Ghost
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Comment from royowen
Obviously it did keep you alive, you were wise to gather some food and drink to sustain you, you might have been dead after this, there have been some murders, it doesn't profit the murdered child however, well done Lea, blessings Roy
Typo : And out the (w)window
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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Obviously it did keep you alive, you were wise to gather some food and drink to sustain you, you might have been dead after this, there have been some murders, it doesn't profit the murdered child however, well done Lea, blessings Roy
Typo : And out the (w)window
Comment Written 25-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much Roy for reading again I appreciate this so much once again apologies for my late reply I wish you the best over the holidays and I hope that you are well thank you again!
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Most welcome
Comment from Austin Yu
A mysterious tone can be felt throughout your short stories, which is excellent, from the way the narrator encounters strange things. In addition, your imagery is well-pronounced throughout the lines of your story, which is great. Merry Christmas!
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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A mysterious tone can be felt throughout your short stories, which is excellent, from the way the narrator encounters strange things. In addition, your imagery is well-pronounced throughout the lines of your story, which is great. Merry Christmas!
Comment Written 25-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Thank you Austin I hope you had a wonderful Christmas and I hope your new year is going to be even better thank you again for your kind review I'm very thankful for it and I appreciate seeing your name come up thank you again enjoy your day and may your New year's be awesome!
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
I understand the reasoning for going back into the house, but I'm afraid I would have been too scared to even attempt it. Part of me would be so paranoid that they would have expected me to show that they would have hidden the cars and waited quietly until I showed. You were very brave- I suppose in part driven by desperation. I'm glad you got back out of the house undetected.
Blessings,
Tom
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
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Hello Lea,
I understand the reasoning for going back into the house, but I'm afraid I would have been too scared to even attempt it. Part of me would be so paranoid that they would have expected me to show that they would have hidden the cars and waited quietly until I showed. You were very brave- I suppose in part driven by desperation. I'm glad you got back out of the house undetected.
Blessings,
Tom
Comment Written 15-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
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Thank you, Tom. Yeah, it was a had to. I couldn't go walking to my friends without shoes. would pretty tough I had to take the chance. Sometimes I wonder at my teenage self too. If I had brains.
Thank you again my friend bless you always!
Comment from JSD
More of the same brilliant writing. Again, the poem is spectacular and the epilogue and prologue frame the panic so beautifully and cleverly. My heart is so light at the hope that the future holds for you. x
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
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More of the same brilliant writing. Again, the poem is spectacular and the epilogue and prologue frame the panic so beautifully and cleverly. My heart is so light at the hope that the future holds for you. x
Comment Written 14-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
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Thank you, John, thank you so very much. You always have kind things to say and constructive ones too. They are so very helpful! And I hope santa is especially good to you this year! Thanks again!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Sneaking in, sneaking out, and only able to take bread, jam, a thermos, toothbrush, and hairbrush. Such a small collection of things to support escaping or running again shows how very young you were, really. Just trying to keep from getting dehydrated again, it sounds like.
The only suggestion I have is this sentence here:
I also knew though, that prayer had to be accompanied with action.
I would say instead of 'with action' that 'by action' sounds better. It is true not only if there is a coupling of equal terms but even in music.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
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Sneaking in, sneaking out, and only able to take bread, jam, a thermos, toothbrush, and hairbrush. Such a small collection of things to support escaping or running again shows how very young you were, really. Just trying to keep from getting dehydrated again, it sounds like.
The only suggestion I have is this sentence here:
I also knew though, that prayer had to be accompanied with action.
I would say instead of 'with action' that 'by action' sounds better. It is true not only if there is a coupling of equal terms but even in music.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
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Thank you that's a great suggestion I shall go ahead and make that edit. Thank you so much for your great review again. I appreciate you and all your comments. Yes I certainly was young yes indeed I hope your day is amazing. I thank you again for reading and hanging in there with me!
Comment from Kerry L Batchelder
Again, disturbing as I have read further into the life of a young girl with no one to turn to for help. So desperate. So innocent. So undeserving of such violence and fear at such a young age. You are indeed a
true miracle.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Again, disturbing as I have read further into the life of a young girl with no one to turn to for help. So desperate. So innocent. So undeserving of such violence and fear at such a young age. You are indeed a
true miracle.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Thank Wow, this is wonderful, a review. Thank you so much. I so appreciate It has no one ever really listened to find here that people are listening like yourself. I so appreciate this. I really, really do I know I'm sounding like a broken record. I hope you have an amazing night thank you again!
Comment from thoughtgame2
Pretty interesting this chapter of ghost. I can feel the storyline as you explain. I don't want to sound like someone who just says what they think others want to hear. I really do believe from the moment I read your first piece that you are chosen to talk to the masses in this way as I am. Thank you for sharing while you are here. It makes all the difference to me. Never stop. Thank you.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2023
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Pretty interesting this chapter of ghost. I can feel the storyline as you explain. I don't want to sound like someone who just says what they think others want to hear. I really do believe from the moment I read your first piece that you are chosen to talk to the masses in this way as I am. Thank you for sharing while you are here. It makes all the difference to me. Never stop. Thank you.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much. That's such a great review. I shall appreciate your comments too. So happy to see you here riding along this journey with me. No I won't stop it will continue until the script of my life does. Thank you again my friend!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
It's the indifference they had to your departure which sums up this pair! Your stealthy actions to return and collect all you needed are so methodically remembered. Once again, this is a survival test. You know the drill and, hopefully, you can find some saviour to help you. Just a small edit with 'window' at the end of para starting: "I flew up the stairs..." Thank you once more for another excellent piece. Take care Debbie x
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2023
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It's the indifference they had to your departure which sums up this pair! Your stealthy actions to return and collect all you needed are so methodically remembered. Once again, this is a survival test. You know the drill and, hopefully, you can find some saviour to help you. Just a small edit with 'window' at the end of para starting: "I flew up the stairs..." Thank you once more for another excellent piece. Take care Debbie x
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2023
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Thank you, daddy for your diligence for your Eagle. Eye. For your edit suggestions for all your kind comments amazing thank you!
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Whoops, you called me daddy...
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No way really? Omg
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Don't worry. I'd like to say I've been called a lot worse. But, in this case, I'm not sure about that! xos
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Lol
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Lol
Comment from LJbutterfly
I'm so glad to read you are out of the house of horrors once again. You spent another night in the woods and your mother never cared, just like she never cared when you were gone for six months. You are now free...free for another adventure. What will happen now? What will life bring? You are still only a teenager. You are still fighting to survive.
Your picture with your dogs is delightful. You are smiling. You are sifting through all of the hurt and ugly, and are coming up with answers as you write it all down. You are a survivor.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2023
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I'm so glad to read you are out of the house of horrors once again. You spent another night in the woods and your mother never cared, just like she never cared when you were gone for six months. You are now free...free for another adventure. What will happen now? What will life bring? You are still only a teenager. You are still fighting to survive.
Your picture with your dogs is delightful. You are smiling. You are sifting through all of the hurt and ugly, and are coming up with answers as you write it all down. You are a survivor.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much I still appreciate you you have no idea! This book will end soon. But I was wholly unprepared for the world the people I picked Or the wrong ones I had no idea what I Was doing so many things happened along the way I had to leave A long distance to get away from them but that is another story in itself It will be from when I left to today. This book will be called Spectre. I'm thinking about writing auto bio. As I don't have to think about what comes next. I already know so it just falls out of my proverbial pen. Once again I thank you so very much. And it's great to see you here. Waiting along and going on this journey withanks so much hope your day's great!
Comment from Jim Wile
The tension was formidable as you made your way back home and into your house to gather up your belongings and some food before leaving for the last time. What a relief that must have been to encounter no one and to retrieve the bus money you would need to get well away. Way to go, Lea!
Let's hope this indeed will be the last time you have to enter that house--the place of torment and cruelty that no child should ever have to suffer at the hands of parents no child should ever be so unlucky to have. You escaped with your life and your sanity intact, which is no small achievement. - Jim
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2023
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The tension was formidable as you made your way back home and into your house to gather up your belongings and some food before leaving for the last time. What a relief that must have been to encounter no one and to retrieve the bus money you would need to get well away. Way to go, Lea!
Let's hope this indeed will be the last time you have to enter that house--the place of torment and cruelty that no child should ever have to suffer at the hands of parents no child should ever be so unlucky to have. You escaped with your life and your sanity intact, which is no small achievement. - Jim
Comment Written 13-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2023
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Hi Jim no I never did go back ever. But I was wholly unprepared for the world realpha who I could be hard. Get a job. Pay some bills end of story. I was in for a world of learning the hard way. That's required and then of course, I'm never sure about how to go about publishing. I have asked for advice and then beginning given some solid information. So thank you so happy to have you here with me. You're really your reviews are amazing! I thank you and hope your day is fabulous!