This is quite a good story told in poetic style in which you have used rhymes and near rhymes very effectively. I enjoyed reading this and I wish you good luck.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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This is quite a good story told in poetic style in which you have used rhymes and near rhymes very effectively. I enjoyed reading this and I wish you good luck.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, I appreciate it :)
Comment from JSD
This is an excellent piece of poetry and I definitely saw the story of 'Goodfellas' as I read it. That was crystal clear. The only thing I would correct is your ending. 'Pull' refers to the trigger, which you haven't mentioned. You either need to say 'Fire' instead of 'Pull' or you need an extra line, like 'finger on the trigger'.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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This is an excellent piece of poetry and I definitely saw the story of 'Goodfellas' as I read it. That was crystal clear. The only thing I would correct is your ending. 'Pull' refers to the trigger, which you haven't mentioned. You either need to say 'Fire' instead of 'Pull' or you need an extra line, like 'finger on the trigger'.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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I really appreciate your input! I agree a difference in words would make better sense. Thank you so much for taking the time to read my poem :)
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
I know something about this from my ex husband and family. It's always an intriguing topic from far. You do make it sound like a song and that's good. The fantasy of the mob is alluring but the reality is not. I had some uninvited guest at my beautiful ex wedding on my 21st birthday. Famous names but I won't put them in writing. I'm personally really into those spoof movies like, Analze This. I laugh so hard. I have a lifelong restraining order against my ex who is a businessman of sorts. one day I'll write something about abuse the women go through from pure fear.
Excell writing and presentation!
Alex
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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I know something about this from my ex husband and family. It's always an intriguing topic from far. You do make it sound like a song and that's good. The fantasy of the mob is alluring but the reality is not. I had some uninvited guest at my beautiful ex wedding on my 21st birthday. Famous names but I won't put them in writing. I'm personally really into those spoof movies like, Analze This. I laugh so hard. I have a lifelong restraining order against my ex who is a businessman of sorts. one day I'll write something about abuse the women go through from pure fear.
Excell writing and presentation!
Alex
Comment Written 17-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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I am so sorry for what you went through, but I hope the present is better than the past! Thank you for your kind words and taking the time to read my poem :)
Comment from l.raven
Hi Kelsey, it sounds like The Ballad of Bonnie and Clyde...
Goodfellas is one of my all time top moves...
along with Bronx Tale...
years ago my parents lived in Chicago...close to
Al Capone...my grandfather had a roofing company there...
and he roofed Al Capones house...well...they got to know each
other...and became good friends...they were both big gamblers...
and had money...wasn't long before my uncle Bud got a job driving
for Al Capone...but my grandmother didn't like my grandfather
gambling with Al Capone...so she gave him the choice to move
to Florida with her...or stay with Al...well...they spent the rest of their
lives living in Florida...
I love your story told...very well written my friend...and love your
picture...
I often wondered what it would belike to be a mob wife...it would
take a strong woman...someone who could deal with being pushed
around...well done...Love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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Hi Kelsey, it sounds like The Ballad of Bonnie and Clyde...
Goodfellas is one of my all time top moves...
along with Bronx Tale...
years ago my parents lived in Chicago...close to
Al Capone...my grandfather had a roofing company there...
and he roofed Al Capones house...well...they got to know each
other...and became good friends...they were both big gamblers...
and had money...wasn't long before my uncle Bud got a job driving
for Al Capone...but my grandmother didn't like my grandfather
gambling with Al Capone...so she gave him the choice to move
to Florida with her...or stay with Al...well...they spent the rest of their
lives living in Florida...
I love your story told...very well written my friend...and love your
picture...
I often wondered what it would belike to be a mob wife...it would
take a strong woman...someone who could deal with being pushed
around...well done...Love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 17-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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Wow what a story! I believe your grandfather made the right choice :) Thank you for reading my poem and for your kind words. Best wishes to you!
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your so very welcome Kelsey...love xxoo
Comment from Lisa Cuff
Goodfellas is quite the inspiration. Generally liked the poem, and is generally a good poem, but feel it had a few rough spots like: It became a normal routine
He always reigned supreme
And the danger turned me on
The flow wasn't there, but I believe can easily be fixed.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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Goodfellas is quite the inspiration. Generally liked the poem, and is generally a good poem, but feel it had a few rough spots like: It became a normal routine
He always reigned supreme
And the danger turned me on
The flow wasn't there, but I believe can easily be fixed.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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Thank you for your input I appreciate it :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I expect being married to a gangster would be quite challenging as the threat of death would be wildly alive and damning. I am glad this kind of world has never touched my life. A fun post, I was entertained, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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I expect being married to a gangster would be quite challenging as the threat of death would be wildly alive and damning. I am glad this kind of world has never touched my life. A fun post, I was entertained, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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Thank you :)
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a very different post (on this site anyway) and I found it quite intriguing to read. The role of the mobster's wife seems to be captured well with a sense of resignation to the life she once led. Now she's broken free, there is a poignancy in that final stanza that, though she had the opportunity to kill him, at the end of the day, there's still some feeling left for this man. Harsh realities conveyed powerfully in this free verse. Well done! Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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This is a very different post (on this site anyway) and I found it quite intriguing to read. The role of the mobster's wife seems to be captured well with a sense of resignation to the life she once led. Now she's broken free, there is a poignancy in that final stanza that, though she had the opportunity to kill him, at the end of the day, there's still some feeling left for this man. Harsh realities conveyed powerfully in this free verse. Well done! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 15-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much, I appreciate it :)
