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Miranda's Trouble In Paradise

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Miranda tries to find Dougie.

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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I'm smiling big time! I'm so pleased Miranda and Mitch are back together. Now she has him on her side, and will help her find Dougie. More for Waylon's sake than hers. But she needs to find him and end the mystery. Well done, this was a brilliant chapter!! :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 27-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
    Thanks so much. Couldn't keep those two apart for long. Gretchen
Comment from eliz100
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This is an excellent chapter. I am intrigued and want to keep on reading. You are so right about secrets. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
    Thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from estory
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I liked the lively, emotional dialogue in this post, you orchestrated some moving scenes in which we see and feel how much the characters care about each other. It's all those little details in the describing the kitchen gadgets from the seventies, the way the guy moves around the table, that place us there with the characters in the room. I liked this line: What is so intimidating about saying the word Love? You really bring all the fears of commitment that hold us all back, and give us some feelings we all can identify with, to empathize with your characters. The suspense is also building here. We feel the importance of finding the missing Doug, but we also have to wonder how he will stir up the relationships between the other characters. Interesting chapter. estory

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 20-Nov-2023
    Thanks so much. Gretchen
Comment from Brett Matthew West
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These storyline sure have changed in this book.

Star six nine will tell you what number called.

Have actually purchased groceries in a Piggly Wiggly before. In Omaha, Nebraska, of all places.

 Comment Written 17-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
    We have a Piggly Wiggly about thirty minutes down the road. The name cracks me up. Thanks so much fir this. Gretchen
Comment from w.j.debi
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Wish I had a six left. The dialogue is extremely well done. It's like watching a movie of real life. You do a great job of bringing out human emotions and foibles. I'm so glad Miranda and Mitch have made up.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
    Thank you. I'm so glad you're caught up. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
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Hello Gretchen,
I liked this chapter. I was glad to see Miranda got back with Mitch. Pride can be such a miserable thing at times. It's going to be interesting to see who made the phone call. Thanks for sharing.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
    Thanks so much. Pride can ruin relationships pretty quickly. Gretchen
Comment from BethShelby
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It is relief that Miranda made up with Mitch. I'm sure it is for her and she's going to bring him to helping her figure out the mystery. I"m also anxious to know how the therapy session will go. This is a story I always enjoy reading.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
    Therapy is up next. Lol. Poor therapist. She has probably never dealt with someone like Miranda. Thanks for this. Gretchen
Comment from John Ciarmello
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Yah!! I knew they'd get back together. Miranda telling Waylon Love ya is an excellent start to their growing relationship.

Great chapter, as always! Best, JohnC

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
    She has good instincts with Waylon. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Yay! I was hoping Mitch and Miranda would make up. That was really sweet. I wonder who was on the phone. Trust is so important to have a healthy relationship, whe it's broken nothing else works.

Well done! I love your new chapter.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
    Thank you. I'm glad you liked it. Couldn't keep Mitch and Miranda apart for too long. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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"At least, now I have someone I can trust helping me tug that strand of secrets out." I am so glad Miranda is finally able to ask for help and admit verbally that she'd in love with Mitch. I'm glad Mitch loves and understands her enough to accept who she is. You worked this out perfectly.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2023


reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
    Thanks so much. I'm glad you liked this. Gretchen